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Chapter 0 - The Stranger

my first story! this is Naruto OC wonderland, if you have an OC tell me!

Chapter 0 - The Stranger

Chapter 0 - The Stranger
Note: I don’t own naruto, however I do pown occasionally.

The Stranger of Konoha
One night there were three people standing at the entrance to the Leaf village. Two were honest guards who were feeling very unlucky and with good reason. They had happened to be on guard when none other than the Hokage herself showed up. Both shocked by this visit they asked her why she had come.
She simply replied, “I might have a friend show up,” and left it at that. Now at first they were nervous because if they even made the slightest slip up well… everyone knows about Tsunade’s vicious temper. But not now. Now even though it was the middle of June an eerie cold had swept the village. Not only that but it was a moonless night. Now, neither of the guards were superstitious, but this was a darkness that you could feel.
Nothing happened for about an hour and just as the guards began to loosen up they saw a stranger in the far distance. They didn’t go to meet him but sat up straight as they waited for the man. When he was closer they noticed he seemed very nervous as if there were something around him that he wanted to get rid of. As he arrived at the gate he took a piece of paper out of his pocket, left it on the ground and turned around walking back the same way he came.
One of the guards stood up to stop the man from leaving, but he barely stood up when the man said, “It’s from him.”
The guard turned around about to start walking again stopped as if something blocked his path. He then said without turning around, “He says that your debt has been paid Tsunade.” Then he left without turning back.
Tsunade smiled then turned to the guards saying, “You two can take the night off, I’ll take the post for tonight.”
One guard was ungrateful and said, “If you were going to let us have the night off you could have let us go when you first got here.”
Tsunade’s smiled dropped, and said in a serious voice, “Count your blessings, at least he didn’t come in person.”
“Well I still think you could hav…,” he only got that far because a kunai had made sure he would never talk again. Tsunade and the other guard looked up in the direction the kunai came from. On top of the gate was a lone figure a ragged cape and scarf blowing in the wind. But what was truly amazing was that even with the moon gone his eyes glowed. They were a brilliant iceberg blue and shone as if they were two stars.
He turned around and said it so soft the guard thought it was the wind, “Ungrateful wretch.” He then blended into the darkness around him and disappeared.
The guard started to run after him but Tsunade stopped him. “That was him,” she said, then went back to the entrance. The guard was secretly glad she had stopped him. He hadn’t been thinking right. And he didn’t want to end up like the body on the street.


Hey please comment I would really enjoy it. There is a chance you can be in the story. Sorry guys its only for girls. I plan on hooking all the genin up but I need names. Like good Japanese names. Just leave a comment saying the Japanese name. I will post the list later on. And its first come first served. So girls who like gaara says so in the comment and the first one to do so will be with him!!!

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Tifa777 on August 10, 2008, 5:06:58 AM

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Tifa777............................

TTfan1 on May 27, 2008, 7:10:08 AM

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TTfan1OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHH!!!!

I'm interested now.

SquishyNinaChan on December 31, 2007, 2:56:02 AM

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SquishyNinaChanOMG i finally remembered i have to read this....*forgot what FAC even was*
ummm well great story!......er...well, so far..........

Kohakucrazy on December 7, 2007, 12:27:34 PM

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KohakucrazyThis is... ok...I guess.... I mean the stranger was kinda creepy... Who IS it?

rffraff05 on December 8, 2007, 7:03:59 AM

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rffraff05you'll find out!

AnimeAngel87 on November 25, 2007, 4:09:48 AM

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AnimeAngel87When be Akane comming in?

rffraff05 on December 3, 2007, 8:30:26 PM

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rffraff05she'll be coming soon in the sequel

FluffysPrincess2968 on November 28, 2007, 10:06:39 AM

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FluffysPrincess2968Just thought I would throw this out here....

