Chapter 1 - 1
Submitted August 30, 2005 Updated August 30, 2005 Status Incomplete | A sad poem
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Chapter 1 - 1
Chapter 1 - 1
A Quiet Slumber
Sunsets of pink and gold,
Stars like crystals of the night.
As the river sings it's lullaby,
I drop ever so gently to slep.
Things of my imagination,
And memories from the forgoten past,
I begin to have my dreams,
As I listen to the shadows whisper in my ear.
I toss I turn,
The nightmares from the closet.
The a smile comes across my face,
The dreams of innocents from my childhood.
As I sleep my room comes alive,
the dolls whisper their secrets.
And the walls tell their lies.
Shadows creep,
As sunlight chases.
The moring is soon to come,
It is almost hear.
As my mother enters my room,
I do not move at all.
For I have no more breath,
I've gone into the mist.
Never to come back home again.
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mikita_inugirl on February 2, 2006, 10:45:14 AM
This is nice. ^_^NJ_PUNK on November 17, 2005, 10:45:20 AM
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i love it it's playful and depressing.Himehoshii on September 26, 2005, 1:22:00 AM
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The imagery of the poem is brilliant. kos on September 24, 2005, 1:17:27 AM
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A few typos (I've written this as a separate comment so you can delete my comment after you fix the typos):Line 4: "slep" -> "sleep"
Line 6: "," -> "." (to keep the pattern)
Line 12: "innocents" -> "innocence"
Line 14: "the" -> "The"
Line 19: "hear" -> "here"
kos on September 24, 2005, 1:13:38 AM
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Nice poem, it has a way of pulling the reader in through its gentle words and images, even if (or maybe enhanced because) it has a sad ending.