Kerri??
Submitted April 17, 2009 Updated June 22, 2009 Status Incomplete | After getting kidnapped, girl finds herself in world where the supernatural exist and to find that she's not human, but a sorceress I don't have a title for my story yet Be harsh on the comments y'all cos i'm thinking of getting this published x
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Chapters
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Taken
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Chapter 2 - Captor
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Chapter 3 - End of Her World
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Chapter 4 - Assigned
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Chapter 5 - Awaken
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Chapter 6 - Frustration and Desperation Can Do This to You
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Chapter 7 - Making Friends
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Chapter 8 - Temptation
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Chapter 9 - Knowing Your Purpose
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Chapter 10 - A Plan Backfired
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Chapter 11 - First Lesson
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Chapter 12 - Exhausted
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Chapter 13 - A Plan for Revenge
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Chapter 14 - Strong
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Chapter 15 - Betrayed
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Chapter 16 - The Point
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Chapter 17 - Knowledge
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Chapter 18 - Agony
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Chapter 19 - Discovery
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Chapter 20 - Persuasive
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Chapter 21 - Invasion
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Chapter 22 - Chased
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Chapter 23 - Barely Saved
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Chapter 24 - Living with the Guilt
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Chapter 25 - Finding a Babysitter
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Chapter 26 - Information
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Chapter 27 - Painting Fun
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Chapter 28 - Playing Hairdresser
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Chapter 29 - The Kiss
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Chapter 30 - The Truth About The Ex-girlfriend
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Chapter 31 - Giving in to Temptation
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Chapter 32 - Seriously Cheesy Nicknames
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Chapter 33 - Sorry Carter
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Chapter 34 - Powerful
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Chapter 35 - Breakup and Makeup
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Chapter 36 - Trouble...With a Capital T
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Chapter 37 - Oh Crap.
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Chapter 38 - Comforting
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Chapter 39 - The Kind-Of Plan
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Chapter 40 - The Ring With Her Name On
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Chapter 41 - The Dinner
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Chapter 42 - As The Knife Meets Its Doom...
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Chapter 43 - The Boss Knows?!
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Chapter 44 - Afterwards
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Chapter 45 - Registration
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Chapter 46 - Meeting in the Middle
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Chapter 47 - The Calm Before The Storm
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Chapter 48 - The Werewolf Cometh...
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Chapter 49 - What Happened
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Chapter 50 - He Is SO Drunk
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Chapter 51 - Damn Those Dreams
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Chapter 52 - Taken Care Of
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Chapter 53 - So That's The Way It's Going To Be
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Chapter 54 - Mick
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Chapter 55 - The Great Escape
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Chapter 56 - Not a Dream This Time
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Chapter 57 - She's Really Back!
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Toelor on December 30, 2009, 7:17:04 AM
Toelor on (Chapter: 19)
u kno u keep spelling practice rong rite? srry re-reading this b4 i read kerri 2Kaley on August 28, 2009, 7:27:19 AM
Kaley on (Chapter: 7)
you had a doctor who reference, does that mean that you watch the show?xxnataxx on August 28, 2009, 12:23:46 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
no lol that thing just kind of popped into my head...but some of my friends watch it and say it's really good...xxKaley on August 28, 2009, 2:31:15 AM
Kaley on (Chapter: 5)
these too should get together.xxnataxx on August 28, 2009, 2:31:56 AM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 5)
...they are together lolKaley on August 28, 2009, 2:28:06 AM
Kaley on (Chapter: 4)
i'd hate to see the look on that guy's face when he remembered about the stuff.xxnataxx on August 28, 2009, 2:30:09 AM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 4)
lol hey Kerri2's out btw..havent talked to you in a while...how're your hols? or what' left of them anyway lol
xx
Gartenschlauch on August 8, 2009, 6:39:16 PM
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Really AWESOME, you are very talented, not like me XDxxnataxx on August 8, 2009, 6:40:16 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 1)
lol thanks. it's a bit brief, though, isn't it? like...really...i dunno. but thanks anyways (: xxToelor on July 13, 2009, 12:03:53 PM
Toelor on (Chapter: index)
omg i love your story i'm addicted to it!you should... i mean you have to...no you MUST get this published! both my mom and myself like it and we'd buy it if you ever got published. i'm even trying to get my friends to read it although i'm not done with it yet but it's so good. i want as many people to know about it as i can possibly get. keep it up and by the way u and ur story are going on my favorites!!!!!!!!!!!!
xxnataxx on July 13, 2009, 6:52:43 PM
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aww thx (: xxKokoroTsuki24 on June 30, 2009, 11:10:24 AM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 57)
GREAT JOB! *claps enthusiastically* well not really but in my mind...anyway i think you should end it here. espescially since it might be hard to make another chapter off of this one. i say call it end on this one.
