Iris
Submitted November 24, 2005 Updated June 26, 2007 Status Complete | Shonen-ai/Slash! For DD_DM. A black-winged angel finds himself caught up in the fate of a young boy that defies existence itself, a boy with paradoxed wings, a boy named 'Iris'...
Category:
Fantasy |
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Gray
Submitted: November 24, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 2 - Survive
Submitted: November 27, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 3 - Darkness
Submitted: December 1, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 4 - Sanctuary
Submitted: December 4, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 5 - Silence
Submitted: December 7, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 6 - Reason
Submitted: December 8, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 7 - Antithesis
Submitted: December 11, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 8 - Same
Submitted: December 18, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 9 - Ruby
Submitted: December 22, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 10 - Stone
Submitted: December 28, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 11 - Bat
Submitted: December 30, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 12 - Monster
Submitted: January 3, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 13 - Dead
Submitted: January 8, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 14 - Blood
Submitted: January 12, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 15 - Lost
Submitted: January 17, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 16 - Taint
Submitted: January 20, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 17 - Half
Submitted: January 22, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 18 - Found
Submitted: January 24, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 19 - Purse
Submitted: January 26, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 20 - Mutual
Submitted: January 27, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 21 - Drop
Submitted: January 30, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 22 - Wolf
Submitted: February 8, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 23 - Trapped
Submitted: February 13, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 24 - Journey
Submitted: February 15, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 25 - Beautiful
Submitted: February 18, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 26 - Paradox
Submitted: February 20, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 27 - Disconnected
Submitted: February 22, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 28 - Distraction
Submitted: February 24, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 29 - Spider
Submitted: February 27, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 30 - Bone
Submitted: March 12, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 31 - Human
Submitted: March 17, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 32 - Fall
Submitted: March 27, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 33 - Earth
Submitted: April 11, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 34 - Pity
Submitted: April 18, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 35 - Continue
Submitted: April 23, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 36 - Scar
Submitted: May 1, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 37 - Ally
Submitted: May 7, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 38 - Nothing
Submitted: November 24, 2005 • Updated: November 21, 2006
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Chapter 39 - Seal
Submitted: November 24, 2005 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 40 - Purpose
Submitted: August 19, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 41 - Labs
Submitted: August 25, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 42 - Shatter
Submitted: August 29, 2006 • Updated: August 29, 2006
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Chapter 43 - Burning
Submitted: September 4, 2006 • Updated: September 4, 2006
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Chapter 44 - Separated
Submitted: November 3, 2006 • Updated: November 3, 2006
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Chapter 45 - Secret
Submitted: November 12, 2006 • Updated: November 12, 2006
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Chapter 46 - Side
Submitted: November 19, 2006 • Updated: November 19, 2006
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Chapter 47 - Opposite
Submitted: November 21, 2006 • Updated: November 21, 2006
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Chapter 48 - Camael
Submitted: November 23, 2006 • Updated: November 23, 2006
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Chapter 49 - Demon
Submitted: November 24, 2006 • Updated: November 24, 2006
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Chapter 50 - Remember
Submitted: December 5, 2006 • Updated: December 5, 2006
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Chapter 51 - Simple
Submitted: December 14, 2006 • Updated: December 14, 2006
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Chapter 52 - Longevity
Submitted: December 21, 2006 • Updated: December 21, 2006
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Chapter 53 - Deal
Submitted: December 27, 2006 • Updated: December 27, 2006
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Chapter 54 - Dual
Submitted: December 30, 2006 • Updated: December 30, 2006
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Chapter 55 - Goodbye
Submitted: January 11, 2007 • Updated: January 11, 2007
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Chapter 56 - Peace
Submitted: January 15, 2007 • Updated: January 15, 2007
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Chapter 57 - Fool
Submitted: January 21, 2007 • Updated: January 21, 2007
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Chapter 58 - Forest
Submitted: February 3, 2007 • Updated: February 3, 2007
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Chapter 59 - Bound
Submitted: March 11, 2007 • Updated: March 11, 2007
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Chapter 60 - Touch
Submitted: April 9, 2007 • Updated: April 9, 2007
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Chapter 61 - Ending
Submitted: April 22, 2007 • Updated: April 22, 2007
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Chapter 62 - Alive
Submitted: May 3, 2007 • Updated: May 3, 2007
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Chapter 63 - Sky
Submitted: June 12, 2007 • Updated: June 12, 2007
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Chapter 64 - Look
Submitted: June 19, 2007 • Updated: June 19, 2007
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Chapter 65 - Moment
Submitted: June 22, 2007 • Updated: June 22, 2007
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Chapter 66 - Mortal
Submitted: June 23, 2007 • Updated: June 23, 2007
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Chapter 67 - Rain
Submitted: June 25, 2007 • Updated: June 25, 2007
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Chapter 68 - Epilogue
Submitted: June 26, 2007 • Updated: June 26, 2007
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 10:55:24 AM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 10:44:55 AM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 10:34:36 AM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 10:16:34 AM
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And, the opposite thing. Were you hinting that Valkyre is half demon? I had my suspicions. ~.^ Hehe.... I'm happy that someone got their throne back about a year ago. hehe.
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 7:58:19 AM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 6, 2007, 7:15:49 AM
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XOXOXOXOXOXOXP Huggles, kisses, and funny faces to you!
