Death Note: An Alternative
Submitted August 25, 2008 Updated June 6, 2010 Status Incomplete | This is basically the same story (with a focus on the anime rather than the manga) as the real thing but with the focus on a character I added in. Remember this focuses on my OC, you need to know the original story to fully understand this.
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Chapters
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Introduction
Submitted: August 25, 2008 • Updated: June 3, 2010
Word count: 552 • Size: 3k • Comments: 6 • views: 427
Chapter 2 - History
Submitted: August 25, 2008 • Updated: August 25, 2008
Word count: 893 • Size: 4k • Comments: 6 • views: 400
Chapter 3 - Arrival
Submitted: August 26, 2008 • Updated: August 26, 2008
Word count: 717 • Size: 3k • Comments: 5 • views: 346
Chapter 4 - Questions
Submitted: August 28, 2008 • Updated: August 28, 2008
Word count: 542 • Size: 3k • Comments: 6 • views: 344
Chapter 5 - Discovery
Submitted: August 30, 2008 • Updated: August 30, 2008
Word count: 586 • Size: 3k • Comments: 5 • views: 359
Chapter 6 - Meeting
Submitted: September 11, 2008 • Updated: September 11, 2008
Word count: 645 • Size: 3k • Comments: 4 • views: 369
Chapter 7 - Conflict
Submitted: October 26, 2008 • Updated: October 26, 2008
Word count: 470 • Size: 2k • Comments: 3 • views: 338
Chapter 8 - Partners
Submitted: October 26, 2008 • Updated: June 6, 2010
Word count: 769 • Size: 3k • Comments: 3 • views: 347
Chapter 9 - Broadcast
Submitted: October 26, 2008 • Updated: November 2, 2008
Word count: 703 • Size: 3k • Comments: 4 • views: 399
Chapter 10 - Information
Submitted: November 2, 2008 • Updated: November 2, 2008
Word count: 459 • Size: 2k • Comments: 3 • views: 309
Chapter 11 - Memories
Submitted: August 12, 2009 • Updated: August 12, 2009
Word count: 988 • Size: 5k • Comments: 1 • views: 282
Chapter 12 - Answers
Submitted: August 12, 2009 • Updated: May 7, 2010
Word count: 1010 • Size: 5k • Comments: 1 • views: 297
Chapter 13 - Preparation
Submitted: May 29, 2010 • Updated: May 29, 2010
Word count: 588 • Size: 2k • Comments: 2 • views: 259
Chapter 14 - Unfolding
Submitted: June 1, 2010 • Updated: June 1, 2010
Word count: 944 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 262
Chapter 15 - Alone
Submitted: June 2, 2010 • Updated: June 2, 2010
Word count: 1241 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 320
Chapter 16 - Deceit
Submitted: June 2, 2010 • Updated: June 3, 2010
Word count: 751 • Size: 3k • Comments: 1 • views: 268
Chapter 17 - Outcome
Submitted: June 4, 2010 • Updated: June 4, 2010
Word count: 963 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 292
Chapter 18 - Compromise
Submitted: June 6, 2010 • Updated: June 6, 2010
Word count: 1275 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 289
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KelekiahGaladrian on June 9, 2010, 2:00:09 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 18)
KelekiahGaladrian on June 9, 2010, 1:55:24 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 17)
Ooh, another long chapter. I like long chapters ^^Zach sounded a little creepy with his laugh right there at the end, but that's cool. I like creepy when it comes to this kind of stuff :P
Again, the way Zach talks to Rek and Rek's complaining make me laugh. Absolutely beautiful ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on June 9, 2010, 1:53:50 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 16)
Yay for Zach's awesome theories and Matsuda's enthusiasm. ^^ Matsuda is HILARIOUS. I LOVE him.Oh, and love L, too. L's AWESOME.
I love this chapter, too. It's EPIC.
KelekiahGaladrian on June 9, 2010, 1:52:05 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 15)
*laughs* Dude, you are a GENIUS. I don't think I'd be able to work something like that for killing people that way. Zach is AWESOME.And I love the way he talks to Rek, again. That's just funny.
MATSUDA!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE MATSUDA!!!!! And I love how you worked the scene with him. That's just great ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on June 9, 2010, 1:50:31 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 14)
Wow. The chapters are getting longer! Hehe!!I love how Zach talks to Rek. It makes me laugh ^^
And yay for Ryuk!!
I really like the way the story is "unfolding" ^^ I like that word. It's a nice word ^^
bookworm369 on June 1, 2010, 11:02:25 AM
bookworm369 on (Chapter: index)
i like that word "unfold"and here i was having trouble thinking of a chapter name =P
KelekiahGaladrian on May 31, 2010, 1:54:09 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 13)
Don't worry about it being extremely late. It happens sometimes.I think that turned out really cool. It's interesting to see how the story unfolds.
