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Chapter 1 - Silenced

I duuno it was a quick one

Chapter 1 - Silenced

Chapter 1 - Silenced
"Please don't go! I can't live without you!"
"I haven't got a choice Lira. Lord Atesit banned the rights movement. He made a draft....."
"You have the choice of leaving your child to die of starvation or going to war!"
"Dammit Lira I don't, either that or my head! Is that what you want. My son to grow up thinking of me as a triator of my country! Is it!!! Im doing this for you and Jaden."
"Promise Dinane, promise you will return."
"I won't die to not see my son grow up. I promise!"
As he trugded on the wind blew harder nipping at his vunerable spots. The light off afar was the castle, the royal domain of Lord Atesit. It's walls rose to
hieghts that you could see it 12 miles off.
"Aghhhhhh!!" Danine yelled as he fell to the ground. Ice was forming on his shoes and his nose was numb....He still had 14 more miles to walk and he was nearly fainting.
"Will I make it? He breathed louder and more heavily with every step. I can't lose to this, not before i see my son again......aghhhh......."
His vision dimmed and he drifted down the the ground. Black darkness, cold wet feelings shivering up his spine......His thought went blank...........

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SasukesChick on May 6, 2007, 1:06:18 AM

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SasukesChickWrite more!!

WhatevaYaoiGal on April 9, 2007, 3:24:29 PM

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WhatevaYaoiGalThat....is.........AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Where did you learn to write like that?
The story..I felt like I was in the story......o_o;;

**Faves story**

Can't wait to see more! ^_^

Hyper_Kitty on March 27, 2007, 1:55:42 PM

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Hyper_KittyWhoa...I hope you write more. This is good. *favs*

Yumiko_Ying_Vinnie on February 4, 2007, 5:46:01 AM

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Yumiko_Ying_VinnieThats really nice!!!I didn't know you write stories!!!^-^
Yey!!!
+faves

Sasukesgirlfriend on December 23, 2006, 10:57:28 AM

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SasukesgirlfriendWRITE MORE!!!
PLEASE!!!
I"M ON MY KNEES!
*gets on knees and
starts to beg*

zeldafan92 on December 20, 2006, 8:16:26 PM

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zeldafan92O.O awesome! write more!

calahna on December 20, 2006, 1:55:30 PM

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calahnathat's kinda sad. interesting tho. (that means it's good)
and you mispelled a few things. but other than that i like it.
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