Trinity_Fire on September 6, 2007, 7:28:31 AM
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 12:53:06 PM
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 9:12:51 AM
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Oh yes. You wouldn't happen to know how to get the lines off of notebook paper after you scan an image, would you? -.-' Then you get to see MY crap!
Trinity_Fire on September 5, 2007, 11:23:17 PM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 2:25:21 PM
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 1:58:37 PM
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 1:45:45 PM
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Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 5, 2007, 1:26:15 PM
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Trinity_Fire on September 5, 2007, 9:04:52 AM
Phoenex360Gorillaz on September 4, 2007, 1:22:25 PM
Trinity_Fire on September 5, 2007, 6:37:58 AM
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And I'm sorry, but it's just a dream. Don't worry about it too much. ;) (It'll all explain itself later, haha.)
Anyway; sorry to make you slog through a million chapters, but if you do stick through with Iris, I will be ever-so happy~ (there are parts I don't like to this story either, haha, but overall... It's not one I cringe at, haha.)
Thanks a lot for your comments! My gosh, you're so unbelievably nice. :3 *glompsquishhug*
THANK YOU!! :D
InternalDemons on July 22, 2007, 11:30:42 AM
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Dark_Alchemist on June 28, 2007, 4:41:13 PM
Trinity_Fire on July 5, 2007, 1:57:21 PM
Dark_Alchemist on June 28, 2007, 5:04:03 PM
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luckylace222 on June 22, 2007, 12:19:45 PM
DefyDeath_DefyMe on June 19, 2007, 2:06:05 PM
Trinity_Fire on June 20, 2007, 1:03:19 AM
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Yes, chapters for Corryn. If Iris were ever a craps-ness like anime or somesuch, CorrynValkyre would be a canon pairing. :> Or Un-canon. Heh. (<--is officially mentally unstable as of now)
GAWD DAMMIT I GOTTA FINISH IRIS NAO BEFORE I GO TO CANADA ON TRIP~ I'm so chocked-full of summer programs after, I'll NEVER get the chance. D:
I PROMISE Iris will be done before this summer is through!!! >C
Dark_Alchemist on June 19, 2007, 1:23:30 PM
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I know how you feel. I have a comic I want to finish befote I leave tomorrow, but I have five pages to go and four out of five black pens dead. So ... yeah. I can try. I can pull an all-nighter ... I guess ...
Dark_Alchemist on June 15, 2007, 10:04:03 AM
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Didn't Valkie's eyes turn red? Am I just being stupid? Well, I think we've already confirmed that, but anyway ... I don't think I could write that much per week. But then .. I haven't been inspired to write recently. Wow, I'm so glad I checked. I have a knack for checking right when they come out. I must be a psychic.
But you shouldn't rush yourself. The only problem is, sometimes if you don't you never finish. So ... I dunno, I'm rambling, and I need to shut up.
Trinity_Fire on June 16, 2007, 12:22:26 AM
Trinity_Fire on June 16, 2007, 12:16:00 AM
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Um, about Valkyre's eyes.... :tilts head: It was kinda only a... urr, it's a demon thing. XD;
But since he's not a full-blooded demon, his eyes don't stay red. Just like with Iris; it just makes their eyes turn red for a little while. :> Meepits! Sorry. It's a terrible detail, huh? I'd never actually thought about it too much myself, just let it play out that way... Oh well.
More work to be improved on. XD
Well, I hope you have fun on your internet-stranded journey, wherever it may be. (I'm going to Canada in a week or so, so I can't quite keep up with updates either. XD )
DefyDeath_DefyMe on June 15, 2007, 5:16:00 AM
Trinity_Fire on June 15, 2007, 8:05:22 AM
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Would you recall, way back when I started Iris... Oooh, I could WORK then! I had such inspirations~ *_*
With Nocte, too. Oooh. :shudder:
Nocte went down the drain. Y'know what sucks, though? I had a whole Nocte continuum plotted out in my head. It woulda been full o' shoot and hawtness and OMFG drama. :D
...But it doesn't look like it'll be happening. Because I look back on Nocte and I don't see how I could ever figure that out properly, but I NEED things to generally happen that way for the Nocte II or whatever shoot to work out right, buuuut~ :ramble cut off:
Anyway. Yeah. I'll be givin' you as big doses of Iris as I can!! :D To be honest, I don't think it'll take more than, like, 10 chapters tops tops to finish it off. It'll pro'ly only take like 3-7 more, to be honest. Most likely MUCH, MUCH LESS.
YES FINAL BATTLE LET'S GO KILL YGGDRASIL YES
XD
I-I mean, urr, yah, um... >_< Stuff like that.
Ahhh much smex is planned.
...No not really I'm sorreh. D: No time for pron.
If you wanted a pron with Valkie-baby and Iris-kun, it'd have to be right before this interlude with Corryn and all. :3
BWAH LONG RANT/KOMMENT DONE K THX BAI OFF TO WORK NOOOOOW~!!! DX :scuttles off:
RandomGuy on May 30, 2007, 9:08:39 AM
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Trinity_Fire on May 30, 2007, 10:26:58 AM
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Anyway, thanks a lot for your comment! It really means a lot to me. :)
And hope you'll go on reading! Thanks!