as for a title... well ill just keep thinking for you. im coming up with a blank. STILL!
anyway very awesome story, the works. im not sure i wanna type it all out. sorry! ^-^
xxnataxx on June 30, 2009, 8:03:28 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 57)
thx...writing a sequel now...maybe i'll upload a chapter in a few days xxKokoroTsuki24 on June 30, 2009, 11:01:42 AM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 56)
OOOOoooooh!!! nice ending!
you really shoulnt let me use my imagination with that kinda stuff tho... i dont think its good for developement or whatever. ;D
xxnataxx on June 30, 2009, 8:03:05 PM
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lol not my fault if you've got a corrupted mind...jks xxKokoroTsuki24 on July 1, 2009, 12:13:11 PM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: index)
hey! total offense!LOLZ! jkjk. ^-^
KokoroTsuki24 on June 30, 2009, 10:48:09 AM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 55)
ok hang on. driscoll made the key to the cuff the NECKLACE?! wow thats clever. but actually i guess you did huh? lol!Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:31:00 AM
Prodigies on (Chapter: 6)
:D He's a dragon!!!!!!!I knew I loved this guy!!!!!!!
xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 6:23:02 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 6)
whoa lol that's a lot of comments...thanks for taking the time (:haha yea i like dragons too...
xx
Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:20:21 AM
Prodigies on (Chapter: 5)
:D Well, I can say one thing: I am really liking this pairing. I tend to adore the couples that start off hating each other. XD I hope they do get together....I'm hopeless...hah...
Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:14:11 AM
Prodigies on (Chapter: 4)
XD Omg the last line killed me.That poor, poor man. *Laughs*
Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:11:31 AM
Prodigies on (Chapter: 3)
D: Poor Kerri... That last part really and actually got to me. I hate when things like that happen. ><XD I still like Arik though. *laughs* He reminds me of a few of my own characters.
Awesome plotline. Can't wait to go on.
Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:06:00 AM
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I may sound really odd, but I like this Arik guy. XD I have a strange soft spot for the tough dudes. I can't wait to see his background and what's gonna happen.Prodigies on June 27, 2009, 9:03:38 AM
Prodigies on (Chapter: 1)
Wow, you've got quite a style going here. I love the way your write.Literally, with the first few lines I got sucked in, and when the cars showed up, I had to know what happened. I can't wait to see what's next.
blackcatcurse on June 22, 2009, 7:49:41 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 57)
Great ending! (Happy!)Revenge of Ty!
xxnataxx on June 22, 2009, 6:55:10 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 57)
lol glad you liked it xxblackcatcurse on June 21, 2009, 5:33:09 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 56)
Ooooh!=^-^=
blackcatcurse on June 20, 2009, 7:08:17 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 55)
YAY!KokoroTsuki24 on June 19, 2009, 1:08:33 PM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 54)
so wait. the boss in the SS AND CE is ariks dad? and he knew? ohmygosh im so confused.and this is seriously the last chapter?! and did you say you were gonna make a second book? by the way i was thinking it over last night and i figured that your story is about 130 pages, give or take. so whatever this second book is i think you should make like part too or something. idk. thats just my idea.
xxnataxx on June 20, 2009, 12:45:03 AM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 54)
oh yea, and my story is 424 pages long lol so...yeaKokoroTsuki24 on June 30, 2009, 10:43:30 AM
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oh... yeah i guess that makes sense... but holy crap! that many?! wow. congrats!
xxnataxx on June 19, 2009, 8:17:00 PM
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nononothe boss of the SS is MANDY'S dad. and the boss of the CE is Arik's dad.
and it's not the last chapter. not yet. but i'm going to add on chapters from the second book so it's like the same book, if you know what i mean. actually i dont really know what to do yet. but yea
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on June 30, 2009, 10:42:35 AM
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OH!!!! IM SO STUPID!!!!geez i cant believe i forgot. *shakes head*
that was a SAD memory lapse.
KokoroTsuki24 on June 19, 2009, 12:40:49 PM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 53)
hmm... very interesting.KokoroTsuki24 on June 19, 2009, 12:34:34 PM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 52)
lol! they do sound like his parents! AND OMG!!!!! i forgot to comment before but the boss works for the CE?!?!? thats just wrong!!
oh but the whole dramatic thing is funny.
blackcatcurse on June 19, 2009, 1:32:20 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 54)
Yay! *cheers on the team*xxnataxx on June 19, 2009, 3:22:09 AM
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lolblackcatcurse on June 17, 2009, 5:54:08 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 52)
They better have left him with crackers!KokoroTsuki24 on June 17, 2009, 4:58:53 AM
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OMG! that is so sad about arik but i couldnt help laughing most of the chapter.i know im a bad person.
