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Chapter 2 - My Black Stallion

These are poems about my feelings so don't laugh at them or i'll...KILL YOU!

Chapter 2 - My Black Stallion

Chapter 2 - My Black Stallion
I don’treally own a horse. So I just hope you like it. Oh this is for ainemangaloveras a thank you for the picture.[/i][/b]
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His coat isas black as night[/i][/b]
His mane isas cold as getting frost bite[/i][/b]
His eyesshine like the north star[/i][/b]
But fromaffar, he’s still in my heart [/i][/b]
Althoughwe’re apart, I still remember the day I bought him[/i][/b]
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When I wouldride him constantly[/i][/b]
His coat wasas soft as silk [/i][/b]
And when Ifed him milk, he kissed me[/i][/b]
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Ever sincewe’ve been apart I’ve dreamed about riding him once more.[/i][/b]

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Yamikitten4390 on August 31, 2005, 11:29:57 PM

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Yamikitten4390another good poem u've written :D

XxInkfingersxXxRavenbloodxX on August 21, 2005, 10:14:49 PM

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XxInkfingersxXxRavenbloodxXoooooooooooo a pwetty horse!!!!! they rock!

Redneck_Anime_Gurl on July 28, 2005, 10:54:10 PM

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Redneck_Anime_GurlSame I said about the first poem,but i agree with Vampire-Queen-Gothika.

bone_dancer on July 27, 2005, 3:25:56 AM

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bone_danceri love this poem. great description. continue writing it would be great to see more.

Vampire_King_Gothika on July 22, 2005, 5:51:00 AM

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Vampire_King_GothikaNice job! Keep it up.

Bakura_Lover on July 22, 2005, 3:52:55 AM

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Bakura_LoverHey good one ^^ not much to say annymore

Kirara on July 21, 2005, 5:46:10 PM

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Kirarawat a lovely horsey....this is sooo perfect...yea,i agree with you guys,i think the 1st one is a lot better! ^o^

Baby_Girl9168 on July 6, 2005, 7:08:13 AM

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Baby_Girl9168oh my goodness thats so cute!!!:::trys to hold back tears!:::

Midnight_Chaos on April 11, 2005, 10:34:43 PM

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Midnight_ChaosI liked this one too!!! Perfect description of the horse and the order of words. It's a really nice peice of writing. Well done!!! ^-^

Wild-Card-KKC on April 8, 2005, 9:01:07 AM

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Wild-Card-KKCOooh I like, this is good very good!!!

Vampire_Maiden on April 6, 2005, 11:25:03 AM

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Vampire_Maidenawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

Black_Breeze on April 4, 2005, 11:06:30 AM

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Black_BreezeGood, nice way to show the relationship between a horse and its owner. Yet again, I think that there would have been better use of words in the story, but it's nice. A little editing here and there, and it will be perfect. ^_^

DemonTheifQueen on April 4, 2005, 6:25:35 AM

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DemonTheifQueenTHis is REALY NICE! I WUV HORSIES! ^-^

pwees write more! ^-^

majinvegetamarik on February 14, 2005, 7:00:46 AM

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majinvegetamarikyou are a very good poet! you should become professinal!^^ never stop writing, your to good to stop! +favs!^^

Sexy_Bishi_Queen on January 16, 2005, 12:10:35 AM

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LoVELY DISCRIPTION OF HORSE! I ACCTUALLY HATE HORSES AND THEY TASTE NICE WHEN YOU GO TO FRANCE CAUSE THEY DON'T EAT STEAK THEY EAT HORSE! NICE POEM ANYWAYS!

SailorMars on January 15, 2005, 12:14:52 AM

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SailorMarsI like the first one a lot more...your a good poet ^-^

AnimeMangaLover on January 14, 2005, 8:58:13 AM

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AnimeMangaLoverIt's good! I love horses! ^^ And I got a perfect image of the horse because of the way you described him. Great poem! ^^

xomarikzsweetzox on January 14, 2005, 8:54:56 AM

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xomarikzsweetzoxanimemangalover if you are reading this you must comment it and soory if your user name is spelled wrong

Vampire-Queen-Gothika on January 11, 2005, 7:46:42 AM

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Vampire-Queen-Gothikai like the 1st 1 more, but this is good too. AnimeMangaLover should read this, she loves horses ^^