Test story
Submitted August 13, 2005 Updated September 18, 2005 Status Incomplete | Testing out some possible story lines.
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Chapters
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Prologue, Part One
Submitted: August 13, 2005 • Updated: August 13, 2005
Word count: 1393 • Size: 7k • Comments: 9 • views: 388
Chapter 2 - Prologue, Part Two
Submitted: September 18, 2005 • Updated: September 18, 2005
Word count: 1663 • Size: 9k • Comments: 5 • views: 371
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Ariya_Eretsee on August 18, 2005, 9:18:21 AM
Ariya_Eretsee on (Chapter: 1)
this is a very neat story. its so detailed but not in a boring way. it really ineterests meAriya_Eretsee on August 18, 2005, 9:18:07 AM
Ariya_Eretsee on (Chapter: 1)
this is a very neat story. its so detailed but not in a boring way. it really ineterests meKirara on August 14, 2005, 5:35:55 PM
Kirara on (Chapter: 1)
gosh!! this is soo cool! u are doin great on grammar! well,u see my grammar usually sucks,so,its good if i can be as good as you,BB! i had always envy those who are great in english/grammar..i can never improve my english..lolwell,ok..i think this is a great beginning.the opening of this story is great! and i like how u create ur charcters ^_^
its good! XD
ahhh..yes,thx for letting me to ask for a request! heeee...i cant get into ur profile page due to this stupid connection of mine..so i'll juz ask u here ^O^
could u draw a pic of Kyou and Tooru for me? ^_^ any pose u like,outfit? ermm..their autumn's uniform would be great.errr...i don wan it to be romantic...juz a playful or peaceful one is ok^^
thx a lot,if u could do this for me! i lub you,ahhhhhhh!!
XD atashi ureshii !! domo arigatou gozaimasu!
AnimeMangaLover on August 14, 2005, 12:10:02 AM
AnimeMangaLover on (Chapter: 1)
This is a good story! ^.^ There were a few grammatical errors (as with almost ALL online stories) and some of your words were switched (ex: ...and stepped out to the dust filled streets of Egypt, staring at the dingy boat which was supposed to occupy her child. [This implies that the boat is occupying the child, not the other way around.]), but overall it's a good story; it has great potential. Also, I loved the way you described things; it gave me a vivid image in my head. So, please continue the story and thank you for your comments ^.^