RandomGuy on May 30, 2007, 10:32:41 AM
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Trinity_Fire on May 30, 2007, 10:45:29 AM
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I'd like to check out your stuff too sometime, since you're so nice!! But it might take me a while to get around to it~ I'm sorry, but I'm juggling a busy high school life at the same time, and I've got finals soon, and SAT tests!
So, I'll try to drop by when I can, okay?
Thanks a lot!! :D
RandomGuy on May 30, 2007, 8:13:21 PM
Trinity_Fire on May 31, 2007, 2:20:11 AM
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Dragon_Buster on May 8, 2007, 8:46:22 PM
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So many unanswered questions....
But on the plus side, I've finally found out the truth behind Camael, Valkyre.....all those missing links.
And another kiss.....that's a good bonus.
But to be honest, the few chapters weren't as nice as the first ones. However, I don't blame you. You are a very busy person, and I know how that can affect creativity. ^.^
You have all the time to improve. I'm in no hurry: I have quite a lot to do as well. Besides, those chapters were still good: they just need improvement. And you've given me some ideas for my own story-in-the-making, tentatively titled Aion Teleos/Aeon Prophecy[/i] (which title I want is still a mystery.) But alas, I digress. ^^;
I will be waiting for the next chapters, whenever they come. Good luck on your exams, TF!
Trinity_Fire on May 9, 2007, 4:28:12 AM
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You're so nice, and very honest. Thanks a ton for that, it really means a lot to me. :)
You're free to tell me what you think might not be too good about Iris, and I'll try to do my best to fix it! (Although, I won't be revising the whole story 'till I'm done, which should hopefully be soon XD; )
Thank you very much!!
Oooh, and a story from you is an interesting prospect. I hope to see it up sometime!! :)
Dragon_Buster on May 10, 2007, 9:12:49 PM
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Sorry 'bout that. I'm a lazy idiot, yes I am. ^^;;
Oh, and about that story...I'm still trying to get a decent start, but let me tell you this.
It's got shounen-ai. (Or yaoi: whichever term you use.) And angels. I put the 2 together... hehhehheh...Can anyone say "evil lovechild"? XD
Oh, I am such a blasphemous heretic...heh heh heh...
Dark_Alchemist on May 5, 2007, 9:08:48 AM
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Haha, I know how you feel. I want to do so much arts, but I have to read a whole book for History and I need to have loads of stuff done and I only have a week left ... ;_; So I don't blame you at all. Cursed inspiration just has to strike when you have no time whatsoever ... but this chapitre was wonderful.
Thanks for telling me. I was just thinking last night that I should check here .... but I was reading manga obsessively online ... at one in the morning and really tired ... because I'm mad. ;DDD
Dark_Alchemist on April 28, 2007, 4:44:40 PM
Trinity_Fire on April 29, 2007, 4:18:28 AM
Dark_Alchemist on April 28, 2007, 4:39:28 PM
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I must be mad. Second night in a row ... and I still want to draw more. Dx There are things I should be drawing, and homeworks I should be doing ... but I'm just messing around. Like playing with the lettering of 'Iris' so it reads 'Corryn' when you turn it upside-down. Wow, I'm a nerd ...
Dark_Alchemist on April 27, 2007, 5:49:41 PM
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Though when I saw the title, I was scares for a second. I thought you were saying this was THE END, and I didn't see how you could finish it so quickly. But I'm glad it isn't over yet!
I hate it when I forget my plots. I'm writing, and I think '... dammit, I knew something else was supposed to happen here, but where did it go?'
Was this the first time you used Caerwyn's name? I'd like to say one last thing before I shut up: I really love your choice in names. But I should stop rambling, because I can barely go a word without typoes, and it's almost one am.
Trinity_Fire on April 28, 2007, 2:27:35 AM
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Thanks a lot!! ..Um, if you want, I can give you tip-offs when I upload Iris. 'Kay? I don't mind. ...I-I just have to get around to writing more. ;A; So busy~ :sob:
Astri on April 22, 2007, 5:14:37 PM
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ARGH! @.@ A misremembrance!
Oh well. I guess I'll just have to read through the whole story again when I'm done, to make sure I have everything straight. I don't know how I'll EVER manage it *sigh* I mean, it's not like I enjoy reading it or anything *sigh* but I suppose I can make that sacrifice.
~.^
Dark_Alchemist on April 12, 2007, 10:56:35 AM
Astri on April 11, 2007, 11:17:41 AM
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I loved how you compared the laughter to a sepia photograph, by the way. I thought that was awesome.
And I think you can still get away with calling Valkyre an angel. Demons are fallen angels, right? Tainted angels, but still angels. So he could still be an angel in reference. Or a dark angel, or something.
You could even call him a paradox or juxtaposition or something, but that seems kinda dehumanizing, so maybe that's not great.
Ahhh...a massive weight of curiosity has been lifted from my shoulders. I finally understand so much better! ^.^ Bravo, Trinity, for an absolutely spectacular unveiling that isn't even the story's climax! X3
Trinity_Fire on April 12, 2007, 2:32:34 AM
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I think he's natural-made. (lol) I assume. So. Kinda.
