Last Pilgrimage

I really like this piece I think I'm doing well with the Prisma Colored Markers. Please comment.<br />
Anyway heres the story about this guy, it might be a little long. His people worship The Great Spider, who they all think they decend from (because they have eight appendeges). And there are quite a few smaller spiders running around his planet, kinda like here. Well it is apparently a great honor to be bitten by one, as this is seen as you being chosen by the god spider. Of course all the spiders on this planet are poisonous, and since they worship them and think its a good thing to be bitten they have no cure. So if you are bitten by one (which is pretty rare), you are to go on the last pilgrimage, which is basically a journey to go to the dying grounds. You are allowed to take one possession, a days supply of food, and a sacred spear. It takes three days to get there and since youre sick and only have one days worth of food most dont make it there and they do not get a priviladged places in the afterlife. This guy has taken his mount as his possession and he has to ride to the dying grounds and plant the sacred spear (what hes holding) strait up from the ground, then he'll die. When the next thunderstorm comes by if his spear is struck by lightning it means that he has been taken to the cave of The Great Spider as a worthy warrior and a high ranking member in the afterlife. I hope he makes it. <br />
I know that was kinda long but thats what I was thinking when I drew this, please tell me what you think.