HOLY CRAP!!!!! THIS STORY IS HIGHER RANKING THAN SUPER SONIC TRUTH OR DARE!!!! :O!!!!
THATS ONE OF THE MOST POPULAR STORIES ON FAC!!!! :O!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

rffraff05 on December 3, 2007, 8:27:00 PM

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rffraff05fluffy? care to explain what that means to me? i have no idea about what you are talking about

FluffysPrincess2968 on December 5, 2007, 7:50:22 AM

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FluffysPrincess2968uhhh... look at my favs stories list ON MY PROFILE. u kno how it says them to the side under ur featured art? it moved above SSTOD. :D

Nekogal411 on August 26, 2007, 6:23:53 AM

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Nekogal411Cool! ^^

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:35:27 PM

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rffraff05thank you!!

Symphoniaprincess101 on August 25, 2007, 12:34:10 PM

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Symphoniaprincess101might have to read it when i get home on monday.

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:34:14 PM

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rffraff05awww! we'll see you then!

Chamilionshin on August 25, 2007, 6:48:09 AM

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Chamilionshinyer strorey is awesome

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:33:07 PM

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rffraff05thanks!!

eelchic on August 25, 2007, 3:27:07 AM

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eelchicSOOOOOOO GOOD LIKE AMAZINGLY GOOD!!!!!!!!!! I DEFF CANT WAIT 4 NEXT CHAPPY!!! STRAWBERRIES ROCK LOLZ!!!

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:32:09 PM

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rffraff05STRAWBERRIES ROCK!!!

angelfox on August 24, 2007, 11:03:12 AM

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angelfoxVery cool!^^

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:29:32 PM

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rffraff05thank you!!

eelchic on August 20, 2007, 2:44:52 PM

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eelchicAWSOMELY AWSOME RELLY GOOD!!!!!!!

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:26:22 PM

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rffraff05YAY!!! Thanks!

winxgirl21 on August 6, 2007, 8:02:19 AM

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winxgirl21This story is really awesome so far! Can I make a suggestion? Maybe put a little bit more spacing in it. Other than that, I can't wait for the next chapter!

rffraff05 on November 24, 2007, 10:20:16 PM

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rffraff05point taken!

Kouni46892742 on November 23, 2007, 12:01:23 PM

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Kouni46892742OMGOMGOMGOMG!!!

THESE WERE ALL AWESOME!!! YESS!!!!

rffraff05 on November 23, 2007, 12:09:36 PM

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rffraff05thanks!!!!

Kouni46892742 on November 23, 2007, 12:17:33 PM

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Kouni46892742Really! Now you need to submit again soon! I can't take the suspense! It's killing me!

*dies*
 
See what I mean?!

FluffysPrincess2968 on November 23, 2007, 12:34:19 PM

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FluffysPrincess2968*pulls a Kool-aid* OH YEEEEEEAAAAAAAAHHH!!!! *dies*

rffraff05 on November 23, 2007, 12:23:47 PM

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rffraff05yeah, i know what you mean

eelchic on November 18, 2007, 5:57:01 AM

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eelchicOMG THOSE LAST 3 CHAPPS WERE AMZING I LUVED THEM EXPECIALLY WITH NEJI AND HINATA CANT WAIT 4 NEXT UPDATE!!!!!! ^-^ <3

AnimeAngel87 on October 26, 2007, 10:21:20 AM

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AnimeAngel87Sorry 4 the late reviews i havent been on 4 a while

eelchic on October 20, 2007, 12:38:47 AM

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eelchicINTERESTING WAT WILL SASUKE DO? WILL HE BETRAY DAN OR OROCHIMARU? WAT WILL NARUTO LEARN? JUST WAT IM WONDERING FANTASTICAL CHAPPY CANT WAIT 4 NEXT 1 CAKE 4 U ^-^!!!!

eelchic on October 18, 2007, 5:53:12 AM

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eelchicxiting chap!!!! who will learn the flashes technique? this is wat im lookin forward 2 Yah

eelchic on October 4, 2007, 5:49:38 AM

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eelchicawsome chap cant wait 4 next one!!!!!!

eelchic on September 28, 2007, 6:39:20 AM

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eelchicawsomeness cant wait 4 next one!!!!! ^-^

SharinganKakashi on September 24, 2007, 1:11:12 PM

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SharinganKakashithe preview for that chapter was great lol im still behinde 2 chapters il have to read it tomarrow later dude and that's very clever this will be very no extremly long not only that but itl be great mabey some day theyl make it into a chapter or movie in the REAL show i wouldnt put it past them in 18 chp youv had 1000 veiws
in my 3 chapters iv had 50 veiws -_-" oh well im not cut out for storey writeing.

