Mercy Girls: Monster Catchers
Submitted March 10, 2007 Updated October 22, 2007 Status Incomplete | Welcome to Mercedes' Academy for Gifted Girls. Here, majic isn't just a word, it's the curriculum.
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Chapter 1 - Welcome to The School of Your Dreams
Submitted: March 10, 2007 • Updated: March 10, 2007
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Chapter 2 - pilot
Submitted: March 12, 2007 • Updated: March 12, 2007
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Chapter 3 - Water, Fire, Metal, Blood and Masks
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Chapter 4 - More charas
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Chapter 5 - More charas 3
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Chapter 6 - Recollection of Ethics
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Chapter 7 - Aishiteru Neesama/ Amo mi Ate/ I love you, Big Sis
Submitted: March 18, 2007 • Updated: March 18, 2007
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Chapter 8 - Never Again
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Chapter 9 - Fighting Spirit
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Chapter 10 - Butterfly Blue
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Chapter 11 - Runny Babbit
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Chapter 12 - Brother-Sister Love; Alternate Life
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Chapter 13 - this isn't a chapter. LIVE ACTION!!!
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Chapter 14 - Somethings...
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Chapter 15 - Everything
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Chapter 16 - Satifaction
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Chapter 17 - Eyes Like Yours
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Chapter 18 - Belly of the Beast
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Chapter 19 - ZIM ZAM ZOOM! a girl falls from the sky
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Chapter 21 - The Best Day Ever~~Su!
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Chapter 22 - Square One
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Chapter 23 - Paper Dolls
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Chapter 24 - TigerLily Kiss
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Chapter 25 - Colours of the Heart
Submitted: August 10, 2007 • Updated: August 10, 2007
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Chapter 26 - Baby Tears
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Chapter 27 - Moon Light Shadow
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Chapter 28 - Grinnin' like a Manic!
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Chapter 29 - So... This is GoodBye?
Submitted: October 22, 2007 • Updated: October 22, 2007
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witch_13888 on November 13, 2008, 7:03:58 AM
witch_13888 on (Chapter: index)
DawnyaBURN on November 3, 2007, 5:37:13 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 29)
ahhhh time to say stuff.this is the last chapter, right? o_o;
WELL, if it is, I have to say I'm mildly disappointed. D:
Like you said in that... one picture, it's very anti-climatic. It seems like there will be another chapter but I don't know because that's the problem, you can't tell.
Also, a lot of smaller stories of smaller characters have been dropped. It seems you've started at one point, continued down that path until the middle, and started to wander as the end came around.
And you know I'm a dog and have to say SOMETHING about the your character and Chase thing...
Lolita is the child of Anu and Chase right? I think so, right? D: I FORGET THESE THING OFTEN. So if it's not that case, forgive me, but here we go.
I hate stories that have OCxCanon shippings and everyone on FAC and beyond knows this but I don't think I've got it clear. I know I used to do that too with Azure, but I've kinda dropped her and skipped gaily off in another direction. It seems you thought it was a creative plot but in reality it wasn't. It seems the same stuff keeps happening on the site and I'm getting fed up with it.
However, with some work and elbow grease, you'd become a really good writer.
My eyes hurt so... I'm gonna go... do something else.
But yess.
I had to say something.
Because God knows no one else on FAC has the guts to...
CartoonQueen262 on October 25, 2007, 12:51:24 PM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: index)
Beautiful.This has been a wonderful story Jaz. One of the reasons why I'm still here. I just had to stick around for this magnificent tale. Once more an excellent chapter, and it made a brilliant ending. Your writing skills never cease to amaze me, Jaz. Why if this were I book I would automatically buy it because it's worth it. Fantastic! Marvelous! And any other words that can describe just how glorious this has been. If you consider making a squeal please do tell me, I would love to read it!Demonic_Sora on October 22, 2007, 12:14:12 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 29)
>w> Amusing, somewhat confusing, but fun to read nevertheless n__nElen on September 27, 2007, 11:22:44 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 28)
dundaDUN! |DAwesome job on the chapter as usual! n__n
CartoonQueen262 on September 26, 2007, 11:24:50 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 28)
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No comment, you left me to astound here. No words can describe how amazing that was.
Demonic_Sora on September 24, 2007, 6:33:18 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 28)
:O!-dramatic music-
Curiousity..
CartoonQueen262 on August 31, 2007, 10:30:49 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 27)
SLAP THE dog!Â
Wonderful chapter by the way :D
Demonic_Sora on August 30, 2007, 9:58:47 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 27)
Kekekek. Very good n__n I'm glad you updated...AND WHAT DID THAT BIOTCH WANT WITH MY SON D< YARGINJARGIN.c: Very good though, can't wait for somemore updates 83
DawnyaBURN on August 30, 2007, 8:04:44 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 27)
SMACK THAT dog. SEND HER FLYING. AH CHA CHA CHA. -thumbs up-Sashiku: ... :D
-tackles Sashiku- OUUUUUUU~!!