Yeah, it's a bit of a mix-up there. I realized while I was trying to write it all out. DX
Anywho, that's all, I think. Glad the big thing is out. Now, there's really not so much left to go over... :3
Thank ya for your continual komments!!! ;A;
:chomp: :B
Astri on April 11, 2007, 11:03:25 AM
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But perhaps now, some mysteries about Valkyre and ESPECIALLY about Camael will finally be answered! *wags tail*
Trinity_Fire on April 12, 2007, 2:29:49 AM
Astri on April 11, 2007, 11:09:26 AM
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OH MY BLOODY FLIPPING INFERNAL DESSERTIAN GODDESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I GET IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Valkyre is "Iris"! He's another prototype! One of the former Irises! No wonder he's drawn to Iris! And he's an angel and a demon combined in one! He was made the same way! That explains everything!!! AND CAMAEL USED THE PEN/ RUNES TO BIND THE DEMONIC PART!!!!!!
It all makes sense!!!!!! Oh my god!!!!!! I never expected that!!!!!!
(Watch, I'm actually completely wrong and it's something different. But...holy crap!!!!!!!!!!)
Dragon_Buster on April 5, 2007, 1:43:02 AM
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As I read, I can notice the development of the relationship between Valkyre and Iris. It's grown from animosity, to mere tolerance, to love. As the relationship changes, so do the characters. That's a good thing.
You managed to give me a tense feeling as I read about Valkyre's capture, escape (which I thought would never happen), and eventual rescue of his beloved Iris. You managed to make me FEEL the story- a sure trademark of your ability.
Now, we have the kiss scene. It's short, but sweet, with more of your unmatchable metaphors thrown in for good measure.
Overall, I think this story just keeps getting better and better. I shall continue reading it......but not now, as I'm starting to get lazy again...... *is very disappointed in himself*
.............
O_o Oh no.....
I can't believe it....I'm getting addicted to yaoi! Oh noes! The Yaoiwarp.....is overtaking me! It is.....a guiltfully good pain! Gaah......
GET OUT OF MY HEAD, FOUL YAOI-DAEMON!! RETURN TO THE E-MATERIUM FROM WHENCE THOU CAME!!
Yaoi-Daemon: NEVAR! Besides, doesn't it feel good to shed all your concerns about masculinity?
Me: Gaaaahhhh!! Can't.......resist....temptation! Alright.....fine.....I give up....You win.
Yaoi-Demon: HAHAHA! See? No one can resist the temptation!
(Sorry......couldn't resist adding a bit of spice to my review....)
Trinity_Fire on April 5, 2007, 3:59:50 AM
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The rumors of your skill, as I see, are true. This story is simply amazing.
First of all, you managed to get off to a good start with the setting and opening story laid out well, without giving away too much. The ability to write the first scenes well is crucial, as it maintains the reader's interest.
Secondly, your characters are very believable. Okay, so you wouldn't see a black-winged angel and a boy who is "eveything and nothing" in real life (except in cosplay XD ), but the "people" behind them are very real. That's a trademark of good fiction.
Thirdly, the interactions between characters are good and fleshed out. This is also a good sign, as it means your characters aren't "cardboard" characters.
Finally, your descriptions. Normally, ornate descriptions are not too good, but yours transcends "overblown" description. It's actually a joy to read, not a tedious bunch of daed wood.
Overall, I think you've written a good piece of fiction. I have yet to see where this goes, but I think it will be marvelous. You really ought to publish your work: there are many who want to see a good tale right now. *favs and hands you another trophy with your name on it*
I shall continue to review as I read it. Until then, keep writing.
See you around.
Trinity_Fire on April 4, 2007, 10:31:13 AM
Astri on March 30, 2007, 8:04:38 AM
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^OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO^
That's HYSTERICAL for an entirely inexplicable reason.
But so...not opposites touching, but fellows. Which squeezes through another clue about Valkyre...or, more accurately, about what he might be...
Hmm. Yet still certain pieces remain missing. I'm so intrigued!!! What is going on?!?!
Astri on March 30, 2007, 7:53:50 AM
Astri on March 30, 2007, 4:31:57 AM
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Coincidence...? --.--
And so Eire GOT ENERGY BACK. Okay. I thought it was something along those lines...Eire so much stronger and Rheis so much weaker...
And finally--what is Iris for? What is Iris for...?
Why would a lab go through the trouble of splicing together so many different species into one being?
Why would it be so important to so many people to possess that being as their own?
Is it something that being can do? Something that being represents? Or something that being can cause something else to do?
Confoozles... @.@
Trinity_Fire on March 30, 2007, 6:23:46 AM
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Um, um, did I write something wrong??? According to my little scratch sheets of Iris notes (XD) Eire shouldn't have... different colored eyes. ...No, I don't think so...
Um, um! Sorry, but, yeah, I think you're connecting more lines than I have/do! XD;
Um, Raguel merely has two differently-colored eyes because of his half-blood-ness. ...somehow. (this was poorly-put together, I don't really like that detail... >>;)
I think (from what I can remember, lol!) Eire and Rheis should both have black eyes.
