Hospital Induced Sickness
Submitted August 2, 2004 Updated August 26, 2004 Status Incomplete | Sars and Ecstacy, Do i REALLY have to expalin this one?
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Chapters
Chapter 1 - Awakenings
Submitted: August 2, 2004 • Updated: August 2, 2004
Word count: 2168 • Size: 12k • Comments: 13 • views: 904
Chapter 2 - Realizations
Submitted: August 3, 2004 • Updated: August 3, 2004
Word count: 2282 • Size: 12k • Comments: 8 • views: 789
Chapter 3 - Home
Submitted: August 8, 2004 • Updated: August 8, 2004
Word count: 1961 • Size: 10k • Comments: 8 • views: 562
Chapter 4 - Sickness
Submitted: August 10, 2004 • Updated: August 10, 2004
Word count: 1580 • Size: 9k • Comments: 8 • views: 518
Chapter 5 - Sex education
Submitted: August 26, 2004 • Updated: August 26, 2004
Word count: 1575 • Size: 9k • Comments: 34 • views: 1162
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Nenshou_Nai_Kon on February 19, 2005, 4:17:39 AM
Talin on February 16, 2005, 9:10:04 AM
sars_is_my_friend on February 2, 2005, 6:39:43 AM
sars_is_my_friend on February 2, 2005, 6:39:33 AM
sars_is_my_friend on January 31, 2005, 7:02:38 AM
KichigaiNeko-Chan on January 7, 2005, 5:48:55 PM
Rei_Anul_Sama on November 26, 2004, 10:58:02 AM
demonsaintdante on November 14, 2004, 2:06:16 AM
=and i think VR Jays idea would work better like this.=
The human anatomy does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave
The human form does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave
VR_Jay on November 6, 2004, 6:59:18 PM
On a different note, I find Ritalin to be a most facinanting character. More in depth than your others. That little speach he gave really meshed well with the personna you were trying to create. Couldn't have done it better myself. One thing to say is watch the repetition of certain words. Example:
”The human body does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave.
Instead of saying body twice, try useing another word like "form".
”The human body does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty form against someone else…” He turned to leave.
Meh, just a suggetsion, and feel free to smack me if you see fit.