Sun and Moon (Bleach Doujinshi) Prologue page 2

OMG poor Toushirou...(last panel. ^^')

Once again, leaving the Nihongo where it is so people can tell me how to improve the dialogue. Just Toushirou and Rangiku are in this page. As well as the next one.

panel 1: Taiyou...(Sun's shinigami name, remember)
panel 5 a: Yoku...
b: ...deki...
panel 6: ...mashi ta!!!!!!!!!!!!

(Yoku dekimashi ta: I know this one is right; I learned it in my Japanese class. Basically means "well done", "congratulations", etc.)

Song stuck in my head at the moment: Bohemian Rhapsody by Queen (yay!!! ^^)

I've also changed my pen name!!! I noticed that instead of just the kanji for "shiawase" in my awesome pocket Japanese dictionary, there was a kanji and the hiragana for "se". When I write my pen name, I'd like to have it all kanji, so I changed "se" to "sei", which is another word for "soul". Lucky soul.....my name is a lie... XP "Moriko" is still the same, though.

I know "mashi" and "ta" are all one word....my computer thought I was spelling something profane and changed it to "mashoota".....XP

HOLY CRAP I NEED A BETTER SCANNER....................... T.T