Elen on August 21, 2007, 11:22:23 PM
Elen on (Chapter: 26)
*sings* lovely lovely job!this just gets better and better xD
hope to see more soon! *nod*
DawnyaBURN on August 19, 2007, 7:44:46 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 26)
O: gdhsjafhkgf.That was fun to read. :'D
-bad at comments- >_>;;
CartoonQueen262 on August 19, 2007, 5:51:30 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 26)
Holy fook! Bleed's gone nice! And you've gone bad! A SHOCKING TWIST!I like it! And so the adventures of Kaj's little alchemist continues with his fellow comrade Pipit, but what this, Mana has laid her tainted hands upon Pipit! Oh my! The action the drama, all the traits of a good fiction, right here! And I know you know about Bleed's split personality, otherwise you wouldn't have wrote about, glad you remembered those small details. Yeah! and you tell those doges off! No one messes with you! Love that snappy comeback you got there! Yet I can already guess what shall happen next..
It's something along the lines of, you being bad to the bone, Kaj doing something awesome, Logan and Pipits adventures shall still resume, Chase will be Chase, and maybe the beast that you put to sleep earlier in Bleed will rise once more! Or not. I dunno, just a guess. Anyways, keep up the good work!
Demonic_Sora on August 18, 2007, 10:23:20 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 26)
OooOOooo x333 ACTIONY! c: Mwehehe my little alchemist son 83 good job on this, da Kaj eagarly awaits more 8Dluckylace222 on August 11, 2007, 12:04:30 PM
luckylace222 on (Chapter: 25)
O_o That's creepy............wow..it's like one of those creepy scary.......transformation monster stories I read....awesome.CartoonQueen262 on August 11, 2007, 7:30:23 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 25)
The adventures of Logan and Pippit, adorable! Now time for the spazzing,HOLY shoot! YOU PWNED BLEED!! ALRIGHT! But DAYUUM! You told her off too! Your like the bad @$$ of the chapter! Alright Jazmyn! You even showed me by not answering me (Why do I find that amazing I'll never know)
And Jessie... Good god she sure showed Bleed! This is brilliant! Oh no!
Bacunawa is dead?! Wasn't he Anu's lover or brother?! Talk about drama!
Awesome chapter Jazmyn! Keep up the excellent work!
Demonic_Sora on August 10, 2007, 10:06:10 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 25)
c: Oh Logan and Pippit are so cute xD and he's an alchemist. Awesomeness.:U And oh noes! Good job on this Jazzy-chan C: I like I like n__n
DawnyaBURN on August 10, 2007, 2:53:38 PM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 25)
funfunfun to read. c:Elen on August 7, 2007, 6:51:33 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 24)
o____________________O!upload soon! that's all I can say!
xD
CartoonQueen262 on July 31, 2007, 2:33:57 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 24)
Whoa...Whoa.....Wow!That was...You just left me speachless here.Seriously.I like that moment when Jessie called Night a Puta,that was humorous and I'm sure that was the only comic relief through out this whole chapter. That was an interesting battle between you and Bleed here. Yet I was expecting you would be the one slaying her,yet I suppose Bleed can have her little victory for now. Her fun will end soon from what I can tell,and to let out a spazz a attack..OH MY GOD!!BLEED JUST PWNED ALL THOSE RANDOM STUDENTS!!!SHE HAS MIND-BLASTING POWERZ!!!OMG!!!YEAH!!!THAT'S MY GIRL!KILL THOSE PEOPLE WITH YOUR MIND!!MAKE ME PROUND FOR MAKING YOU!!WHOO!!
She's such a mind-freak...MIND-FREAK!!
Alright,I'm done spazzing about my character.Now to spazz about you.
NNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!JAZMYN DON'T DIE!!HANG IN THERE!!!
USE THE POWER OF LUV AND FOLLOW YOUR HEART(Translation-
USE THE POWER OF LOATHE AND FOLLOW YOU BRAIN)USE THE POWER OF THE KINDNESS AND CUTENESS TO TEACH THAT MEANIE A LESSON
(Translation-USE THE POWER OF KILLING AND CUTTING TO TEACH THAT MIND FREAK NOT TO MESS WITH YOU!)And then can end this
silly war*pulls out magic wand*(Translation-CRY HAVOC AND RELEASE THE HOUNDS OF WAR*pulls out a shot gun*)
Excellent chapter I would love to see how this ends up.
luckylace222 on July 30, 2007, 10:33:51 AM
luckylace222 on (Chapter: 24)
O_o SO..INTENSE. WOW.Demonic_Sora on July 30, 2007, 9:47:56 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 24)
Ooo! I remember Bleed from the story Envi was writing 833I must say I rather like her character n__n myes indeed. Good chapter D: definitly sad though :C...but very ACTIONY and I loved it 8D
CartoonQueen262 on July 21, 2007, 3:12:42 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 23)
Well,there went clone Meme.Now as for the battle between Kuya and Tsa...Interesting and written with great skill.Also,just from reading about 10 year old Anu, I can already tell she was an adorable little girl, who later on grows up to be a beautiful woman. Her mom's pretty badass by the way. I could not help but "Aw" at the cuteness of the young lad Logan. I love how they cuddled at the end that was touching. This was a rather dramatic chapter I must say with the battles and the family-like issues. I can only imagine how
dramatic and violent the next chapter will be....