SasukesGirl01 on September 22, 2007, 12:01:11 AM

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SasukesGirl01hey! i loved it! do you.. think my oc could be in it!?

rffraff05 on September 22, 2007, 1:00:44 AM

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rffraff05sure! i just need some information, but you might have to wait a while. everyone who reads my story has an oc in it

AnimeAngel87 on September 21, 2007, 11:34:23 AM

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AnimeAngel87O.C?

D:

rffraff05 on September 21, 2007, 12:59:36 PM

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rffraff05did you want your's in here?

AnimeAngel87 on September 21, 2007, 1:00:52 PM

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AnimeAngel87Yes

:D

FluffysPrincess2968 on September 21, 2007, 11:53:28 AM

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FluffysPrincess2968OMG!!! KICK-@$$!!!! WRITE MORE!!! and, again, WHEN WILL MY OTHER OC COME IN!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

rffraff05 on September 21, 2007, 12:58:44 PM

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rffraff05i told you, just be patient and wait!!!

rffraff05 on September 21, 2007, 10:58:02 AM

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rffraff05sweeet!! 200 comments! thank you all my readers, this means a lot to me!

rffraff05 on September 21, 2007, 9:07:11 AM

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rffraff05yes!! 1000 views! thank you everyone!

Ulrich101692 on September 19, 2007, 11:27:01 AM

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rffraff05 on September 19, 2007, 11:34:38 AM

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rffraff05thanks!! hope you enjoy the rest!

vesblondie on September 19, 2007, 10:31:55 AM

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vesblondieWow. Amazing writing style :] It's really really good!
I love this already. I'M HOOKED NOW. >X3 *faves*

rffraff05 on September 19, 2007, 11:23:28 AM

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rffraff05yay i love faving!

ninjaofthewaterlily on September 19, 2007, 11:02:32 AM

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ninjaofthewaterlilywow!!!! this is so cool!!!
i likes it!

ninjaofthewaterlily on September 19, 2007, 11:09:01 AM

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ninjaofthewaterlilyi plan on reading the next couple of chapters in a little while!!!

rffraff05 on September 19, 2007, 11:20:51 AM

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rffraff05sweet!

Kouni46892742 on September 16, 2007, 10:32:20 AM

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Kouni46892742PLEASE UPDATE SOON! THE SUSPENCE IS KILLING ME!!!

eelchic on September 15, 2007, 10:31:17 AM

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eelchicVERY GOOD BUT WHAT WAZ KIBA GUNNA THREATEN NARUTO FOR BUT THAT WAZ VERY NARUTASTIC WITH LOTS OF AWSOMENESS!!!!!!! ^-^

Kouni46892742 on September 12, 2007, 9:54:42 AM

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Kouni46892742Please tell me I'll be more in the next chappie....

eelchic on September 6, 2007, 6:11:07 AM

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eelchicOMG I TOTALLY LOVE ANIMAL I HAVE BECOME ITS ON MY PROFILE AND LUVED 9TAILS FIGHT TOTALLY AMAZING IT BUT WHO WON AND WHO GETS 2 FIGHT DAN? IT WAZ AWSOME!!!!!!!! SO STRAWBERRIES 4 U! ^-^

onepiecenut on September 4, 2007, 11:12:03 AM

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onepiecenutRather intresting...I'm gonna go read the rest.

rffraff05 on September 4, 2007, 11:14:40 AM

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rffraff05thank you!