ur very good. u should get this published
xxnataxx on June 17, 2009, 5:34:40 AM
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lol yea. that was pretty hilarious. especially the shampoo part...haha thanks... xx
KokoroTsuki24 on June 17, 2009, 5:16:12 AM
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aw so sweet.but i have to admit i was almost reduced to tears too. that was sad.
advice: I think you should expand on Sitaras childhood at some point. just to tell you. cuz that got me curious. ;D
xxnataxx on June 17, 2009, 5:17:15 AM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 51)
haha k maybe in the next book...xx
p.s. working on it already (;
blackcatcurse on June 16, 2009, 7:41:59 PM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 51)
Awww...It's so sweet!
xxnataxx on June 16, 2009, 6:39:40 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
hey people (:i just finished writing Kerri! I just have to upload the chapters. the end's like a major cliffhanger though, (so don't hate me lol)
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on June 15, 2009, 5:28:15 AM
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lol! love the ending!i also like the part where she hit his... well you know. and then says hes speechless. that was funny.
xxnataxx on June 15, 2009, 5:47:31 AM
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lol i was laughing when i did that xxKokoroTsuki24 on June 15, 2009, 5:42:49 AM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 48)
NO! the bastards!KokoroTsuki24 on June 15, 2009, 5:21:02 AM
KokoroTsuki24 on (Chapter: 45)
OH MY GOSH! i started laughing so hard at the switching part! that was freaking hilarious! ok ima gonna go finish now.blackcatcurse on June 14, 2009, 7:40:31 PM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 48)
0.0Oh the horror~!
xxnataxx on June 14, 2009, 7:52:29 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 48)
haha yea my friend was almost in tears after she read it. xxblackcatcurse on June 11, 2009, 5:55:57 AM
blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 47)
Chapter title recommendation: The Calm before the Storm
(Not a great one. In fact, I think you might have used it. Lemme check...)
xxnataxx on June 11, 2009, 9:30:16 PM
xxnataxx on (Chapter: 47)
ooooh i havent used it yet...that's a good one...thx (:xx
blackcatcurse on June 9, 2009, 5:46:31 AM
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Meeting in the middle.I like how Kerri made her mating of Arik seem like she was helping Mandy instead of hurting her. Good idea.
xxnataxx on June 9, 2009, 7:59:14 PM
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Meeting in the middle...? lol sorry dont really get that...is that a name for my chapter or sth?xx
blackcatcurse on June 10, 2009, 6:15:31 AM
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Chapter name. They were meeting in the middle when they were argueing about time.That's why you always argue twice of what you want. =^-^=
xxnataxx on June 10, 2009, 8:02:19 PM
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haha omg that's right...didnt realise that before...thanks (:xx
blackcatcurse on June 6, 2009, 9:36:17 PM
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Hehe, Kerri is clever.I like her way to bend words to her own use.
xxnataxx on June 6, 2009, 10:06:58 PM
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lol thxxx
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 5:16:40 AM
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aw how sweet! um the distraction part. very good idea! i also like the theory involved with that necklace thing. hmm... maybe you could mention the shoe she hit arik with was the match to the one she threw at drake or something. that would be funny.
oh and i burst out laughing at like the first sentence. that was funny.
oh and the part with drake coming in was hiarious! arik was all like, 'you wait for an answer, then come in' that was really funny. one of my fave parts.
oh and i just dont wanna look in the dictionary to confirm, so does implode basically mean explode?
oh and seriously, what ur fave color?
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 5:17:46 AM
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wow. four og those sentences started out with 'oh and'.thats kind sad. XD
blackcatcurse on June 2, 2009, 7:53:23 AM
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Implode is SIMILAR to explode. But implode implies collapsing, not expansion.I'm so glad nata didn't do a real sex scene. For a second, I thought she had her hands on a copy of Wicked.
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 7:57:27 AM
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yeah nata already explained it for me.lolz! yeah for awhile (the past few days actually) i thought she really was going to put it in. i kinda got scared. i was wondering how she was gonna put it and all. i tried not to use too much imagination...
xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 6:11:58 PM
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lol guys, seriously. the sexual content in my thing is mild, not sky high...xxKokoroTsuki24 on June 3, 2009, 12:38:41 AM
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lolz. sry. cant help the thoughts that suspence gives us though can you?xxnataxx on June 3, 2009, 1:53:45 AM
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lol i was looking forward to giving you guys some suspense...just...not in that way lolKokoroTsuki24 on June 3, 2009, 7:26:53 AM
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haha. lolz. well you managed to keep me interested. well u have been sice like the first chapter but... Shhh! its a secret! (from who, dont ask. XD)xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 5:32:01 AM
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lol you're right. i didnt even realise.xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 5:28:02 AM
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implode meams to explode internally. you know when things explode they...explode outwards? well, to implode is to explode...inwards lol if you understand.hmm...fave colours?
dark purple, dark green, black, silver.