. . . . Zach is EPIC.
I just barely realized how much I missed this fic. ^^
bookworm369 on May 29, 2010, 4:19:23 PM
bookworm369 on (Chapter: 13)
I'm sorry for chapter 13 being so long overdue, and being incredibly short on top of that. had to get some kind of filler chapter in though, i promise it'll get better at the endKelekiahGaladrian on August 20, 2009, 12:12:04 PM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 12)
Ooh, Zach discovered L. I like L. He's cute and he's one of my favorite characters. Ryuk comes in second and Mello's third. I love them all!Anyway, I like the conversation between Rek and Zach. It makes me laugh even though I'd be irritated like Zach too if I were in his situation. People who skirt the subject annoy me.
OOH!! L KNOWS!!! *falls over*
Yay! That was awesome! :P Me LUVS!!
KelekiahGaladrian on August 20, 2009, 12:08:11 PM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 11)
Grr, I'm so angry with myself. This has taken me FOREVER to finally FIND. Gosh dangit. I need to keep better track of it ^^0Okay, to start off, I love it. Especially the first friend comment from L. That was just adorable. I've always loved that line, yes yes, ALWAYS.
It's been ages since I last read this, so I don't remember EVERYTHING for sure, so I don't remember if you mentioned that Zach went to Wammy's beforehand, but that is AWESOME!!!!!!!! AND HE'S FRIENDS WITH MELLO!!! NYA!!!!!! I LOVE MELLO!!!!!!!!!! *squeezes Mello plushie* :3
I love it, I love it. I shall read the next chapter immediately, yes yes.
KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:20:38 PM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 10)
Hehe, awesomeness. The entirety of this chapter was awesome. The way the characters were portrayed, their personalities, etc were great. I absolutely adore your writing, like I do for many other people, Yori-chan included. It's very unique and simply amazing at the same time. I salute you. It's hard to find good writer's these days. ^^YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 5:56:06 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 10)
lol, Yes Light is way too uptight and paranoid. "If you see someone behaving wierd, there's a good chance it's L." LOL!! FANTASTIC! ^_^
I love Zach ^^ His reactions to things are hilarious. I can't wait to read more!!
YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 1:31:40 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 9)
"Ah! The broadcast!" lol. Loved it as always ^^ The ending was my favorite part, that one word was perfect!I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^
Oh... and.... *evil gleam in eyes* DIE MISA!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DeathNoteSurvivor on November 2, 2008, 5:08:26 AM
DeathNoteSurvivor on (Chapter: 9)
so i gather that you and Kel are not Misa fans lolYoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 5:11:27 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: index)
Not really, hehe ^^;YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 1:26:22 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 8)
Mr. Modesty ^_^ That was awesome lol And I laughed so hard at the "being sarcastic seems to result in intelligence once in a while" thing! Zach's going to kick back and let Light take the wheel for a while... hmm... this should be interesting!
ON TO READ MORE!!!
YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 1:20:00 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 7)
AHHH! I get to read more!! ^_^ YES!!Awesome chapter! I loved Light's reactions, it's not often I get to see him flounder hehehe And I can't help but like Zach even more the more I read. ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on October 28, 2008, 3:40:49 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 9)
MISA!!!!! *attempts to throttle her*Ravin: While my hikari is busy being her usual sadistic self, I will review this for her.... She loves the way you wrote it and how Light and Zach met at school and the ending. She says that's all she has to say and it's very depressing how little that is. She also says "Great job!" and she can't wait for more.
*still throttling Misa*
KelekiahGaladrian on October 28, 2008, 3:38:58 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 8)
Partners!! Alright! Zach is good at that it seems, even if he doesn't want any friends. I agree to an extent. People can certainly be boring at times. I know I can be XPDangit, I found myself without something to say again. Rawr....
Well... great job!! ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on October 28, 2008, 3:37:15 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 7)
Light and Zach's conversation was funny. ^^ I thought I was going to die laughing. Light is so funny to listen to and Zach is so smart :PUm... I have nothing else to say.... How depressing....
Great job! ^^
Blackwolfmoon on October 27, 2008, 9:57:34 AM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: index)
=3 i really like where this story is going, your doing a great job on writeing it ^-^ ur writeing style is son unique that it is easy to hold peoples attention, keep writeing! ^-^
YumeXItachi on October 18, 2008, 8:07:34 AM
YumeXItachi on (Chapter: 5)
Hm.....HM.......
Sweet Man :]
YumeXItachi on October 18, 2008, 8:00:59 AM
YumeXItachi on (Chapter: 4)
:DHehe This is Awesome :}
Truly Is!