Elen on July 21, 2007, 12:46:21 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 23)
oh teh DRAMA!! 8]I likes it! you're very good at describing dramatic scenes!
keep it coming woman! |D
Demonic_Sora on July 20, 2007, 2:35:58 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 23)
OooOOOoo. I went badass on that harpy-dog x333Very, very amusing ;DD I love it alot 833 I really hope that you update again soon n_____n ah this story is just to much fun to read! x33 Aw lil Logan...AND YOUR FAMILY WOULD ACCEPT YOUUUU...or I'll attack them with lamp-posts :C
.......and I forgot to say this for the other chapter...
-ahem-...KNUCKLESSSSSSS NNNOOO -drops to knees-
Demonic_Sora on July 20, 2007, 2:17:08 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 22)
T___________________TOh my god that was so very depressing...YET I LOVED EVERY WORD OF IT!!!
:C My poor baby...Logan <333..T__T oh god that was so very sad...
CartoonQueen262 on July 20, 2007, 12:32:13 PM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 22)
This was..Quite dramatic...I feel sorry for the Kaj and her son.Such tragic issues they faced,and plague them.. Those poor unfortunate souls.. So much pain they have faced in the past and the pain still goes on. I'm telling ya but Meme is starting to sound like Face 13 (Corrupted character of mine) or Beth with a hint of Baracia. This is getting rather interesting.I wonder where this shall lead.
luckylace222 on July 20, 2007, 11:14:15 AM
luckylace222 on (Chapter: 22)
O_O Wow. You're a really good writer...this is pretty dramatic.Demonic_Sora on July 10, 2007, 5:19:31 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 21)
:O!! -dramatic music-Logan D< little brat!!
83 Lawlz...Vee and Zim x3
I AM AMUSED 8D
Demonic_Sora on July 10, 2007, 5:09:32 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 20)
83 Mweehehehe I like this chapterD: Dont worry you'll find answersssssss.
WAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! I stole Donovan's eye x3 thats what the bastard gets!
CartoonQueen262 on July 9, 2007, 11:10:29 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 21)
Wow....Heh..Heh..Vee, I agree with Elen,is acting like Jazzy's sitter. Also, wonderfully written my friend.Â
OMFG IT'S LOGAN!!!!DA SON OF THE KAJ!!!! HOLY SHI-AT!!!
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Oh and Zim...Must not forget about Zim...Zim-eh..eh...nnnnyyyyyeeeeaa...
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And,DAYMN, MEME'Z GONE BETH ON YOU!!
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Seriously...She's acting like Beth....Beth-ah..Or some other killer little girl character I made up.
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Let's see what else...Ah yes
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CHASE-EH IS GET'INÂ Â POSSESSIVE!!!!! AND HORNY TOO
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What?It's true.I mean sure,you start out all pout-y and warrior angry, then you start getting all calm and nice around him, and before you know it
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BOOM!
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You wake up in the same bed with the dragon pervert!
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He's only bein nice to you to sleep with ya!
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This could only mean one thing...
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CHASE IS A DRAGON PLAYA!!!
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I mean why else for the sudden change in mood! That or I'm just one sick minded paranoid freak who takes fiction to seriously...OR,you could be losing it and going through some strange spilt personality I do not know of.
Point is,keep up the good work,your doing a brilliant job!
CartoonQueen262 on July 9, 2007, 10:28:44 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 20)
Lovely chapter,Jazmyn. The Kaj sounds simply beautiful in here.Hope you find your answers soon within those several books.Elen on July 9, 2007, 8:22:59 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 21)
HAH! Vee acting like Jazmyn's sitter xDD *snickersnicker*a lot of things in this chapter made me smile!
mooorrrreeee 8]
DawnyaBURN on July 9, 2007, 6:32:20 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 21)
LOLOL LAO-KUNLAO-KUNLAO-KUN.okay, sorry.
OMGZZ IT'S LOGANZ0RZ. -point of doom-
and zim. lollercopters. I'm wearing a Gir shirt today, which makes it funnier. XP
Demonic_Sora on June 28, 2007, 9:21:55 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 19)
:oxD Hahaha! Imma murderer!! -frolics around- WINNER!
