Ravenstar's story pt4

first off sorry for how big it is and second here are the 1st 2nd and 3rd parts
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"Cats from all over started to say, 'because of trespassing.' 'because of prey stealers.' (4) But she wasn't listening. She had walked up to Goldensun's body, and rested her nose on Goldensun's head. Then she went to Redstar, and all the other cat who were dead."
pt4
Spikefur paused as Brightpaw started fidgeting.
"What's wrong?"
"Well I can't believe that she really stopped the battle, and I'm excited. Please keep going."
"Haha ok. (1) She went back and stood in front of Tallrock, and said, 'The fighting is over! No more! We will have peace between us!' Everyone was stunned. She seem to be taller then Tallrock, with as much pride and confidence came from her."
"Wasn't she scared?" Brightpaw asked confused.
"Not that anyone could tell. So then we hear a voice from behind us, we all turned to see who it was. (2) It was Mapletail, he was saying, 'The first prophecy of Ravenstar has come and gone! There will be peace for many moons and seasons. Thank you Ravenstar.' And as soon as he finished talking the clouds parted and the rain stopped, and the moon shone down on Ravenstar. Lots of cats gasped, other just stood and watched, not knowing what was going on. (3) Then something amazing happened, all the cats that were dead, we saw their spirits come from their bodies. (4) Then what seemed to be all of Starclan was standing around us, and right in front of Ravenstar was nine cats. Goldensun, Redstar, her sister Smoothpaw, her brother Deeprain, Her best friend Shinefur, and her father Lightheart were among the nine. Then I noticed something, Ravenstar wasn't completely black anymore."
Brightpaw jumped up saying, "Wait she didn't always have white on her?!?"
"HAHAHA." Spikefur couldn't help but laugh at the shock on Brightpaw face
"No she didn't. May i continue?"
"Oh sorry."
"She was slowly getting white on the tips of her ears, and on her paws and tail tip. And then on her face a white star."

well that's the end of that one hope you like^^
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can you notice anything different about this one then the others