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Chapter 5 - Snake Beats Frog (When Sasuke and Naruto are being

These are little poems, most likely an offshoot from ShinobiWolf's Broken Song. If anyone reads this who knows ShinobiWolf, please tell him/her to read this. I'd like the critiscm so I can write better.

Chapter 5 - Snake Beats Frog (When Sasuke and Naruto are being

Chapter 5 - Snake Beats Frog (When Sasuke and Naruto are being
Snake Beats Frog
(Sasuke beats Naruto/When they are apprentices of Orochi and Pervert-Sennin)

In the present, we are apprentices
We're not teammates any more
But seeing Naruto on the ground
Disturbs my heart to the core
I'm an avenger to heart and mind
And I think I know that well
But Naruto is unmoving, still
A fallen ninja, who never fell
Before we grew up and attained Chuunin
And my insides fill with dread
Orochimaru always said to me
Not to let killing get to your heart or head
But it has gotten to me
And I'm feeling so much pain
I've done something wrong
And no one else will take the blame
I've killed my teammate
Nothing more to be said
Naruto was my teammate and still is
And I've killed my teammate...the thought fills me with dread

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Sesshys_Bitch on March 15, 2006, 1:18:22 PM

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Sesshys_BitchIs that from when they're fighting at the end Valley or whatever it's called?.....No it cant be because Ero-sennin isn't in that part........-_-

TailsNejiswife on February 8, 2006, 10:05:03 AM

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TailsNejiswifeWAHHHHHHH
U LIE SASUKE COULDN'T HAVE KILLED NARUTO THATS SO WRONG

Narufan on January 29, 2006, 11:58:05 AM

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NarufanYAOI!SASUKE NO KILL NARUTO!WAHHHHHHHHHHHH!

i_luv_kyo on January 7, 2006, 3:43:42 AM

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i_luv_kyothis one is probably my second favorite.

this is a nice one...

narutogirlninja on January 7, 2006, 3:27:47 AM

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narutogirlninjapoor naruto...... sad. -_-