Phoenix Unbalance

The Story is called Phoenix Unbalance. It takes place in the time where there are kingdoms and such, much like of how the state of the world is in Shadow of the Colossus. Humans have just begun to populate the Earth. God, caring for the humans charged different creatures with control of the elements, with the intent of help the humans advance further. The creature who controlled Fire, the Phoenix neglected his purpose and used it for his own pleasure. He was killed again and again, but because he rose from his ashes he would just cause more trouble. Finally as a severe punishment the phoenix was made a human and forced to live one miserable life after another without memory of who he was. It has been 1000 years now and life after life the phoenix, or rather Setsuna has remembered his past little by little, and the fate he had been suffering all this time. His current life is that of a prince, and his full memory is now recovered, as well as some of his powers. He left on a goal, to revive the phoenix by retrieving items that will free him from that form.

Go ahead and criticize if you want, but I like this. Some CnC would be nice on both the art and story. I could also use some people to help me with the story, characters etc.