Chapter 1 - My Heart
Submitted October 11, 2008 Updated July 25, 2010 Status Incomplete | These are about my life Let me know if you like them
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Chapter 1 - My Heart
Chapter 1 - My Heart
How much more can I take
Scars and cuts
Breaks and bruises
It feels like I've been bitten by a snake
Slithering and crawling
Poison and fangs
You can't imagine the pain
Stings and throbbing
Pounding and poking
As I stand in the rain
Drizziling and dropping
Pouring and dripping
I will wait for you
Standing and waiting
Watching and wondering
But only if you knew
Around and loving
Holding and caring
Scars and cuts
Breaks and bruises
It feels like I've been bitten by a snake
Slithering and crawling
Poison and fangs
You can't imagine the pain
Stings and throbbing
Pounding and poking
As I stand in the rain
Drizziling and dropping
Pouring and dripping
I will wait for you
Standing and waiting
Watching and wondering
But only if you knew
Around and loving
Holding and caring
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lilbloodsucker on July 26, 2010, 6:17:44 AM
wow that is greatProjectINFINITY on July 25, 2010, 4:34:44 PM
I like it alotKyiNekoYasha on June 21, 2010, 3:59:16 AM
KyiNekoYasha on
this ones pretty good :)DeathTheKid8 on June 20, 2010, 2:11:08 PM
DeathTheKid8 on
oOOOOOOooooooH i love it! although when you put watching you put WAtching >.< it bothers meeeeeeee!!!iamkira on June 20, 2010, 2:12:38 PM
iamkira on
All betterDeathTheKid8 on June 20, 2010, 2:15:41 PM
DeathTheKid8 on
YAY i have issues with these things XDpainblack on June 20, 2010, 12:01:49 PM
painblack on
its deep. i like it. you asked me to review it so i will. in the second line you should make the l an l. i really like this one.ShiaLaB486 on June 19, 2010, 3:17:26 PM
ShiaLaB486 on
Wow... Thats depressing... XDTailsLover80 on April 19, 2010, 12:03:53 PM
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This one is deep, describes love, pain, and suffering. I like this alot man. Nice work.LuluxKei101 on April 18, 2010, 8:51:27 AM
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This is amazing!! I love it! I understand how it feels too... So that's a bonus! You have real talent! XDRavetheHedgehog on September 1, 2009, 1:20:18 PM
Wow, nice poem! The word flow is great! You should write more :]TearJerker on October 15, 2008, 7:22:08 AM
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That was just too sweet. :)SomekindofFreak on October 15, 2008, 7:01:48 AM
I really liked the repetition here. very emotional piece, here!BottleOfNandaTanda on October 14, 2008, 12:41:23 PM
Omg It's beautiful-cries a little bit- It's so sad D: But, I love how you write :]. -faves-