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Conflicts and Aftermath

I am off school for the summer and I needed a project to keep me busy. I may not be the best writer, but I try. The title of the story may change. I haven't decided yet. Critiszm is welcome, but be nice don't flame me to bad. ^_^

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 0 - Persuasion
Submitted: May 9, 2007 • Updated: May 13, 2007
Word count: 2465 • Size: 13k • Comments: 5 • views: 511

Chapter 1 - Vacation Destination
Submitted: May 16, 2007 • Updated: May 16, 2007
Word count: 3742 • Size: 19k • Comments: 2 • views: 356

Chapter 2 - Sorrow and pain
Submitted: May 28, 2007 • Updated: May 28, 2007
Word count: 1539 • Size: 8k • Comments: 4 • views: 353

Chapter 3 - Detainment with a Purpose
Submitted: July 3, 2007 • Updated: July 3, 2007
Word count: 3554 • Size: 19k • Comments: 2 • views: 334

Chapter 4 - General's toy and Welcome to Despin
Submitted: July 15, 2007 • Updated: July 15, 2007
Word count: 2221 • Size: 11k • Comments: 3 • views: 332

Comments

Comments (16)

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deletestar4 on February 15, 2008, 2:13:17 PM

deletestar4 on (Chapter: 4)
deletestar4well you told me what happens next lolz

painblack on February 13, 2008, 10:17:05 AM

painblack on (Chapter: 2)
painblacki like it its bettr than what i cam white
id get bored on the frist parigraf =)

yzak23 on August 6, 2007, 1:15:46 PM

yzak23 on (Chapter: index)
yzak23I like it, I love it, I want some more of it! lol It's good, a lot better than what I can do.

edthealchemist on July 21, 2007, 2:31:42 PM

edthealchemist on (Chapter: index)
edthealchemistnice story u have some skill

Falconlobo on July 16, 2007, 5:43:56 PM

Falconlobo on (Chapter: 4)
Falconlobocool is it a time machine to set things right before

they went wrong or something

nextguardian on July 15, 2007, 12:07:54 PM

nextguardian on (Chapter: 4)
nextguardianGreat stuff A1! Poor Fox, he can't catch a break! Great job with description, and, lol, Anthony is killing me! I think I know someone like him!

nextguardian on July 3, 2007, 1:11:09 PM

nextguardian on (Chapter: 3)
nextguardianThis is a great chapter, simply put! I love the "polite voice that still registered dislike in every syllable."

Great chapter!

Falconlobo on July 3, 2007, 7:43:57 AM

Falconlobo on (Chapter: 3)
Falconlobowow funnyy chapter That Panther reminds me Of Mr. Herriman^^

nextguardian on May 29, 2007, 10:41:28 AM

nextguardian on (Chapter: 2)
nextguardianThis is a great chapter. I can see why you say it needs to be in there. Great job with the character development and description, I can actually picture this stuff!

Falconlobo on May 28, 2007, 12:53:54 PM

Falconlobo on (Chapter: 2)
Falconloboaww that was sad nice job^^

Falconlobo on May 22, 2007, 4:10:06 PM

Falconlobo on (Chapter: 1)
Falconlobocool chapter nice dialog and character interaction^^

nextguardian on May 20, 2007, 12:14:36 PM

nextguardian on (Chapter: 1)
nextguardianI'm going to echo my comments from the last chapter, and add that you're doing a really great job of portraying the characters.

Keep it up!

nextguardian on May 20, 2007, 12:07:45 PM

nextguardian on (Chapter: index)
nextguardianThis is some of the best dialogue I have ever seen!

And great detail. You hit the perfect amount imo.

Falconlobo on May 9, 2007, 8:07:56 AM

Falconlobo on (Chapter: index)
Falconlobocute and funny i like the dialog between them^^