-triumphant pose-....T___T AHH MY LOGAN...-whimpers-
:O! Oh noes Jazzy-chan is a human!
I agree with Elli, I eagerly await more 83
CartoonQueen262 on June 28, 2007, 1:36:27 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 19)
Whoa..That was unsuspecting...So Jazmyn is a human,eh?I never would of guessed. Poor Kaj...So she slaughtered Donovan,big deal,nothing to be ashamed of. I would be as proud as hell if that was me but like I said,if it were me. Wow..I dreamed a lot of strange things but never porn,Jaz. I'm happy to see how you mentioned my amazing piano skills...If only they were really that amazing..Anyways, can't wait for the next chapter.Elen on June 27, 2007, 11:45:42 PM
Elen on (Chapter: 19)
*le gasp* human ey? :0 I eagerly await more!
Elen on June 19, 2007, 8:49:50 PM
Elen on (Chapter: 18)
HAHA! Vee be alive! that made me happy! xDDDhe's still pretty evil though! xD
nyeehee! this chapter made me happy! wooh!
write more soon oki?
CartoonQueen262 on June 18, 2007, 11:22:07 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 18)
Poor Anu,she has my sympathy.Yes,I agree with the Kaj,crazy book indeed.It makes me overly curious as well.not to mention,how they can hide it within their sleeves.Damn it Chase,will you ever stop with the rape-ing... Heh..Heh.. Hanky-Panky...Can't wait to see more..VEE LIVES!!!
DawnyaBURN on June 18, 2007, 11:05:09 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 18)
gfjhgjdfgSASHIKUUUUU. You managed to NOT make her a skank. I applaud you.Sashiku: >>;
ANYWAY. hfshjs. This story rules. ANDANDAND. YOU DID THE EYEPATCH!
-marries-
Demonic_Sora on June 18, 2007, 10:22:34 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 18)
:O!!Heheheh. Oh noesss...that crazy book...that THEY CAN HIDE IN THEIR SLEEVES!?..x3 amusing. :o Ooohh...last time I have to sign it :0 curious is Kaj...
n____n I like, yes Kaj does. 83 Cant wait to read somemore.
Poor Anu >: I feel sorry for her.
CartoonQueen262 on June 9, 2007, 12:41:36 PM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 17)
Poor Elen..Why,why did Vee have to die?He was a good fellow..Whoa..fascinating battle you have here..Amazing..Well looks like Riza went to a woman filled with vanity to a pile of dust from the power of age...
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Wow...Did Logan just pwn the Kaj...?Wow..I was stunned once I read that...
Elen on June 9, 2007, 3:58:44 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 17)
;_; NUUUHH!!!!!! D8 Not Vee!! Dx *goes on a killing rampage to whoever did it* can't wait for more! x3
Demonic_Sora on June 8, 2007, 2:06:45 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 17)
:000000LOGAN...DONT ATTACK YOUR MOTHER YOU LITTLE BRAT!!! -pulls on ears- T___T...why would he go and do that...e__O..not to mention totally pwn me..
Dude. Good job on this 83 its interesting. OH NOES. RIZA WENT BYEBYE..n____n w00tw00t
D: Chii and Buurrnnn...nuu
DawnyaBURN on June 8, 2007, 1:46:59 PM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 17)
And, weirdly, I do have a silent panic dance.It's rather hilarious. :>
DawnyaBURN on June 8, 2007, 1:40:41 PM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 17)
gfjhjgfjdgyurv.I. Love. You. So. Much. :'D
CartoonQueen262 on June 7, 2007, 3:47:06 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 16)
Donovan sounds like a bastard, taking away Logan the Kaj. Ya know the ending kinda sounded like something Beth would say if she were ever to die,excepted she might of sung it merrily while skipping backwards...Wellenough comparing my corrupted character with sweet little ol Meme,now time for the spazz like praise
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OMG THIS STORY PWNZ SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!AND THE ZE DONVAN WITH THE WATER!!!AND THE FIGHTIN!!!AND THE EVIL AND KILLIIN!!AND THE
HATERED!!!AND..!!!..AND..!!!OOOOOOOOOOMMMGGG I SPOKE MY NATIVE LANGUAGE!!!!YEAH!!!VIVA THE LATIN!!!!AND DRAMA WAS SOOOO
TENSE I WAS AT THE EDGE OF MAH SEAT MAN!!!MEME HOW COULD YOU HAVE FORSAKEN THE JAZZ!!!WHY???!!!??
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*inwards breath*
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Wow.....This story is bloody brilliant, just brilliant...
DawnyaBURN on June 6, 2007, 11:47:02 AM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: index)
fhdgjd. HA. Dean Dreamer go RAWR I BE FIESTYY.hahahahaha.