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 5:31:28 AM
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oh ok. OH! yeah ok i remember what it means now! its mentioned in twilight! no wait eclipse. (have you read the series?)and those are very good color choices. ill see what i can do. XD
xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 5:33:23 AM
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i've finished them all...i actually read them before they became famous, then everybody else was like "omg i love them" lol and i couldnt say i loved them without being totally unoriginal anymore lolhaha thanks
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 5:38:16 AM
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aw im sorry. and i did too. except for breaking dawn. i had to wait like two months after school started to get to read it. and it was REALLY popular by then. but i read the other three during summer break. so i was halfway original. XDxxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 5:46:17 AM
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lolKokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 4:59:43 AM
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whoah! he turned into a dragon?! wicked! ok i have to finish reading ill comment again in a minute. XDKokoroTsuki24 on May 31, 2009, 1:29:33 PM
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hahaha... interesting... luff the ending! very... intriguing shall we say? lolz. and i like the part where shes trying to ignore the images. that was so funny! oh and was drake talking about the Denver dude? and lets see... oh yeah! i think you meant Drake beckoned her IMpatiently. 'case you wanna fix that. oh and the boss part was funny. and the part where she imitates Mandy. oh and i seriously laughed out loud when i realized what the title for the knife chapter meant! that was funny!ok im done... i think... XDxxnataxx on May 31, 2009, 7:08:13 PM
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lol omg did i write patiently? lol if i did i'll change it to impatiently...thxx for that loloh i havent heard from you in a while...how are you?
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on June 1, 2009, 10:41:21 AM
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fine fine thx for asking. and im doing pretty good. except im am SO not appreciating my parents right now! theyre making me clean something like every day! and today i got stuck helping clean the backyard, garage, breezeway, and den! and im currently supposed to be cleaning the kitchen. DX oh yeah and im sick. ive come down with SOMETHING. i just dont know what it is. all in all it just doesnt feel like break. but i am gong to Cali in a week! thats something to look forward to at least... :>xxnataxx on June 1, 2009, 8:06:31 PM
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ugh. i hate doing chores...oooh sounds fun...i wish i could go too...
KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 4:08:16 AM
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they are the worst. at least today i only have to do the microwave and fridge. :3 (looking on the bright side XD)and yeah im going to visit my aunt and were staying for like a week. i cant wait!
oh do u like my new avatar? i was getting tired of the orange and this pic has always been my fave.
xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 4:15:59 AM
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same here. i used to really like the sunset...however, i'm starting to think there's a bit too much pink in there...i'm more fond of the colour orange now...KokoroTsuki24 on June 2, 2009, 4:23:30 AM
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lolz. ill change it when i find something more suitable to ur taste. *giggles* whats ur fave color? ill see if i have something. ;Dxxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 4:25:33 AM
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lol nah it's fine. oh btw uploading a chapter...xxKokoroTsuki24 on May 22, 2009, 3:01:09 PM
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YES! love the last two chapters! theyre full of awesomeness! lolz. and when i saw the title of the chapter, i started like flipping out! i seriously thought Arik was going to propose ans i was like 'Aw! He's going to propose before the fight! how sweet!' of course, i found out he didnt. (oh wait hang on! duh! you already knew that cuz you wrote it! geez!) ok. yeah i know i could have just erased the comment before the parenthases part but i just felt like being weird. ^.^ hm. i just cant seem to write a short comment... oh well. hope it doesnt bother you!xxnataxx on May 22, 2009, 8:51:40 PM
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lol course it doesnt bother me. you know i always welcome comments (: xxKokoroTsuki24 on May 23, 2009, 4:39:44 AM
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lolz. yes that is true... well it just bugs me cuz then i have to read through the WHOLE comment just to see wut you answered or are commenting on or wutever. you should see some of the comments from when i first joined! now THOSE were SO short!xxnataxx on May 23, 2009, 3:11:24 PM
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lolblackcatcurse on May 20, 2009, 8:27:25 AM
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*faving*I wanna see how this turns out!
