A story about coke
Submitted August 14, 2005 Updated August 14, 2005 Status Incomplete | this is acualy a poem about coke, its better that it sounds, its suposed to be funny. oh yeah, i sux at descriptions.
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Chapter 1 - Untitled
Submitted: August 14, 2005 • Updated: August 14, 2005
Word count: 356 • Size: 1k • Comments: 8 • views: 208
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_ren_tao_fan_ on August 15, 2006, 12:23:11 AM
_ren_tao_fan_ on (Chapter: 1)
ya they do! funny
inuyasha_naruto_lover on July 30, 2006, 1:05:31 PM
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Xiakeyra on December 17, 2005, 3:55:17 AM
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Chibichan on November 12, 2005, 6:57:03 AM
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Whatsername on November 1, 2005, 10:15:00 PM
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faustrulesallwithhao on October 3, 2005, 5:18:09 AM
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kos on September 24, 2005, 1:28:29 AM
kos on (Chapter: 1)
A few typos (I've written this as a separate comment so you can delete it after you fix them):
Stanza 1, Line 3: "through" -> "throat"
S4, L4: "be" -> "but"
Also there are a few times when the tense changes from the usual past tense into the present tense:
S3, L6
S4, L4 (though maybe this one is ok like it is)
S6, L1 and L2
Stanza 1, Line 3: "through" -> "throat"
S4, L4: "be" -> "but"
Also there are a few times when the tense changes from the usual past tense into the present tense:
S3, L6
S4, L4 (though maybe this one is ok like it is)
S6, L1 and L2
kos on September 24, 2005, 1:23:28 AM
kos on (Chapter: 1)