Still goin' with the eyepatch thing. -relevant to DA-
Demonic_Sora on June 6, 2007, 8:20:08 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 16)
LOGAAAAAAAANNN...-strangles Donovan- DD< I WANT LOGAN BACKRAWR..Im so happy you added more n___n I still lurv the story and all. Oh noesssssss, more characters and death DD: and more suprising twistsssss~!!!
DawnyaBURN on May 26, 2007, 3:11:11 PM
DawnyaBURN on (Chapter: 15)
LOL SASHIKU. Where'd SHE come from? Sashiku is a HO. lalala. I'm half asleep.Sashiku: >_> You stay away from Lao, you HUSSY.
HAHAHA. I LIKE READING THIS STORY. LOL I'M BLONDE. -falls alseep-
Elen on May 25, 2007, 9:08:23 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 15)
cliffy!! D: I like the suspeeeeense! and lots of things are happening, it never gets boring <3
update soon ^^
CartoonQueen262 on May 25, 2007, 1:28:43 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 15)
I agree with the Kaj, Anu is PWNS! And I can see that Dancia is being a dog again, and the Donovan...Ready to kill eh?I can already see a fight coming...CartoonQueen262 on May 25, 2007, 1:05:07 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 14)
Whoa... I wonder but.. who took him? Whoo!! Breanna gets mad! Awesomechapter my friend, even if your brain did melt, you still write wonderfully!
Demonic_Sora on May 24, 2007, 5:56:02 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 15)
OH NOES. DONOVAN!!!! -dramatic horror music-83 Good chapter, Jazzy-chan. I like Anu x3 ANU PWNS THA NOOBS!!!
Anyways, cant wait for somemore ~__^
Demonic_Sora on May 24, 2007, 5:15:30 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 14)
AAAAAAHHHHHH!!!LOGAN!!! MY BABY!! T_________T Dude that made me so sad. I love this story, its fantastic with how many different characters you can bring into it. But oh, that made me sad DDD: I love my Logan. Im curious as to who took him..>:
Well anyways n__n next chapter -runs to it- 83 Gewd job my friend
CartoonQueen262 on May 23, 2007, 10:26:38 PM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 13)
Holy shiat!!! That bastard!!! How dare he still your laptop!!I don't mind if you don't post one Friday my friend, after what I just read , I hope you get your
laptop back or at least a new one, than a chapter.
InvaderAmmy00 on May 9, 2007, 9:41:26 AM
InvaderAmmy00 on (Chapter: index)
I <3 this storyCartoonQueen262 on May 8, 2007, 10:25:24 PM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 12)
Man my brother is a such a bastard!I'm glad I'm whooping his @$$! Andat the end...WAS THAT THE dogTARD DANCIA?! I hope someone kicks
her @$$ later on too. Anyways,the past stories are interesting, and OMG!!
DID BREANNA DIE?! Cause if she did....I'm gonna slaughter my brother in
BOTH FICZ!!!Though if Breanna really did, I hope she gets repaired or something. Cause she has a life to live,she lives to protect the spineless and the weak,the frail,the young. She's also the only girl in Shadow girls that
Belle actually treats like a sister and is family to her. Even Baracia and Beth,
even though they both really don't care much for their sister,she cares about them!! She's like the heart of the Shadow girls!Not to mention,she has boyfriend! And he would be rather upset if something were to happen
to little Breanna.
Elen on May 7, 2007, 8:56:36 PM
Elen on (Chapter: 12)
hohohooo! you write action way better than I do 8Dawesome!
Demonic_Sora on May 7, 2007, 2:47:03 PM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 12)
OOohh!! 83 It was a long chapter~!And I really like it. Man. Its getting so good x3 I cant wait for you to get somemore up. I know I say that every time, but its really true!! Suspensful!!
n____n
InvaderAmmy00 on April 23, 2007, 9:29:19 AM
InvaderAmmy00 on (Chapter: index)
Keeps getting better^^Demonic_Sora on April 21, 2007, 11:59:02 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 11)
:0000 OOOHHHH..Big fight x3 Cant wait for somemore my friend. This story keeps me very entertained!Elen on April 21, 2007, 10:43:15 AM
Elen on (Chapter: 11)
HAR!! Awesome! Can't wait to see what's gonna happen next!I repeat the line: Bring it!
xDD
CartoonQueen262 on April 21, 2007, 6:09:04 AM
CartoonQueen262 on (Chapter: 11)
DAMN!My brother is one hell of a bastard.Poor little Breanna....I can't wait to see more my friend.Love how you made Beth sound more insane and thatlittle arguement between Baracia and Belle.Brilliant chapter!
InvaderAmmy00 on April 17, 2007, 7:50:30 AM
InvaderAmmy00 on (Chapter: 10)
=O i love it, this story keeps getting better. Keep it up!! ^^ *hugs*Demonic_Sora on April 16, 2007, 6:55:54 AM
Demonic_Sora on (Chapter: 10)
:0000Im so glad that you got another chapter up!!! And it was really worth it. The Shadow Sisters pwn.
