On My Own: A Lonely Angel
Submitted January 17, 2007 Updated March 6, 2007 Status Incomplete | This is just a basi story, i guess. I hope this one is better! C=
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Chapters
Chapters
Chapter 1 - >>Chap.1- The Lonely Angel
Submitted: January 17, 2007 • Updated: January 17, 2007
Word count: 630 • Size: 3k • Comments: 2 • views: 523
Chapter 2 - >>Chap.2- Mirelle vs. Alicia!
Submitted: January 27, 2007 • Updated: January 27, 2007
Word count: 638 • Size: 3k • Comments: 2 • views: 257
Chapter 3 - >>Chap. 3- Recovery Room
Submitted: February 1, 2007 • Updated: February 1, 2007
Word count: 608 • Size: 3k • Comments: 3 • views: 247
Chapter 4 - >>Chap. 4- The New Guy~ Arai
Submitted: February 19, 2007 • Updated: February 19, 2007
Word count: 896 • Size: 4k • Comments: 8 • views: 242
Chapter 5 - >>Chap. 5- Definately Strange Encounter = WEIRDO
Submitted: February 27, 2007 • Updated: February 27, 2007
Word count: 1044 • Size: 5k • Comments: 4 • views: 272
Chapter 6 - >>Chap. 6- The Final Piece of Exam Pie
Submitted: March 6, 2007 • Updated: March 6, 2007
Word count: 1829 • Size: 10k • Comments: 2 • views: 271
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pleaseme on March 15, 2007, 6:53:14 AM
pleaseme on (Chapter: 6)
Hope Mirelle wins!!! ;DMidNightWander on March 8, 2007, 8:02:59 AM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 6)
MORE!!!MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!!!!!!!!MidNightWander on March 8, 2007, 7:41:56 AM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 5)
awesome!!! on to the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!pleaseme on March 1, 2007, 6:12:23 AM
pleaseme on (Chapter: 5)
Arai is werid but i think he is a good choice for Mirelle!1mangalover on March 1, 2007, 9:33:02 AM
1mangalover on (Chapter: 5)
thank you! yea, i agree, very good choice. cause Mirelle is all uptight and all... thank you very much! ~1mangalover~
Chrisie on February 28, 2007, 5:19:08 AM
Chrisie on (Chapter: 5)
Aww, Arai is so cute and weird. <3 Lovely work on his character. He's so odd, you just got to love him. <33 Continue like this~!Hope you'll have a nice vacation. ^__^
MidNightWander on February 24, 2007, 1:02:19 AM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 4)
hey,sorry i'm really late on reading GOMEI!!!! but the story is soooooooooooo GREAT!!!!! please write more!!!
pleaseme on February 23, 2007, 6:46:19 AM
pleaseme on (Chapter: 4)
I must saw I like your story so far and is it that Arai guy that tap her should or that other girl that sent her to the infirmary?Chrisie on February 20, 2007, 10:04:51 AM
Chrisie on (Chapter: 4)
Just finished reading all the chapters so far and I must say...I. Love. It.
Good Things:
1.) Your grammar and spelling is very good, it's easy for the readers to understand what's going on. ^_^
2.) You mix a little japanese with english, but you don't overwhelm us with it. You also give us an explanation of the words in case someone doesn't get it.
3.) Arai reminds me of the normal kinds of guys you find in shojo series, so you obviously did a good job. XD (I think so, anyway)
4.) Uuuh... What was I gonna say... Oh yeah! It's a really origional idea, and once you start reading the story, you just get hooked right away! >w< Keep it up, gal! X3
Umm, I don't really HAVE ANYTHING to tell you what to improve on, so I should improve myself so I can help you improve and I'm not making any sense am I? xD;
I can't wait for the next chapter! You've really inspired me to try and write myself! =D
1mangalover on February 20, 2007, 10:29:57 AM
1mangalover on (Chapter: 4)
wooowww!!! I didnt know I was that good... *blink blink* BUT THATS SOOOO COOLLL!!! I'll update for everybody!! Must. Work. Harder. >< Must. Type. Now.~1mangalover~
SoraYamato on February 19, 2007, 10:25:19 AM
SoraYamato on (Chapter: 4)
Ne! Ne!- It's Arai who tapped her on the shoulder isn't it?This is good. It's really up to you if you felt he was too jumpy with his moods, but I just thought it was his character ^^
1mangalover on February 19, 2007, 11:11:18 AM
1mangalover on (Chapter: 4)
we'll have to see, wont we? yea, i thought I should have a character who was a weirdo. (i think its good to have a somewhat 'mysterious' character)
cloudsfan09 on February 19, 2007, 10:27:43 AM
cloudsfan09 on (Chapter: 4)
GAH! CLIFFY! Arai sound hot please draw a pic of him!
1mangalover on February 19, 2007, 11:09:47 AM
1mangalover on (Chapter: 4)
u got it ^^* if he really really hot, will he be a bishonen of your heart? (i would be honored to have him as one of your faves. but I still have to draw it. hehe ^^*)cloudsfan09 on February 2, 2007, 9:48:44 PM
cloudsfan09 on (Chapter: 3)
kawaii!!! thats was awsome please write more!MidNightWander on February 2, 2007, 9:51:22 AM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 3)
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ps: you MUST i reapeat MUST write more
SoraYamato on February 1, 2007, 1:36:36 PM
SoraYamato on (Chapter: 3)
Oishii! Ima watashi wa onokagasuita!This is a very good story so far ^_^ can't wait to read on.
cloudsfan09 on January 28, 2007, 2:27:39 AM
cloudsfan09 on (Chapter: 2)
YEAH I WAS WONDERING THE SAME THING AS MNW does she die? cloudsfan09 on January 28, 2007, 2:24:53 AM
cloudsfan09 on (Chapter: 1)
ITS REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!MidNightWander on January 27, 2007, 8:29:15 AM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 2)
DOES SHE DIE?MidNightWander on January 17, 2007, 12:46:34 PM
MidNightWander on (Chapter: 1)
TT_TT sad, YAY so far a happy ending ^_~ *favs*