KokoroTsuki24 on May 22, 2009, 2:34:30 PM
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you REALLY should! like i mean it! seriously. you have to. and have you read the other chapters? arent they awesome?! oh and can you help think up a title for the story? nata requires help.Konohasdarkshadow on May 20, 2009, 8:51:54 AM
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um dont you put the engagement ring on your ring finger? the one between your middle finger and pinkie? lol you wrote middle finger, so at first i thought she was going to flip him off with it on. love the 2 new chaps!!! i was going to say that jewelry is spelled with 1 'l' but then i noticed that it can be spelled both ways, with 1 or 2 'l' s lol. keep on writing and keep up the good work (basically the same thing, but yeah, you get it lol)xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:05:24 PM
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lol i dont actually know which finger you put it on...isnt it the middle finger of your left hand?? the wedding ring (like the gold band) is on your fourth finger right? i dont know...xxKonohasdarkshadow on May 22, 2009, 11:20:37 AM
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in order from thumb to pinkie theses are the fingers and some uses:Thumb: Thumbs up/down
Pointer: Pointing
Middle: Insulting (F U/Flipping off)
Ring: Where your wedding rings usually go
Pinkie: Picking your nose or holding out - for fanciness
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okay, though these are kind of silly, this is some info i found :P
i love the pinkie info! XD (honestly had a large portion to do with why i chose this site's definitions and such)
xxnataxx on May 22, 2009, 8:33:57 PM
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lol well....that was....interesting lol i'll ask my mom (she should know lol from the personal experience)xxnataxx on May 22, 2009, 8:52:46 PM
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lol btw, she said that when you're engaged, you put the engagement ring on your middle finger. after you've married, you put both your engagement and your wedding ring on your ring finger...KokoroTsuki24 on May 23, 2009, 4:43:09 AM
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whoah! rly?! and sry i like to read the comments. but my mom only wears her wedding ring. and come to think of it, i forgot you even HAD an engagment ring! so you have like a wedding ring AND and engagement ring? thats kewl. i just hope mine arent gold. i HATE gold jewelry. silvers MUCH prettier.xxnataxx on May 23, 2009, 3:12:36 PM
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yea i think so too...silver's really pretty. gold is kind of like...tacky.anyway yea...when a guy proposes, he uses an engagement ring which you put on your third finger. after you get married, you'll have that wedding ring (which is usually a plain band) and you put it on your ring finger together with your engagement ring
KokoroTsuki24 on May 24, 2009, 1:36:45 PM
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oh ok! i get it! and i agree with you on the tacky part. it kinda screams 'Trying WAY to hard!' ya know? but silver is like i gues you could 'casual' but still kinda flashy. does that make sense?xxnataxx on May 24, 2009, 7:05:11 PM
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lol yep. totally get what you mean. silver's more classy and elegant as well, in my opinion.KokoroTsuki24 on May 25, 2009, 7:01:42 AM
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yes! exactly! curse you story writers! i mean... what? who said that? *smiles* XDKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 6:33:58 AM
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“Don’t worry, K,” Carter said cheerfully. “We had fun, right?” He leaned into her. “You promised,” he whispered before dropping a kiss on yourcheek.did you mean "her"? :)
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yepp thanks for that (: xxKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 8:06:14 AM
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just got through chap 39! and i just wanted to say that this story is written VERY professionally, and seems like a book that would be on store shelves....all it needs is a name...hmmmm (i will start to be the 3rd person to help think of one :P lol)KokoroTsuki24 on May 18, 2009, 2:31:56 PM
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oh yay! someone else to help criticize, think of titles, and offer encouragement! r u like new here? and isnt the story so freaking AWESOME?! and geez i forgot to mention those little error thing-a-mi-jigs. i see stuff... then forget about them like 5 mins later. but did u see that one title that the friend i mentioned came up with? it wuz like "dont worry itll all come out fine". idk i cant find it. but yeah. i think thats a good one. maybe you could like work off of it...? and did u realize i typed A LOT? believe it or not... i have the same exact problem with talking... >.< guess i haven't learned the concept of small messages yet. XDKonohasdarkshadow on May 19, 2009, 8:50:30 AM
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O_O HOLY LONG COMMENTS BATMAN! sry lol, inside joke if u didnt get it :P, and yeah i will try to work off of that title ^^. im not new tho lol, i just havent logged on in a couple of months...and I KNOW, this story is so freaking awesome!!!!!!!i love it!!!xxnataxx on May 19, 2009, 7:35:13 PM
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lol i love you guyskeep the comments coming? (lol even though i dont think i've added any new chapters...but feel free to comment on my other stories)
xxx
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oh yeah! i keep forgetting! i got so hooked with this one i forgot you had others! and twins get lost in the woods?! poor things! is there gonna be a crazy dude that does experiments on them like in the Holocaust?! well i guess i should read them but... it could be a good idea right? hold up! i dont even know if you finished the story! like i said i should read it... lolzKonohasdarkshadow on May 20, 2009, 8:37:11 AM
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i didnt get to commment on it yet. but i love the story about the twins that get lost in the woods so far ^^!Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 7:10:41 AM
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XD dominatrix much? XDDDKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 7:01:44 AM
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lol!!! i love the ending! (wow this comment started just like tsukis XD)Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 6:40:31 AM
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lol i love it how they acted like it wasnt a big deal after they kissed XD this story is great so far!Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 4:26:45 AM