And...Oh..I agree with Envi, my past is getting more and more interesting. n__n Heh Imma Hommunculus...I know that I spelt that wrong..but still, that pwns. Really awesome. Cant wait for more, dude 8D
Ohhh noeess...clone Ellie xD
Elen on April 14, 2007, 12:48:05 PM
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Wooh!! Loved it! very awesome it iiis! xDDDomg clone Ellie! D8
mweeehehhee! keep it coming! ^^
CartoonQueen262 on April 14, 2007, 12:06:29 PM
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OH MY GOD!!!THAT WAS BRILLIANT!!!Though you kinda gotta make Beth sound more psychotic.Yet besides that,excellent!That was wonderful!Like I said earlier,Kaj's past,is very interesting.You nailed Breanna perfectly.Baracia needs to sound a little more PMS-y,and Belle needs to get more angry at Baracia.Yet awesome job,awesome.My brother sounds like a bastard though..And kind of a child molester XD(He raped Breanna on the lips XD..Sorta..)
Wonderful chapter,just..I can't even say,you had me awe struck over here.
An instant fave,instant I say!I can't wait to see Dancia's reaction when
she meets them,that'll be the day.Brilliant writer my friend,just brilliant!
InvaderAmmy00 on March 28, 2007, 7:41:04 AM
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This story is so great. FAVES ^^Elen on March 28, 2007, 4:20:43 AM
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*applauds* well done! I would keep on telling you to write more and how great this story is, but I don't have time right now, so you have to imagine me say it. xDDDTuxedo_Mini_Mask on March 27, 2007, 11:56:20 AM
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To bad its for gifted girls *frowns* lol I am missing one of those qualities...*looks down*Tuxedo_Mini_Mask on March 27, 2007, 11:52:09 AM
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cool lolTuxedo_Mini_Mask on March 27, 2007, 11:50:08 AM
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Sounds intrasting I think I will read it...Here its a theme song lol...The Mercury girls... Fighting crime trying to save the day...they can do it... The Mercury Girls....*goes on*
KiraLynn on March 27, 2007, 9:50:12 AM
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^-^ it's cute, first chapter and I'm hookedCartoonQueen262 on March 25, 2007, 5:54:50 AM
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OH YEAH!!!I just pwned that Dancia beeatch!!With my mad robo-telling off skillz!!And I got a bad @$$ arm,OH YEAH!!!Still,I miss Meme she was so nice...DAMN THAT NEN!!!Tis a bastard.Light Division...Yeah that does sound retarded...Anyways,Kaj seems to have a pretty interesting history going on here..Yes..It is..But still,I TOLD THAT DANCIA OFF!!!If I had the ability to dance correctly I would,but I don't...Anyways,can't wait to see more.Especially,the part where my characters come in,I didn't type and fry your brain for nutin my friend.
Good stuff,keep up the good work,my friend.Mmm...Jade Earrings...Those sound prettyful..And yes I would love to see how the fight between you and Dancia would turn out.
JazmynMoon21 on March 26, 2007, 3:59:42 AM
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next chappy... next chappy...OrangeFunk on March 25, 2007, 5:15:39 AM
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WOAH. Lao has blue eyes? I thought they were purple. o:Oh well. I still like this story. >w< Keep writin', yooo!
-hearts-
JazmynMoon21 on March 25, 2007, 9:53:54 PM
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i dunno. I was squinting at the picture of him. I saw a blueish color 0_oDemonic_Sora on March 25, 2007, 12:16:07 PM
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:OOOOI have a interestin past indeed, Envi. Donavan, eh?
OHNOES I was burned to death. AND YEY YOU USED MY REAL LAST NAME. Kaj Howlett at yer service -strikes pose-
I really like this 8D I cant wait to read somemore. Its getting so good x3
Kick Danica's @$$!!
CartoonQueen262 on March 23, 2007, 3:11:20 AM
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YES!!!MY EYES ARE A PRETTIER GREEN THAN NEN!!*drop kicks Nen*IN YOUR FACE NEN-EH!!!FOR MY EYES ARE A BETTER GREEN THEN YOURS!!But..NEN YOU BASTARD!!YOU TOOK AWAY MEME AND MY ARM!!!
*tackles Nen and smacks him insanely with a goat*That was MY arm,my sexy
and prettyful arm....And now I gots one that looks like a mutated television
and vacuum(Yet that does sound pretty bad @$$)..However..revenge surges through my false veins and I shall
whoop his sorry @$$!!With the awesome might of..DUN DUN..NANO TECH!!
Zim is still short*giggles*And now I shall resume my wait for the next chapter.
