Chapter 1 - 1
Submitted June 30, 2005 Updated June 30, 2005 Status Incomplete | a poem about the beauty of a fairy.
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Chapter 1 - 1
Chapter 1 - 1
Sapphire eyes,
An angel’s voice.
Wings made of purple velvet,
And skin as soft as rose petals.
She flies above the long green meadow,
Over the trickling brook.
Across the rolling hills,
To a forest mad of dreams.
Puddles made by her tears,
Sunshine from her beauty.
Snowflakes from her smile,
Rainbows when she’s happy.
A world made just for her,
A dream made into life.
Every wish comes true,
Fantasy is her world.
To write about a fairy’s beauty,
My poem gives no justice.
Our imagination gives her beauty,
It’s all because of us!
An angel’s voice.
Wings made of purple velvet,
And skin as soft as rose petals.
She flies above the long green meadow,
Over the trickling brook.
Across the rolling hills,
To a forest mad of dreams.
Puddles made by her tears,
Sunshine from her beauty.
Snowflakes from her smile,
Rainbows when she’s happy.
A world made just for her,
A dream made into life.
Every wish comes true,
Fantasy is her world.
To write about a fairy’s beauty,
My poem gives no justice.
Our imagination gives her beauty,
It’s all because of us!
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kos on September 24, 2005, 2:00:57 AM
kos on
x_art_lovin_chick_x on August 15, 2005, 7:30:54 PM
i love this poem as i love all ur otherstheGhostofInuYasha on July 1, 2005, 4:07:10 AM
It's all because of us....That's so beautiful! I love it!
*favez*
If I was going to be picky, I'd point out the over use of some words and phrases like "made of" (lines 4, 8, 9), and "beauty" (lines 10, 17, 19). In some places the repetition enhances to the impact of the poem (e.g. lines 13 and 14), but in the ones I cited above I think it detracts a bit. Maybe try some other words to enhance the images that you already have. Have you though about changing the title, so that the reader doesn't know that it is a poem about a fairy until they get to the last stanza? I think that would make it even better. But don't let me tell you how to write your poem if you don't agree -- go with what you feel.
Overall, I love this poem. Great work.