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Guys like him never know what they have until they have until the girlfriend leaves him.” lol u repeated "they have until" twice ^^xxnataxx on May 18, 2009, 5:02:35 AM
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thxx (see if it werent for you my readers would think i was crazy lol)Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 6:09:57 AM
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lol no problem, im on chap 35! almost there!!!Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 6:14:49 AM
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25 i meant lolKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 4:11:37 AM
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“It’s like…peeing through my fingers. It’s so gross.” lmfao i love the way you writexxnataxx on May 18, 2009, 4:50:41 AM
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lol thx (:Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 4:15:36 AM
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you wrote "when's Arik when i need him" instead of where's....just a little grammar mistake ^^Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 3:57:30 AM
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roflmfao ahahahhahaha i loved this chapter!!!Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 2:25:36 AM
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omg this is epic O_O., i agree with tsuki, its like she knew who they were. maybe u should have one of them bump into her, or have police car lights or somethings that would scare her into wanting to run away? these r just suggestions though (trying to be harsh....not really working, i know ^^;)xxnataxx on May 18, 2009, 3:03:13 AM
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woww a comment from someone other than tsuki and me (lol i'm getting all excited now)lol dont worry, all comments are welcome (harsh or not lol) thanks loadssxx
Konohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 2:53:23 AM
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agreed! XDKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 2:29:38 AM
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arik seems....nice? lol good chap, moving onto the next one! (only 37 left)KokoroTsuki24 on May 17, 2009, 4:14:32 AM
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AWESOMENESS!!! love the new one! and okay fine. ill wait. i mean i guess ill have to but... ill try to wait patiently. but i guess its a good thing cuz im like busy with stupid end-of-the-year school projects and stuff. so i guess i should be focusing. but still...xxnataxx on May 17, 2009, 4:19:03 AM
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lol same here. and i hate revising for exams as well...anyway, i'll try my best
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KokoroTsuki24 on May 17, 2009, 4:22:26 AM
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revising for exams? how do u revise for exams? do u like already know what the questions are gonna be or something? i dont get it.xxnataxx on May 17, 2009, 4:29:58 AM
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no, you DON'T know the answers for it, which means you have to revise EVERYTHING to make sure you know it....it's annoyingKokoroTsuki24 on May 17, 2009, 4:35:50 AM
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okay. that must be annoying! geez! people cant just make things easy?! oh no i guess not! that might be WAY too much work for their poor little minds! *heavy sarcasm* *makes a mad face*KokoroTsuki24 on May 16, 2009, 5:09:19 AM
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half japanese? that's pretty kewl. and i started up here cuz i got tired of trying to find where we were... so yeah. and i like this particular smiley ( >.< )cuz, well... im not exactly sure. i just do. lolzxxnataxx on May 16, 2009, 6:13:01 PM
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lol yea. i was addicted to (: and (; you know, just normal smileys, but the other way round...lol that was pretty random but yeaKokoroTsuki24 on May 17, 2009, 3:32:33 AM
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lolz. i guess it wuz kinda random but not rly cuz we were on the smiley subject... and i LOVE the new chapter! well actually i love all of them, but still. gosh i cant wait for the next chapters! :Dxxnataxx on May 17, 2009, 3:41:44 AM
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wow you've read it already! didnt i just put it up like five mins ago?xx
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lolz. probably. but i wuz checking my emails nd it said i had gotten a new reply from you. so but i didnt click on the link and just went to the fanart homepage. i scrolled down to stories to see what new ones were up and it said kerri?? i wuz SO excitd! lolz. but yeah. otherwise i wouldnt have checked. and im also a fast reader so that couldve helped... XDxxnataxx on May 17, 2009, 3:48:38 AM
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lol oh and i added another chapter since you read so quickly lol but dont expect any for a few days...still writing xxKokoroTsuki24 on May 11, 2009, 10:23:59 AM
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oooh! yes! this is awesomeness! now i RLY cant wait for the other chapters! im like, spazzing out right now! well on the inside. cuz my mom would probably be freaked out otherwise. lolz. and i can kinda see (i think) where the whole british spelling thing comes in with 'rumours' and 'familiarise'. am i right? hmm... im STILL trying to think of some good titles. ill keep you posted with my ideas. =)xxnataxx on May 11, 2009, 8:02:14 PM
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lol yea. okk thxx (:KokoroTsuki24 on May 11, 2009, 12:48:49 PM
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my friend suggested a title and she said "dont worry, itll all come out fine" and she also wants to know... uh... r u a girl or a boy? i couldnt answer cuz, well, im not sure myself.xxnataxx on May 11, 2009, 8:01:34 PM
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ohohohhhh that sounds pretty good, actually...hm...thx lol and i'm a girlxxKokoroTsuki24 on May 12, 2009, 11:54:21 AM
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ya thats wut i thought but i just wanted to make sure in case i said something offensive. and my friend wuz referring to the part about the kidnapping and everything... thats where she thought of the title from... wait does that make sense...? hopefully! lolxxnataxx on May 12, 2009, 6:09:15 PM
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lol it's okay. i'm curious though...does nata really sound like a boy name?KokoroTsuki24 on May 14, 2009, 10:35:55 AM
