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Chapter 1 - Prologue

The story based on my characters. More chapters coming shortly.

Chapter 1 - Prologue

Chapter 1 - Prologue


Smoke rose from the small campfire, which was slowly being extinguished by the drizzling rain. Three rats and a stoat huddled around it, wrapped in their tattered cloaks. The smallest rat, Radjak, shivered and shook rain water from his whiskers.

“Some day this `as been,” he muttered, “Rain yesterday, rain today, and doncha know it, rain tomorrow.”

“Awww, shudup Radjak!” The stoat snarled. The stoat, Facdol, felt a sense of authority, being left in charge of the guards of Fort Spar and did not hesitate to boss the others around. Normally he and the others would be severely punished for simply hanging around. But not tonight.

Tonight was a slave gathering night. Lord Kreinak would soon return with an important job for them: branding slaves and breaking their spirits.

Suddenly the doors of Fort Spar swung open. The slave catchers had returned, and Lord Kreinak was leading them. He was unusually large for a fox, thick limbed and sinewy. His fur was pitch black from head to tail; the slaves said that his fur was as black as his heart. He had sharp yellow eyes and a deep commanding voice.

“Facdol!” he yelled, “Take these slaves to the firing room!”

“Yes ma' Lord!” Facdol and two rats led the slaves to a small hut to the right of the main fortress. The room was dark, only lit by a small fire in a large crevice in the wall. “Listen you scum!” Facdol screamed, “Your property of Lord Kreinak now.” He grinned wickedly “And I'm gonna make sure you never forget it!” He grabbed the slave closest to him, a pretty young hare maid.

“Well well, what have we here? What might your name be pretty miss?”

“None of your business stoat” she said defiantly.

“Oh, so we got us a cocky one here, eh? We'll soon fix that!” he slipped on a pair of thick leather gloves and took what appeared to be a small marble from the fire. He grabbed the hare's hand and forced the glowing object into her palm. She gasped as pain shot through her hand. She tried to let go, but he wrapped his hand around hers, forcing her to make a fist. Finally he took the stone from her hand. She dropped to the floor, her teeth clenched in pain, staring in horror at her badly burned hand. Facdol continued around the room, branding the slaves hands.

Suddenly the hare maid realized that he had only branded some of the slaves. The youngest and oldest creatures were still unbranded. “Radjak, you know what to do with the ones unfit to work.” Said Facdol.

“You bet I do,” said the rat, smiling wickedly at the remaining slaves as he led them outside.

The hare never saw the old ones or babes again.


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DecendantOfSlagar on November 19, 2007, 4:44:31 AM

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DecendantOfSlagarYAY! I love vermin, I prefer stories where thay are main charries, though. Could you read my stories and tell me if they need something? Sorry I've barely started on them.
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DON'T INSULT FOXES!!!EVAH!!!

Tane on March 12, 2006, 9:41:52 AM

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Tanedude, man. those vermin are a bunch of tools! very good story! im gonna read em all

shorty_026 on March 3, 2006, 11:20:59 AM

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shorty_026thats gr8 i luv redwall! keep up the gr8 work. eulaaalia!give em blood an vinegar

Redwall_Artist on January 1, 2006, 6:42:58 AM

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Redwall_ArtistPlease check out my story. I want to know if it needs anything.

Redwall_Artist on December 31, 2005, 2:03:52 PM

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Redwall_ArtistI LUV this story! It's one of those keeps you on the edge of the seat things. EXELLENT!!!

AarontheWanderer on November 8, 2005, 6:12:42 AM

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AarontheWandererIf that offended you in any way, I apologize. It's just my mind is in brainstorm mode and that doesn't happen often, so I gotta go with any idea or thought I have. My (many) characters particularly hate slavery, so if you need some heroes for hire... ;) .... Sorry, did it again...
And while I'm at this, I might as well do a cheap promotional of my stories that I have up. Read them. Comment on them. Didn't post them here for nothing. Thank you.

AarontheWanderer on November 8, 2005, 6:02:16 AM

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AarontheWandererOh, good, can I help? I know that seems a bit extreme of a request and all... ;)

Pennybrite_Moonsparrow on November 7, 2005, 11:12:03 PM

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Pennybrite_MoonsparrowDon't worry, they get what's coming to them ;)

AarontheWanderer on November 7, 2005, 12:42:33 PM

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AarontheWanderer*Sigh* That's so sad.. If there's one thing I hate most about the world, it's injustice. And slavery and the filthy vermin who support it are no exception.

Firestar7218 on October 31, 2005, 4:29:11 AM

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Firestar7218Give 'em blood 'n vinegar mates! Hehe, I luff the hares, but I also adore bad guys... Too bad none of them ever survive ;D

Pennybrite_Moonsparrow on October 5, 2005, 11:51:38 PM

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Pennybrite_MoonsparrowLittle info about one of the character's name. Facdol comes from two greek words and literally means "causing grief", which is appropriate for him.

Pennybrite_Moonsparrow on September 30, 2005, 11:30:50 PM

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Pennybrite_MoonsparrowI take the fact that you hate my bad guys as a compliment :)

ryuran123352 on September 30, 2005, 11:31:11 AM

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ryuran123352...Eugh... What awful vermin... I hate the evil foxes!!! Die you jerks!!! Eulalia!!!!! *turns to giant badger and attacks*