Chapter 1 - A girl Alone
Submitted January 10, 2005 Updated January 11, 2005 Status Incomplete | These are poems about my feelings so don't laugh at them or i'll...KILL YOU!
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Chapter 1 - A girl Alone
Chapter 1 - A girl Alone
Thispoem was made because I always feel alone.
A girl who once lived in akingdom strong and bold.
The girl looked at the wallsof her kingdom, they were weak and old.
She was scared so she criedher heart out for help, but no one heard the girl’s cry.
She came to a room with theones she loved, but they didn’t notice the girl’s pretty face at all. As if shewere a ghost.
So she blew her last kiss tothem and walked quietly away.
A girl who once lived in akingdom strong and bold.
The girl looked at the wallsof her kingdom, they were weak and old.
She was scared so she criedher heart out for help, but no one heard the girl’s cry.
She came to a room with theones she loved, but they didn’t notice the girl’s pretty face at all. As if shewere a ghost.
So she blew her last kiss tothem and walked quietly away.
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NekoHellAngel on September 8, 2005, 4:48:47 AM
Hope you didn't feel too lonely when you wrote this. Good poem nonetheless though! ^^NekoHellAngel on September 8, 2005, 4:48:17 AM
Hope you didn't feel too lonely when you wrote this. Good poem nonetheless though! ^^Yamikitten4390 on August 31, 2005, 11:28:55 PM
thats good i always find it hard to think up poems but u've done it quite good.Redneck_Anime_Gurl on July 28, 2005, 10:51:36 PM
I know how you feel.And your poetry is 100 times better than mine.WingedDragonOfRa on July 27, 2005, 9:30:44 PM
not badi almost cryed
i'm going to add it to my favourites
Vampire_King_Gothika on July 22, 2005, 5:49:49 AM
Heh, not bad! I liked it.Bakura_Lover on July 22, 2005, 3:51:49 AM
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awww i know the feeling but i also just like drama and sad stuf keep it up girl ^^Kirara on July 21, 2005, 5:43:22 PM
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awwwww...the loneliness...this is great,great job!Baby_Girl9168 on July 6, 2005, 7:06:00 AM
i like it a lot do more do moreMidnight_Chaos on April 11, 2005, 10:31:28 PM
I love this!!! A lot of talent you've got there. I didn't laugh, so don't worry. I thought it was quite sad to be honest, but it was a nice poem. Being lonely is one of the worst things in this world...Wild-Card-KKC on April 8, 2005, 8:59:15 AM
it's beautiful.Vampire_Maiden on April 6, 2005, 11:23:54 AM
r we twins cuz im also always ignoredBlack_Breeze on April 4, 2005, 10:56:55 AM
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Hmm, how interesting. This reminds me of those 55 fiction stories, which has to get the plot and everything down in 55 words. It's nice, and the ending's bittersweet. Try and extend your choice of words a bit and then the poem will be perfect.Anime_Dude_0 on April 4, 2005, 6:35:28 AM
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oh yeah....dont kill me.Anime_Dude_0 on April 4, 2005, 6:33:45 AM
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AHHAAHHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHa...no im just joking its good real good, i should've asked you to help me w/ my poetry project.DemonTheifQueen on April 4, 2005, 6:22:11 AM
THis is nice!You're a good poet and you didn't know but you're feet show it cause they're long fellows!
sorry....my english teacher said that to me a few days ago!
keep it up!
YamiTenshi on March 26, 2005, 10:18:35 AM
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*sniff* SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAADDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!keirei on March 21, 2005, 1:45:02 AM
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is this a poem? eh...maybe more stanzas please? i don't understand. it's like a story with no climax...sort of boring. (but i am not laughing.)majinvegetamarik on February 14, 2005, 6:59:36 AM
this is a very good poem! it really expresses a lot. awesome job!^^+favs!Sexy_Bishi_Queen on January 15, 2005, 11:59:35 PM
You do have a really nice way of doing things here. Your language is very puntual and have you read any of my stuff? If not, please do!
Vampire-Queen-Gothika on January 11, 2005, 7:44:36 AM
hey, that's pretty good ^^ I know how ya feel, sometimes I feel really alone...xomarikzsweetzox on January 11, 2005, 4:56:10 AM
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