On My Own: A Lonely Angel
Submitted January 17, 2007 Updated March 6, 2007 Status Incomplete | This is just a basi story, i guess. I hope this one is better! C=
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Chapters
Chapter 1 - >>Chap.1- The Lonely Angel
Submitted: January 17, 2007 • Updated: January 17, 2007
Word count: 630 • Size: 3k • Comments: 2 • views: 523
Chapter 2 - >>Chap.2- Mirelle vs. Alicia!
Submitted: January 27, 2007 • Updated: January 27, 2007
Word count: 638 • Size: 3k • Comments: 2 • views: 257
Chapter 3 - >>Chap. 3- Recovery Room
Submitted: February 1, 2007 • Updated: February 1, 2007
Word count: 608 • Size: 3k • Comments: 3 • views: 246
Chapter 4 - >>Chap. 4- The New Guy~ Arai
Submitted: February 19, 2007 • Updated: February 19, 2007
Word count: 896 • Size: 4k • Comments: 8 • views: 241
Chapter 5 - >>Chap. 5- Definately Strange Encounter = WEIRDO
Submitted: February 27, 2007 • Updated: February 27, 2007
Word count: 1044 • Size: 5k • Comments: 4 • views: 271
Chapter 6 - >>Chap. 6- The Final Piece of Exam Pie
Submitted: March 6, 2007 • Updated: March 6, 2007
Word count: 1829 • Size: 10k • Comments: 2 • views: 270
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pleaseme on March 15, 2007, 6:53:14 AM
Hope Mirelle wins!!! ;DMidNightWander on March 8, 2007, 8:02:59 AM
MORE!!!MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!!!!!!!!MidNightWander on March 8, 2007, 7:41:56 AM
awesome!!! on to the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!pleaseme on March 1, 2007, 6:12:23 AM
Arai is werid but i think he is a good choice for Mirelle!1mangalover on March 1, 2007, 9:33:02 AM
thank you! yea, i agree, very good choice. cause Mirelle is all uptight and all... thank you very much! ~1mangalover~
Chrisie on February 28, 2007, 5:19:08 AM
Aww, Arai is so cute and weird. <3 Lovely work on his character. He's so odd, you just got to love him. <33 Continue like this~!Hope you'll have a nice vacation. ^__^
MidNightWander on February 24, 2007, 1:02:19 AM
hey,sorry i'm really late on reading GOMEI!!!! but the story is soooooooooooo GREAT!!!!! please write more!!!
pleaseme on February 23, 2007, 6:46:19 AM
I must saw I like your story so far and is it that Arai guy that tap her should or that other girl that sent her to the infirmary?Chrisie on February 20, 2007, 10:04:51 AM
Just finished reading all the chapters so far and I must say...I. Love. It.
Good Things:
1.) Your grammar and spelling is very good, it's easy for the readers to understand what's going on. ^_^
2.) You mix a little japanese with english, but you don't overwhelm us with it. You also give us an explanation of the words in case someone doesn't get it.
3.) Arai reminds me of the normal kinds of guys you find in shojo series, so you obviously did a good job. XD (I think so, anyway)
4.) Uuuh... What was I gonna say... Oh yeah! It's a really origional idea, and once you start reading the story, you just get hooked right away! >w< Keep it up, gal! X3
Umm, I don't really HAVE ANYTHING to tell you what to improve on, so I should improve myself so I can help you improve and I'm not making any sense am I? xD;
I can't wait for the next chapter! You've really inspired me to try and write myself! =D
1mangalover on February 20, 2007, 10:29:57 AM
wooowww!!! I didnt know I was that good... *blink blink* BUT THATS SOOOO COOLLL!!! I'll update for everybody!! Must. Work. Harder. >< Must. Type. Now.~1mangalover~
SoraYamato on February 19, 2007, 10:25:19 AM
Ne! Ne!- It's Arai who tapped her on the shoulder isn't it?This is good. It's really up to you if you felt he was too jumpy with his moods, but I just thought it was his character ^^
1mangalover on February 19, 2007, 11:11:18 AM
we'll have to see, wont we? yea, i thought I should have a character who was a weirdo. (i think its good to have a somewhat 'mysterious' character)