Elen on March 23, 2007, 12:47:40 AM
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SPIFFY! 8D I like where this is going yes! ^^ you are a great writer. keep it comiiin'! x3CartoonQueen262 on March 22, 2007, 7:10:55 AM
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Damn that Nen!How dare he ruin MY(not his,mine) arm.Has he no shame?!Anyways,awesome chapter my friend,very eventful,I agree with the orangefunk.
Heh..Heh..I called Zim short..Heh..HAHHAHAHAHA!!!...ha..Ha.........DAMN THAT NEN FOR HAVING BETTER POWERS DEN ME!!!And for having teh green eyes..I WANT TEH EYES!!!*tackles Nen and smacks him with a giraffe*
He has insulted me and my comrades...I MUST KICK ARSE!!With my mad
robo-pwn skillz!!Can't wait for the next chapter :3
JazmynMoon21 on March 22, 2007, 10:09:20 PM
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what is up with all the animal abuse?!! *hugs the giraffe and the platypus* and you do have green eyes. They're really pretty, like dark ivy greed, with a ring of light green going around the pupil.Demonic_Sora on March 21, 2007, 12:35:54 PM
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xD So Imma little ragdoll dog am I? -throws a platypus at Nen-xD And the random boy randomly borrowing my random book....randomly.
This is getting gewd 8D And yey...Im outta that disguise x3 I like being meeee. MY SHADOW WIIIINNNGGSSS. I actually can fly with those xD; But they have to go into my shoulders and burst through the skin. .__.; Itsa painful process I hardly ever use. I lose alot of blood D: And theres chains keeping the wings attached together, so when I break the chains I have a limited time before the chains start to mend themselves and reseal my wings. YAR. Ok thats that x3
Cant wait for some more n__n
JazmynMoon21 on March 22, 2007, 12:58:35 AM
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yay! platypus!OrangeFunk on March 21, 2007, 9:29:21 AM
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-random letters- ITSA MEEE. -points- BURNIDETTE.Fear the Hollow. FEAR IT. -wiggles fingers- I can't wait for the next chapter. OO: The story is very eventful. >0>
OrangeFunk on March 18, 2007, 1:04:05 PM
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gebyhfghrj. D:! SUSPENSE!haha. Look at me. I'm randomly there, then I'm gone. XDDD This makes me laugh.
JazmynMoon21 on March 19, 2007, 9:51:21 PM
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yeah. I suck at time skips... i'll try an avoid making everyone go-and-then-there in two seconds.... yeaaaah....CartoonQueen262 on March 19, 2007, 10:26:13 AM
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AGREEING WITH THE SUSPENSE!!!SO MUCH OF IT THERE IS!!!Eh,I need to get some firewalls installed.STUUUUUUUUPIIIIIIID HOLLLLLOWSS!!
Hate em so much!!!I hope they die.Also,glad to see you added in my Nullify Blaster.I envy Nentar,for his green eyes!!Why can't I have green eyes?!
Anyways,I wonder who gets hurt...GAH!!SO MUCH NOT BEING ANSWERED!!
Oh,wait,it shall be soon.I agree also about how amusing it is to see Orangefunk
being there randomly and then gone.
Elen on March 18, 2007, 10:16:07 PM
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dun dun DUUNN!! D8 hehehe love it so far! x3 can't wait to see what happens next!
Demonic_Sora on March 18, 2007, 2:42:46 PM
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D: SUSPENCE INDEED ORANGEFUNK!xD yeah I think its amusing how the time switches are...HERE WE IS. HERE WE ARENT.
x3
OrangeFunk on March 17, 2007, 9:25:36 AM
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Burnidette. That... Is... THE COOLEST. :D-bliss-
OrangeFunk on March 17, 2007, 12:10:24 AM
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fgbirgybubtr. Just noticed something. I never, liked... Filled out a description. Or is that something that YOU do? o:JazmynMoon21 on March 17, 2007, 2:53:13 AM
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ooooooh! i see what you mean... i'll fix it right away!JazmynMoon21 on March 17, 2007, 12:22:44 AM
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yeah you did... other wise i'd being pulling stuff out the air that would be totally wrong.OrangeFunk on March 17, 2007, 1:35:25 AM
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Like, no, I meant... Uhm... The actual part that says "description". With the whole "I'M A 'blank' AND SHE'S 'blank'"...... Do I make ANY sense? ;_;
CartoonQueen262 on March 17, 2007, 2:33:33 AM
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YEAH!!!KILL THE HOLLOW!!MUHAHAHA!!!By the way,I never knew that you knew I had an arm cannon installed within me.
I was gonna tell ya but,hey,if you already know,then what's the point?However the name of the cannon is Nullify Blaster,it's attack simply freeze the rival up and bake it's brain. Extra crispy.All it could do was scream as it's muscles seized up, every cell in it'sbody experiencing the agony subjecting it to and amplifying it by ahundred times.This is beginning to get good,I agree with the Kaj.Can't wait to see more.