And sorry about the no-Iris-giga-power thing. You readers all seemed to be expecting him to explode or something! XD;
Hm, note to self, make lots of notes to self. XC
Anyway, thanks!! I'm so glad you're still reading Iris, and the influx of komments is always quite appreciated. :3
Don't confuse yourself too much!!!!!! XC
Much <3
Astri on March 30, 2007, 4:42:52 AM
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Hmm. It seems, though, that if zombification truly is what's going on, then only Eire has been zombified. Rheis still seems normal. How weird must that be, to be connected like that for so long, and then not only lose the connection but lose the mind of your sister entirely?
For that matter, why does Eire know what's going on with Iris...?
So many questions...SO...MANY...QUESTIONS...
DefyDeath_DefyMe on September 19, 2006, 8:58:17 AM
Astri on March 30, 2007, 4:10:45 AM
Astri on March 30, 2007, 4:10:21 AM
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Iris sensed that other thing too, before it was there...
And what on earth was that wing-thing she did to Iris?
(Off on a tangent, having mentioned Iris--we almost got to see his true powers! It ALMOST was Eire's fatal mistake! Dang!)
That wing-thing is perplexing the hell out of me...it's like she did something to the angel and demon parts of him...but what, and almost more importantly, how???
AHHH!!! How did I survive not being able to read this for so long?!?!
Astri on March 30, 2007, 3:52:43 AM
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THAT'S not good...
I knew those two would be back...but something so diabolical! --.-- And now with the cable gone...? It seems like Rheis has given a part of his power to Eire...I'm not sure Raguel would be able to hold his own against him otherwise, whereas Eire now seems WAY powerful...
But that evil tearstone-breaking might be her fatal mistake...
What a time to get back into Iris, huh?! Right into uber-action! ^.^
Dark_Alchemist on March 12, 2007, 10:17:19 AM
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But he could hear nothing. A muffled silence, like watching a movie spliced in half, everything still spinning in slow motion, but the sound gone, replaced by deathly silence, echoing nothing on nothingness.
That was so vibrant, so visual, so auditory... I'm overusing the italics, I know, but gosh, I'm just in love with that little portion and I don't know why.
silverfox on February 6, 2007, 9:21:30 AM
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THANK YOU THOUGH, I LOVE YOUR COMMENTS~ X< ::squees with glee::
Oh, and about the wings. Mentioned it before, but fighting with wings comes from real-life experiences.
Ever been hit by a goose wing before?? It hurts. A lot. And leaves quite the bruise. DX
So, trust me, I know. ;)
THANKS! for the comments, you're so nice~ ;A; <--(tears of joy)
Dark_Alchemist on January 31, 2007, 9:01:36 AM
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Deffy, somehow, I just knew that would be comin' from you. ...I tried avoiding it, but, no. XDDD
Camael = me no likey. I don't bother really describing him too, if'n ya noticed.
But Iris, yessir now, we need to find them a sheezy motel. XDDDDDDDDDDDD
...LOOK WHAT YOU'VE DONE TO ME NOW, DEFFY. >O
Thankya for the commentos. I'll try to rip up some new chappies soon. :3
Chuchu~ <3
Stasy_SD_14 on December 15, 2006, 7:02:33 AM
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Thanks though, luvluv~ <3
And, uh, about Iris... ... .... ...I don't think you'll be seeing him for a while. >>; You'll see. (Eventually) ~3~
Stasy_SD_14 on November 20, 2006, 5:19:06 AM
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Astri on August 27, 2006, 1:57:46 AM
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Or maybe itâs Corryn. But the twins have been gone for a while...somehow I think it is them. They shall return!
Anyways. This is an interesting chapter simply by virtue of the fact that (GASP!) we have now seen...THE LAB. However, what might possibly be even more interesting than THE LAB is this odd reaction in Valkyre because of it...what is it? What is it with the lab and Camael and Valkyre that stirs up this bizarrity?? Itâs driving me nuts! There are so few clues, only tantalizing confusions...
And no kidding, itâs cool how far youâve gotten. In celebration of your new chapters, and hitting chapter 40, and just because I havenât done it for a while...
SHOWER OF LOVE AND DEVOTION!!!!! ^.^ ^.^ ^.^
You deserve it! ^.^
Trinity_Fire on August 28, 2006, 3:36:06 AM
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So Valkyre's not directly connected to the lab.
Not in that sense, at least.
I just found it fun to tease. ^_~
Ch. 42 will be posted on the 29th! :D Because I luv you all so much. <3
Astri on August 27, 2006, 1:57:22 AM
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I think my favorite part of this chapter is the description of the glass of water in the very first paragraph. Itâs masterly. Yes, I know itâs just water, but still! It is MASTERLY water! Very special, the perspiration trickling down to sink into the cracks and splintersâ¦itâs quite possibly one of the best descriptions of such an ordinary thing Iâve ever seen.
In a way, itâs sort of like the story itself. Iris and Valkyre are sliding down, trying to get away from the WAY too many problems on their backs but ever falling farther, farther down, heading towards a darkness that will swallow them up like the wood of the table swallows the water unless they can halt their descent and save themselves first.
You Know You Like Iris Too Much When...you compare it to a glass of water. I think Iâll stop while Iâm behind...
crazy_jamaican_gurl on August 26, 2006, 11:42:36 AM
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:33:18 PM
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And I must admit, I find your use of Valkyreâs wings as weapons massively interesting. I donât think Iâve ever seen anybody do that beforeâ¦
Trinity_Fire on August 25, 2006, 11:41:04 AM
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Have you ever been hit by the wing of a goose? A big ol' white goose?? 8D
It hurts like hell. I had a bruise on my shin for a week.
