Lynny request sketch #1

It's fuzzy, I was hoping it wouldn't be. Okay, down to buisness.<br />
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This is a rough idea for a cover piece of a story that will be featured at a high school in Washington state. Of course, I'm sure the teachers know all about the copyright issues, right Lynny? ^_^ If anyone gets a chance to read Lynny's Metropolis story, do it. I-N-C-R-E-D-I-B-L-E. Get in touch with me and I'll give you the info. Assuming that she will post it on ff.net or anywhere else. Anyway, wording is hard to see, so I'll sum it up.<br />
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Duke Red, in the middle of course. Rock to the right, Tima to the left. This sketch, if you choose to go with this idea, would be best complimented with thick line in ink, in a messy sort of way, and thick ,deep colors. It is of abstract quality. Now, I don't know if you were going for abstract or more realistic.<br />
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Tima's gait is slightly off, just a little bit crooked. I had the idea of giving her shadow a bit of a reddish hue, and any other shadows on her body deep colors, very lightly contrasting to the others. There is not a glance of Tima's face in the picture (un like Rock and the Duke). With a slight crooked footing and a shadow with slight color allteration, I believe it would give the viewer a slightly nervous feel, almost as if they know that something is going to happen to this girl, the question is, what? Just taking a quick glance at Tima in this condition, a person might not think too much of it. I believe this is good because I didn't want to make it too obvious about what's going to happen. Sorry, it's such a rough sketch. However, if you do like this one, e-mail me with any allterations you want to make and I'll work from there. Just give me your idea. Was I close?