eelchic on September 3, 2007, 10:19:47 AM

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eelchicOMG IT WAZ A SET UP!!! AND WAT WAZ IN NARUTO'S BOOK AND WAT WAZ NARUTO'S BOOK GREAT CHAP AMAZING CANT WAIT 4 NEXT ONE !!!! >_< *SQEAL*

TheMasterOfPuppets on September 3, 2007, 3:00:28 AM

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TheMasterOfPuppetsInteresting.........

eelchic on September 1, 2007, 1:08:35 PM

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eelchicTISK TISK TISK SHINO, HINATA KICKED SOME A** U GO GIRL!!!! GO GO GO SHIKAMARU YAH!!! GREAT CHAP CANT WAIT 4 NEXT ONE HAVE A GOOD LABOR DAY!!!

nextguardian on September 1, 2007, 11:48:47 AM

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nextguardianGreat start!

rffraff05 on September 1, 2007, 11:53:50 AM

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rffraff05thanks

Kouni46892742 on September 1, 2007, 9:06:32 AM

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Kouni46892742O_O...No! Bad Shino! Don't let Neji-nii die!

eelchic on September 1, 2007, 4:19:30 AM

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eelchicbest chapter so far cant wait 4 next 1 strawberries 4 u !!!!!!!!! ^-^

FluffysPrincess2968 on August 31, 2007, 2:01:53 PM

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FluffysPrincess2968*cries* WAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! POOR DAN-SAN!!!!! WAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!

FluffysPrincess2968 on August 31, 2007, 1:16:33 PM

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FluffysPrincess2968OMG!! FREE MALL!!!! VIDEO GAMES AHOY!!!! (and yes, I AM A GIRL!)

Nekogal411 on August 31, 2007, 11:29:05 AM

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Nekogal411^____^ Awesome! Well written! i was wondering if my charater could be in it? or something

eelchic on August 29, 2007, 1:33:37 PM

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eelchicAWSOME BY THE AWSOMENESS RELLY FUNNY 2 CANT WAIT 4 NEXT CHAP!!! STRAWBERRIES!!

Symphoniaprincess101 on August 28, 2007, 2:14:02 AM

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Symphoniaprincess101awsome ^^

eelchic on August 27, 2007, 7:57:23 AM

eelchic on
eelchicOMG THE CHAP 9 WAZ AMAZING AND CHAPTER 10 WAZ SO SWEET!!!!! I TOTALLY LOVED BOTH

117masterchief on August 25, 2007, 12:17:17 PM

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117masterchiefcool

rffraff05 on August 25, 2007, 12:37:44 PM

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rffraff05Thanks and tell your friends!

SharinganKakashi on August 16, 2007, 1:54:59 AM

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SharinganKakashii must say ur a very good storey writer ul have 2 tell me when u update ^^

rffraff05 on August 16, 2007, 4:19:32 AM

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rffraff05thanks a lot might have chapter 6 up today but i have orientation in like 3 hours it might be late tonight

sasukeXsakuraforever on August 14, 2007, 9:49:16 AM

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sasukeXsakuraforeverZOMG I like it so far! Very nice description and personalities! If I'm allowd to be in the story, my name could be Celine. Its not very Japanese, but it's definatly not a common name like Brittany or Jessica. So Celine is my name, and if you don't like that or you want it japanese, I'll think of something! GOOD STORY THOUGH! Keep it up! ^_~

rffraff05 on August 14, 2007, 9:51:18 AM

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rffraff05hey thanks bunches i might squeeze in # 4 today if not today tommorow

sasukeXsakuraforever on August 14, 2007, 9:55:37 AM

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sasukeXsakuraforeverNo problem! ^_^ So it's ok if I use Celine as my name? Because I can change it if you would like?

rffraff05 on August 14, 2007, 10:00:11 AM

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rffraff05no no Celine is great its awesome

sasukeXsakuraforever on August 14, 2007, 10:02:54 AM

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sasukeXsakuraforeverOk then! Thank you so much!^^