And if you get hit by a goose or, say, a swan's [swans are quite ferocious really] wing in the head, good chance is, you'll get knocked unconscious.
Now, a certain being gets a wingspan about 5x that of a goose's... you think he won't use those to his advantage?? ^_~
I learn a lot through experience. :D Painful experience.
DefyDeath_DefyMe on August 24, 2006, 2:30:40 PM
Trinity_Fire on August 25, 2006, 11:18:13 AM
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:29:38 PM
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By the way, I really like the names Eire and Rheis. Very cool names. And you do action sequences quite well. Some peopleâ¦how can I put this politelyâ¦donât. Like Mercedes Lackey and Kelley Armstrong (my favorite authoress ^.^) I love them dearly, but action sequences? Not their thing. You, on the other hand, seem at home in nearly any sequence. Very nice! Continuation! Continuation!!
Trinity_Fire on August 23, 2006, 5:44:30 AM
InternalDemons on July 22, 2007, 4:20:03 AM
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:36:58 PM
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(still has too much detail in his stuff)
Yeahâ¦well⦠--.-- Nyeah! Anyways! If the tattoos are seals, then I guess itâs more like the opposite of the angel transformation. Which I think is a good thingâ¦right? Probably. So bat and wolf, snake and hawk, horse and fish (Iâm assuming)â¦And now the new tattoo question arises. What was it REALLY that Camael did? And why? Is he perhaps responsible for Valkyreâs wings being black? Hmm. So many questionsâ¦
AND NO MORE CHAPTERS TO ANSWER THEM YET!!!!! AAAAAAAAHHHH!!!
Well, maybe thatâs a good thingâ¦I should really probably go to bed nowâ¦but only knowing that youâll be writing more of this! Itâs like having to put a book down before Iâm finished with it; I canât stand not knowing!
Please write more; you are an excellent writer ^.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:36:22 PM
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Iâm sorry, my comments are turning into an endless list of the questions I have. But you have to understand, I love asking questions about stuff I read. I love speculating about the answers and trying to predict whatâs going to happen (even though Iâm often wrong ^.^; ) So the fact that Iâm doing this means I really like it.
I do really like it. And because I havenât done it for a while and you deserve itâ¦
SHOWER OF LOVE AND ADORATION!!!!!!!! ^.^ ^.^ ^.^ :luvluvluv:
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:35:43 PM
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Well, now I have no idea where this is going. What will happen next, only the gods and Trinity_Fire knowâ¦so, Iâd better read on and find out, yes? ~.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:35:12 PM
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Theyâre definitely down here, because I have no idea what almost kind of sort of bothered Iris right at the endâ¦
You just keep me guessing, donât you? (Which is a good thing, by the way ~.^)
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:34:33 PM
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Besides, itâs nice to have a chapter like this sometimes, especially after a rash of info and action like there just was. It helps you process and get all your thoughts back up and with it.
Which makes me wonder...where is Raguel� :looks suspiciously around:
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:32:49 PM
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Please say thereâs a happy ending? I really hope thereâs a happy endingâ¦hoping and praying for a happy endingâ¦I like Iris too much for there not to be a happy ending⦠:all fingers crossed for a happy ending:
But now a new question is plaguing meâ¦what is the problem with the dragon tattoo?
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:32:12 PM
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Yeah. Iâll stop now. Letâs just say that this is a chapter Iâll remember âwhen men are nothing but fairy tales in books written by rabbits.â (The Last Unicorn.)
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:31:44 PM
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Where did Iris really come from? What does he really need? What does he really want? What is wrong with Raguel? Where did he come from? Why would sacrificing Iris save anything?
God, Iris IS like Colette, despite the fact that they act not at all similarâ¦no wonder I like him so muchâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:31:12 PM
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An arachnoid. Corryn is an arachnoid. At least, were I forced to give name to form, that is the name I would give him. Well, his species, anyways.
So the question now (ONE OF the questions now) is, how does Valkyre being an archangel figure into Raguelâs plans? For that matter, what does he need with Irisâ blood? And why on earth is Iris so attached to Corryn? Trickery? Delusion? Or was Corryn the only bright spot in the hell of the labs so long ago?
And I still wonderâ¦what did Iris do, that he is so afraid of himself?
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:30:32 PM
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Corryn. Like Corrine.
What does this mean?
âIt means that I, like God, do not play with dice and do not believe in coincidence.â V for Vendetta.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:30:08 PM
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And on a side note, I also sympathize with your/ Raguelâs opinion of the worldâ¦however, I donât think that it is too far gone. There is still hopeâ¦hope for us before the need for Irisâ blood.
Let the records show that I consider that even further potent foreshadowing. Like Coletteâs letter to Lloyd at the beginning of Tales of Symphonia.
Somebody want to explain to me why I keep comparing Iris to Colette? --.--
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:28:55 PM
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Letâs find out!
