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Submitted June 17, 2007 Updated June 17, 2007 Status Incomplete | This is a story i started a long time ago and just found it laying around my room!...to find out what its about you have to read the intro...Enjoy!
Category:
Fantasy |
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Intro
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 163 • Size: <1k • Comments: 0 • views: 219
Chapter 2 - Gurgi
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 502 • Size: 2k • Comments: 3 • views: 198
Chapter 3 - Tom
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 485 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 204
Chapter 4 - The Thief's Bargain
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 435 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 196
Chapter 5 - A Falcon, A Boy, and a Jacket
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 322 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 204
Chapter 6 - Gizmo
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 494 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 207
Chapter 7 - The Meeting
Submitted: June 17, 2007 • Updated: June 17, 2007
Word count: 464 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 205
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Rating: 2/5 (Okay)
This story is good in all the main aspects that make up a story are. For example, it uses full sentences, description, and also has some development on the characters! Great job! Though, it does what you need for a great story, but doesn't excel. It's plot is the main problem. It isn't that it's badly done, just, it's a bit boring. Your main point of suspense, the fight with the wolf at the part I read, was skimable at best. You needed to feel emotion with the characters, and play the drama that a fight has for reality. Its real hard, but it is needed. Overall, a fanfic that isn't total shoot, but isn't worth investing my time either. Above a "meh" though because it's well written. I'd improve it by spicing it up a bit. Nothing an english teacher would edit, just a bit more drama. That's all. Bye.