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nope. not rly. it kinda sounds in between... thats not ur actual name is it? cuz wut i just typed could have been seriously offensive... so sry... and i kinda figures you were a girl cuz of the voice(gosh i sound like a reading teacher! lol) i can usually tell when its a girl or boy. have u ever felt that way? and im not sure if i commented on the newest chapters. i dont wanna read through all the comments already on so... THEYRE AWESOME! lolz. ^.^xxnataxx on May 14, 2009, 6:46:50 PM
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lol no...it isnt my real name. kinda like my nickname. your name isnt really kokoro tsuki either right? xxKokoroTsuki24 on May 15, 2009, 11:34:49 AM
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lolz. no. i doubt my parents would name me werewolf- as i translate kokoro tsuki to. kokoro tsuki loosely translated means 'blue moon'- it took me forever to put it together cuz i wuz lookin for a good username- but i found someone who knows japanese and they told me that fully translated, it means 'spirit child of the blue moon'. so i guess can see where werewolf comes in... >.< <- btw u may or may not have seen me use this face multiple times. its my signature 'smiley' i guess u could say, if u rly wanna know. >.<xxnataxx on May 15, 2009, 8:18:46 PM
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lol i went through this phase when i was obsessed with smileys...and that's a cool name "spirit child of the blue moon"...i like it...i have some friends who are half japanese.
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okay by voice i meant voice in the story in case that was a source of confusion. ;) and i also meant figured instead of figuresxxnataxx on May 10, 2009, 10:51:17 PM
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btw i changed Shyam's name to Ramani (because apparently according to my friend, Shyam's a boy name)...so yea. xxxxnataxx on May 11, 2009, 3:25:06 AM
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oh yea...i kind of changed it again (sorry!!) to Sitara. the name's quite pretty. Apparently it means star. which is kind of symbolic. somehow. xxKonohasdarkshadow on May 18, 2009, 8:02:54 AM
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okay i dont know which chapter it was, but i remember, you forgot to change one of the "Shyam"s to "Sitara". i remember because i got super confused at that point but just ignored it lolKokoroTsuki24 on May 10, 2009, 11:47:53 AM
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hm... im just curious and when im curious im usually annoying but... when do u think ur gonna put the next one up?xxnataxx on May 10, 2009, 7:13:17 PM
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lol soon. i promise.sorry if i havent uploaded any recently, but i JUST CANNOT FIND ANY INCENTIVE TO WRITE! (it's so frustrating, really.)
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KokoroTsuki24 on May 11, 2009, 10:09:27 AM
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its quite fine with me that u changed the name for shyam. sitaras a rly pretty name. and i see u put up the new chapters... *starts reading excitedly* lolzKokoroTsuki24 on May 5, 2009, 3:59:56 PM
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ooh. like the new ones! keep it up please! im DYING to know wut happens next!xxnataxx on May 5, 2009, 10:30:08 PM
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lol i'm actually quite excited to know what happens next as well cos i just cant decided...KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:55:47 PM
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um... just so u know... apologized is spelled with a z. my frend said to tell u. gosh sry if im getting annoyingxxnataxx on May 4, 2009, 8:03:00 PM
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lol i'm not british, btw. i just go to a british boarding school so they like kill me when i use z instead of s so it's kinda become a habitKokoroTsuki24 on May 5, 2009, 3:50:18 PM
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oh lol. sry then! ^.^xxnataxx on May 5, 2009, 10:30:53 PM
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lol s'okxxnataxx on May 4, 2009, 6:29:04 PM
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there are two spellings for apologise. to spell it with a z is american, to spell it with an s is british lolxx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:07:58 PM
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LOL! luff the ending. and im deciding to keep editing. i have a few ideas... if ull accept them of course... and OMG! i cant WAIT for the next chapter! im like BURSTING with excitement! and thats so funny how they hear eachothers thoughts that are only about them! wait does that make sense? and i blame homework for all my time issues too. lol. anyway... yeah. i think thats all. i really think u should keep up the writing. youve got a LOT of potential! btw, have you ever read the night world series? im just curious. cuz its rly good! u should read it if u get the time! and uh... ya i think thats it! night!xxnataxx on May 4, 2009, 8:02:31 PM
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of course I want your advice...i need all the advice i can get loli've written up a few more chapters...i'll put them up maybe after school (:
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:48:54 PM
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lolz. i still find the whole dr. who and dr. brown stuff funny! nice ending to the chapter! oh and i convinced my frend to read it too! she said she rly likes it but cant comment cuz shes not a member. figured id tell u anyway. convince you to publish it. btw, thought of a name yet? how about... umm... yeah nvm. my minds blank. ill keep thinking tho!KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:22:09 PM
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i like the part where she says shes trying to make him explode! lolKokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 1:55:19 PM
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oo em gee! i REALIZED something! if she has no idea shes a sorceress, why did she react like that to the black cars? i mean i understand two would be freaky, but seeing just one wouldntve freaked ME out! it wuz like she knew who they were or something! did she? o.O btw, im realizing this know cuz im rereading while i wait. lolz. >w<xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:11:22 PM
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yea...it's because it's not the first time they've been chasing her. it's just that she's managed to escape every time.hm...do u think i should say it so that everybody's sure?
