Chapter 1 - Untitled
Submitted August 10, 2005 Updated August 10, 2005 Status Incomplete | I’d like to talk to you About this love we share
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Chapter 1 - Untitled
Chapter 1 - Untitled
Hello dear,
I'd like to talk to you
About this love we share
And what you put me through
At first maybe I was just an imperfection
All broken apart
But from your direction
I was closest to your heart
And its fine you know
How we fight and fight
And how you sink so low
But still tell me it all right
This time darling I've figured something out
That everything I think about you
Everything I think about
Isn't even true
So talk to me my dear
The only one I desire
Tell me how you want me near
My sweet pathetic liar…
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blueshark4 on September 28, 2005, 7:34:34 AM
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thats good!^^ keep up the good work!Dr_Postal on August 13, 2005, 2:41:09 PM
Dr_Postal on
How biting and cold, what a crescendo. It speaks of someone preparing to do something truly unspeakable. I likes it.Trinity_Fire on August 10, 2005, 11:38:21 PM
Trinity_Fire on
wow, this was really good. I love the different tone that you used in this piece, it was really... fitting. Dammit, you should be publishing your works. ^____^-
Keep it up, this one is +favs, i love it. ^______^