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:28:28 PM
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Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:28:00 PM
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As for other words, thereâs always triumvirate, which is a word I rather like for a seat of ominous government. The only problem is, it only applies if this âbig, ominous, but undetailed and unnamed governmental thingieâ is headed by three people. âTriâ equals âthree,â after all. Hey, more math I can do! ^.^
Failing that, you could also try the word âmonolith.â You can refer to a âmonolithic government,â soâ¦
I dunno. Probably youâve already found a better appellation anywaysâ¦ne? ~.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:27:32 PM
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All I can say about this chapter isâ¦it is very creepy. Not just creepy in what happens, but in what is described before anything happens. If this is foreshadowing, itâs foreshadowing some pretty horrific events. (Goddess, take an Advanced Composition class and you analyze everything.) The first half of this chapter, I think, is scarier than the second. No mean feat, considering the first half is mostly jumbled chaos.
But I think that is why it is scarier than the second half. The second half I can understand. The firstâ¦is outside my comprehension.
Creepy.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:27:02 PM
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And Irisâ reason: âIt helps.â What horrible things has Iris done that he needs the same kind of help Valkyre did? Does?
Guess I should just keep reading, huh? ~.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:26:36 PM
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You deserve another one for this, so here you go:
SHOWER OF LOVE AND ADORATION!!!!!!! ^.^ ^.^ ^.^ :luvluvluv:
I could go off about the beautiful imagery, the subtle and not-so-subtle seductiveness, the way every word of this chapter calls the precise picture it describes to mind; but I think it goes without saying. Besides, I have no time. I have to read the next one⦠^.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:26:07 PM
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Goddess, I donât believe it. That bat is still making me laugh. I chalk it up to it being 12:12 at night. Yep, thatâs gotta be it. Nocturnal animals are humorous at night. Right? Itâs either that or Iâm going insane.
Well, as long as I finish the story first so my curiosity neednât fetch a blowtorchâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:25:42 PM
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:25:15 PM
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So, I like this scene, and I dislike it (charm seal --.--) But I like it much more than I dislike it, and as previously stated: this is gonna stick with me for a LONG time.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:24:51 PM
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Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:24:25 PM
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:sound of about twenty different people smacking me:
Uh, oh, yesâ¦uncomfortable. Mm-hmm.
I should add, two-colored eyes? Good thing. Very good thing. I like two-colored eyes. And besides, there arenât that many. The weird thing had them, and now Raguel has them. Thatâs all. (Iris doesnât count, because his eyes Iâm sure change more than one color.) So cutting back on the two-colored eyes is not necessary. Really⦠^.^;
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:23:58 PM
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Might as well remark now, I really like the names you pick. Valkyre, Maeveâ¦but the best one is Iris. Naming him Iris was seriously inspired. It keeps life in his character even when he seems his most dead.
I have this unhealthy adoration for the name Irisâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:23:26 PM
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Interesting idea, the whole blood-for-money thing. When he first said, âThree bottles,â I was going â???â But then I understood what was going on, and was more like, âOh! Thatâs cool!â
And then Iris disappeared. Well, even the best of âem get kidnapped once or twiceâ¦or thrice, in Coletteâs caseâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:22:55 PM
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And what on earth was going on with Iris or the weird thing in THIS one? One resurrecting, the other lying to rest. Somehow I have the feeling things will convolute further before they become clear.
How wonderfully intriguing ^.^
Oh yes. And here:
A SHOWER OF LOVE AND ADORATION!!!!!!!! ^.^ ^.^ ^.^ :luvluvluv:
That help any? ~.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:22:19 PM
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And Iris isnât boring. Heâs quiet and almost lethargic, but heâs not boring. Anyone who wants a small bat is not boring.
â¦
God, Iâm STILL thinking about that part! ^.^;
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:21:45 PM
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And no, I donât think this is really a high lemon storyâ¦and yes, I really like the tattoos ^.^
The funny part is, while writing that last sentence, I accidentally put âbatâ instead of âtattoos.â See what that line did to me?! ^.^
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:21:17 PM
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I sympathize with the whole spider thing. I donât kill spiders either. Not sure Iâd let them on my hand (Iâm not quite trusting enough --.--) but I take great pains not to kill them. Iâll spend ten minutes trying to coax a spider out of the shower before I use it.
Flies, on the other handâ¦I murder without mercy --.--
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:20:39 PM
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You know, once Iâm done with this I think I might have to read it again. Knowing the characters better at the end, Iâm going to have to go back again and see the things I missed the first time. Like Iris being able to shred Valkyre without breaking a sweat.
Interesting. This just keeps getting more and more interesting.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:20:11 PM
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I think getting these two characters beyond the âokay, I WONâT stab you on contactâ relationship is a huge step, so Iâd say this chapter actually accomplished a lot. Plus it is one of those scenes that show intense sensuality in a perfectly innocent act. For some reason, I like that a lot better than when itâs outright; thereâs something appealing about the innocuousness of it. Or the subtlety. Or the delicacy.