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KokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:07:42 PM
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yes. no. maybe. i dont know! instead of like flat out saying it, maybe like have think 'not again' or something like that. or maybe 'do they ever give up?!' know wut i mean? and im sry i made so many darn replies! i realize now i shouldve just put them in one big one, but too late now! sry!xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:01:24 PM
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yea...i'll think about it...maybe when i rmb lol or when i have time(again, i blame the homework)KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 3:16:45 PM
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when arik tells her to close her eyes and she starts repeating him, try cutting her off at 'I' instead of 'may'. it sounds a bit better.xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:10:09 PM
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where is this?KokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:05:42 PM
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its, like in the um... 5th chapter... theyre going down the elevator thingy and arik says to close her eyes... that. part. and i will stop making those little correction comments if u like. but i would be happy to help find them if u dont mind. lolz. sry. i like to edit.xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:00:47 PM
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yup. got it. thx. nonono i like u making comments...KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 5:38:29 PM
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wuz the person that took shyam away, wuz that tyler?!xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:09:45 PM
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yeah lol..and he's gonna try to take kerri away too (which is going to like majorly piss arik off lol)xx
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NO! the horror! i didnt wanna no the second part but oh well! and i totally KNEW it about shyam! ooh, im good. lol. and cant he just stick with the one girl?! SHEESH! hes so greedy! and go arik! defend ur girl! lol. had to say that. >w<xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:00:27 PM
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lol i guess in a way, it's his job to like take pplcos he's like a ...well i'm not gonna tell u lol otherwise you're gonna know everyth
KokoroTsuki24 on May 1, 2009, 3:21:31 PM
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ooh. i think a good title would be like sorceress k or something! lol. idk if that would fit or not. just a crazy idea! >w<xxnataxx on May 1, 2009, 9:11:51 PM
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thanks (: (that's for your first comment lol) i was like "OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG" when i was typing the kissing scene lolhm...that isnt a bad idea...oh well...i still have trouble coming up with an awesome name, cos like i'm CONSIDERING (just considering) getting this published...
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KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 8:31:56 AM
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ooh! good luck! i wanna get my poems published. idk if theyd be god enough tho. :/ but ur story is like reading a book! except u have to wait for more chapters before u can read the rest. lolxxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:12:45 PM
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lol thx. i dont know whether this book is good enough either...but...y'know...it doesnt hurt to give it a tryKokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:00:56 PM
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no it doesn't hurt to give it a try. its like... reading twilight, or harry potter or something! and thats like a major compliment cuz both of those series are widely popular!xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 6:59:59 PM
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haha thxxKokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 8:44:56 AM
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ok. i wuz trying to think of other titles since u might wanna publish and i wuz thinking maybe 'the unknown sorceress'? or maybe something along those lines.KokoroTsuki24 on May 1, 2009, 3:18:58 PM
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omg! i cant WAIT for more! that was awesome! luffed it... as always! >.<KokoroTsuki24 on April 25, 2009, 3:30:28 AM
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lol. nice. more please?KokoroTsuki24 on April 19, 2009, 5:34:29 PM
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OMG! can u make more?! i am SO loving this!xxnataxx on April 24, 2009, 5:52:03 AM
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i'm definitely trying. i love writing this. it's just that i dont have time grrrr... *curses homework*xx
KokoroTsuki24 on April 25, 2009, 3:26:11 AM
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lol. same here. i hate homework. i like writing too. but my fave is poems. and i NEVER get the time! grr.KokoroTsuki24 on April 21, 2009, 9:29:45 AM
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lol. funnyKokoroTsuki24 on April 18, 2009, 6:19:27 AM
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OMG! this is awesome!xxnataxx on April 18, 2009, 7:31:38 PM
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thxx (:lol i was laughing while i typed the part as well...
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it wuz pretty funny. and then the part about the itching powder and how she said it was powdered snake venom... PRICELESS!KokoroTsuki24 on April 18, 2009, 6:51:22 AM
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LOL! i was laughing SO hard about the dr. who part! and the tying organs in a knot part too. my sisters thought i was crazy! >-<