OrangeFunk on March 17, 2007, 12:10:51 AM
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WHEEE. Fun fun! :DInvaderAmmy00 on March 16, 2007, 11:56:53 PM
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i love the characters. cant wait till the next chapterInvaderAmmy00 on March 16, 2007, 11:56:52 PM
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i love the characters. cant wait till the next chapterElen on March 16, 2007, 11:39:46 PM
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wooh! spiffeh! 8D I likes it mucho! x3 hope to read more soooooon! owOElen on March 16, 2007, 11:34:49 PM
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xDD I dig my name! AND I AM A TEEN AGAIN! owo heheheheDemonic_Sora on March 16, 2007, 1:55:04 PM
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>:D WAHHAHAA. ACTIONY.x] I love Wes. He pwns. 8D The story is getting good, I cant wait for you to add somemore. Really. More about each character is coming into view.
x3 Yey, you added my Sword of the Fall.
CartoonQueen262 on March 16, 2007, 7:28:07 AM
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I dunno why but I think this line out of the story makes me feel like a bad @$$"I already know what I am." said Envi, crumpling up the letter and shoving it in her pocket.
WHOO!!This is awesome keep it up.
witch_13888 on March 14, 2007, 10:21:53 AM
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ZOMG!! i love this story!! i wanna make a comic of it now!! <3 <3 <3witch_13888 on March 14, 2007, 10:13:34 AM
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**squeels** ZOMG I LOVE IT SO MUCH!!!!! **glomps you** ur such a tal,ented writer jazzi-chan <2JazmynMoon21 on March 14, 2007, 10:15:58 AM
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random question: what's the Z in ZOMG mean?? thanxy!InvaderAmmy00 on March 13, 2007, 6:11:39 PM
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U write so well!InvaderAmmy00 on March 13, 2007, 6:10:36 PM
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I still LOve this story. it is going under my favories!CartoonQueen262 on March 13, 2007, 11:18:53 AM
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Cool!But...I actually can swim XDOr am I just saying that to make ya feel better?Or...*gasp* Or did you use my sin's punishment?!TO BE THROWN INTO FREEZING WATER!!??
That might be it...Clever,my friend.Very clever.I loved the fight scene with Kaj.
Also,that fight scene with you and Chase....BRILLIANT!!!An instant fave!
JazmynMoon21 on March 13, 2007, 12:55:40 PM
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it's a robot thing. sorry!JazmynMoon21 on March 13, 2007, 11:29:25 AM
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i say you can't swim because you can't float... i'll type it in... episode... 5(?)...Elen on March 13, 2007, 12:53:16 PM
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HAHAHAHA! Chase on detention.. *snorts* xDDDhope to read more soon ^^
Demonic_Sora on March 13, 2007, 10:51:05 AM
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>x3 Neh-huu-hUuuuu~!Who pwns. The Kaj does -points to self-
-hit by bus- x__X
:0 I have brown eyes in this? Interesting, my eyes are naturally gray though. n__n Still I like this, cant wait till you add somemore~!!
CartoonQueen262 on March 12, 2007, 12:33:10 PM
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Yes....I must see these fireworks of many different colors.Very awesome story ya got here my friend,keep up the good work :)CartoonQueen262 on March 12, 2007, 12:32:48 PM
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Yes....I must see these fireworks of many different colors.Very awesome story ya got here my friend,keep up the good work :)Demonic_Sora on March 12, 2007, 11:32:33 AM
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xDDLawl. I love it. Yes Knux and I fight eachother to death because its lllooovveee. -snerk-
Dude this is freaking fun to read 8D I really hope you add more soon, because I really do love it. OMFG. I have a fire puppy...WES...I LOVE HIM...WEEESSSS x3
I love those kimono designs to :0 they all sound so kool. ADDMOREADDMOREADDMORE. +FAVES+ x3 cant wait..if you need anymore info to or if theres something your not sure about about tha Kaj, then come and ask me :3
And I think its personally hard to write for other people because ya know, you have no idea how they'd react in a situation. But I think you did really good :D Anyways I go now. n__n ADDMORE.
Demonic_Sora on March 12, 2007, 10:37:02 AM
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:0 Thats my name? LAWL. I thought it was just gonna be Kaj Howlett xD since that be my name. Seems kool though, I like the characters.
CartoonQueen262 on March 12, 2007, 10:07:26 AM
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AWESOME!!I love this,can't wait to see more :DAtemuLover on March 12, 2007, 6:06:53 AM
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I like it^^ *faves* I will politely wait for more ^^InvaderAmmy00 on March 12, 2007, 5:59:23 AM
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I like the story! ^_^Elen on March 12, 2007, 5:47:37 AM
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HAHA! This made me smile! x] WATCH ME SMILE!hehehe! so awesome that you put Vee in there too! *wiggles happily* hope to read more soon! ^^ *faves*
*hugs you*