I have no idea what Iâm saying. Iâll stop now.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:19:34 PM
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Can you say âoff-topicâ? Sorry ^.^; Really nice action sequence here. I loved the description of the lamiaâit was masterly, particularly the description of her tail. ââ¦curling away in soft loops like the trail of a river on flat plains.â Ah, imagery⦠:bliss:
All right, all right, my curiosity can put the chair down nowâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:19:06 PM
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You know, until this chapter it never occurred to me they had long hair? What is wrong with me? I usually always assume long hair unless the author (ess) says otherwise --.--
My curiosity is screaming at me to figure out what the hell is going on, so Iâd better humor itâ¦
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:18:38 PM
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:18:12 PM
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You misjudge yourself. You donât have vague dialogue, you have philosophical dialogue. Your dialogue wanders through the mist-shrouded backroads of the abstract and considers broken statues of confusion and thought, caring far more about the way it gets to its destination and how much it can see along the way than how fast it does it. Granted, that drives some people (like my mom) nuts. But me, personally? I like it. It makes me think. Why do I live? What do I want to know? What am I, really?
Okay, curiosity trying to bite me nowâ¦Iâll shut up and keep reading.
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:17:40 PM
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So, Iris is a philosopher. Among other things. The interesting thing about this chapter (and something that truly demonstrates your prowess as a writer) is how different the chapter reads from Valkyre to Iris. Iris thinks in a completely different way from Valkyre, and here you can see it. This chapter is written in a completely different way from the previous ones with Valkyre. That means you can âhearâ character voice. And thatâs excellent.
Curiosity is screaming, âEnough with the analyzing! Get back to the bloody story!!â ^.^;
Astri on August 5, 2006, 7:17:13 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on August 5, 2006, 12:37:28 PM
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SenayDragon on July 31, 2006, 11:14:44 AM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 14, 2006, 11:59:15 AM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 14, 2006, 11:48:42 AM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 14, 2006, 11:43:07 AM
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Ps. I may be a little sugar high! I had a Sonic slushie!!!!
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 14, 2006, 11:31:47 AM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 13, 2006, 1:57:41 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 13, 2006, 1:47:34 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 13, 2006, 1:37:06 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 13, 2006, 1:14:28 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 12, 2006, 1:41:02 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 12, 2006, 1:33:11 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 12, 2006, 1:23:40 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 12, 2006, 1:14:45 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 2:31:23 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 2:14:56 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 2:08:01 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 1:55:31 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 1:47:16 PM
crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 1:31:28 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 1:31:13 PM
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crazy_jamaican_gurl on July 11, 2006, 9:58:00 AM
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SenayDragon on July 6, 2006, 11:20:27 AM
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SenayDragon on July 6, 2006, 11:19:37 AM
SenayDragon on July 6, 2006, 11:17:43 AM
FATE_The_Pirate on June 28, 2006, 9:52:47 AM
CrescentMOON33 on April 25, 2006, 7:21:27 AM
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SenayDragon on April 22, 2006, 1:27:30 PM
SenayDragon on April 16, 2006, 1:24:07 AM
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Ah, and it's okay. To tell you the truth, I had completely forgotten that I had recommended a dragon... >>;; Whatever you choose is fine! I completely trust your judgement! ^-^
CrescentMOON33 on April 15, 2006, 10:57:34 AM
FATE_The_Pirate on April 11, 2006, 12:01:50 PM
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FATE_The_Pirate on March 27, 2006, 8:40:32 AM
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SenayDragon on March 13, 2006, 12:28:55 PM
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Oh, and why didn't you tell me your b-day was coming up?! I could've drawn you somethin'!!! >_< I guess I'll just have to draw you 2 pictures now. One of Iris and one of Roka! WEEE~! (And don't worry about my lack of freetime, cuz spring break is next week and I will be doing nothing but sitting on mah butt and drawing! YEAH! XD)
SenayDragon on March 13, 2006, 12:09:18 PM
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TheArchitect on February 27, 2006, 9:25:59 AM
TheArchitect on February 20, 2006, 6:36:56 PM
SenayDragon on February 11, 2006, 9:26:58 AM
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SenayDragon on February 11, 2006, 9:16:29 AM
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lol! I'm just kidding. =^^= I know they're gonna get together; it's just amusing to myself to think that way for some reason. I'm such a weirdo! lol! XD
SenayDragon on February 11, 2006, 9:15:35 AM
TheArchitect on February 8, 2006, 11:55:36 PM
FATE_The_Pirate on February 2, 2006, 11:51:55 AM
theWriter on January 31, 2006, 8:27:40 AM
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Bravo.
sakura_aka_OOC on January 28, 2006, 3:49:21 AM
SenayDragon on January 27, 2006, 9:41:49 AM
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FATE_The_Pirate on January 27, 2006, 9:16:27 AM
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TheArchitect on January 26, 2006, 9:12:52 PM
sakura_aka_OOC on January 24, 2006, 8:50:33 AM
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TheArchitect on January 23, 2006, 3:05:31 AM
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I kinda want this story to go quickly, cos I want to know what happens... but I also want it to go slower, cos that means I get to read it for longer, hee hee :)
Sore wa subarashii ! (Thats probably wrong, but its supposed to say something like 'it is super!' lol. My Japanese skills aren't up to much yet, but I hope they improve soon, cos I have a test tomorrow)
TheArchitect on January 22, 2006, 2:58:47 AM
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TheArchitect on January 2, 2006, 3:00:46 AM
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TheArchitect on December 8, 2005, 9:06:13 AM
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Yay! More explenations accompanied by..... those darn questions! I can tell Camael has been planning this for a long time. He is very patient and wise. In a stupid way. Just like all the others that want immortality or to rule the world. XP Heh.