YumeXItachi on October 18, 2008, 7:56:34 AM
YumeXItachi on (Chapter: 3)
Woo!Sweet Chapter Man!
It's Really Getting Good So Far!
=D
YumeXItachi on October 18, 2008, 7:52:22 AM
YumeXItachi on (Chapter: 2)
Haha Rek Sounds Pretty Familiar....Don't Know From where But I'll remember soon Enough...
Hehe This Story Really Is Getting Good though :D
YumeXItachi on October 18, 2008, 7:46:57 AM
YumeXItachi on (Chapter: 1)
Hm...HM.....
I Do Have To Say That This Is Really Awesome Man :D
I Really Like It!
Sorry It Took So Long to Read :[
But It IS Awesome!! <3
YoriXYamiForever on September 11, 2008, 1:26:15 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 6)
HAHA! I love to see Light worried about the Death Note ^^I love how you wrote Zach's emotions. That was awesome! And now I'm curious about the 3 day thing... hmmm.... Hehe, I can't wait to see Light's reaction to Zach! Update soon K? I LOVE THIS STORY!
DeathNoteSurvivor on September 11, 2008, 1:29:02 PM
DeathNoteSurvivor on (Chapter: 6)
blast! XD you caught it. ill go ahead and admit that that will come back into play laterYoriXYamiForever on September 11, 2008, 2:19:07 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: index)
hehe, I knew it! :DKelekiahGaladrian on September 11, 2008, 1:24:15 PM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 6)
Ooh. I love the ending. IT MAKES ME WANT MORE!!!Rek's indifferent attitude. Hehehe. I love it!
I want to ace my tests. But for some reason, I can't seem to. It's really retarded.
I'm glad Zach found the right house. Light will probably be really ticked off next chapter because Zach's in his room. Probably wouldn't surprise me one bit if he was. He didn't sound too happy at the end of this chapter, that's for sure.
I'M SO PSYCHED!!! I TOTALLY CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!!! ^^
YoriXYamiForever on September 1, 2008, 10:40:46 AM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 5)
NICE! Go Zach ^^ I can't wait to see them meet!hehe Poor Rek, he doesn't seem to think about the Death Note too much
KelekiahGaladrian on August 31, 2008, 11:52:10 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 5)
Wow. Zach is definitely smarter in this chapter than he was in the last chapter. He'll definitely be a handful for both Kira and L.So Zach wants to meet Light. That'll definitely be an interesting scene....
Hehe, Rek doesn't seem to be very smart and up-to-date. That's funny. Hehe.
Awesome job JT-kun! ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on August 31, 2008, 11:50:21 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 4)
I should probably check this every day so as to make sure I'm updated with your updates 'cause I don't get story alerts. FAC kinda sucks sometimes. Okay, almost all the time. Anyway....To start off, I'm gonna say that I think Zach is a very smart kid. We'll see just how smart when he most likely comes across issues later on.
Ugh, cameras. I hate cameras. Whether or not it's recording or just pictures or surveillance cameras. Either way. I hate them. They should all die....
Awesome job! Maybe I should mark this story in my favorite web pages so I remember to check it everyday.... Hmm....
blacksheeppoet on August 31, 2008, 7:09:45 AM
blacksheeppoet on (Chapter: 1)
Interesting.... I must say that you've done a good job on this.I'll make sure to read more of your story as much as I can XD
WaterLilly on August 30, 2008, 2:55:15 PM
WaterLilly on (Chapter: 5)
Zach is smart, he figured something out about the death note the death god didn't know..impresive..anyways.. can't wait for the next chapter!
Blackwolfmoon on August 29, 2008, 3:48:12 AM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: 4)
who's zach gonna kill with the death note? o.o and not with thje cameras again >.<next chapter plz! ^^
DeathNoteSurvivor on August 29, 2008, 6:11:25 AM
DeathNoteSurvivor on (Chapter: 4)
again? its the first time o0YoriXYamiForever on August 28, 2008, 1:10:52 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 4)
Short but kool ^^ Oh boy... Zach's gonna use the Death Note. Does he start with criminals too? The cameras in his room was one of my favorite parts for light. The chip bag camera was pure genius!!
Can't wait for more ^^
KelekiahGaladrian on August 27, 2008, 9:07:54 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 3)
I can imagine how... problematic things could get for Light in this story, and probably will too. I love it! Suspense is totally awesome and definitely keeps me going, even if it's only small and just starting out. Awesomeness! I hope I get an alert for the next time you upload a chapter. If not, you might have to let me know 'cause FAC can suck really bad sometimes.... Anyway, great story. I love how it's going so far. ^^KelekiahGaladrian on August 27, 2008, 9:03:10 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 2)
Hehehe, electrical current. Hehehehehehehehe.Okay, so I'm a little crazy, but whatever. I like it, definitely AWESOME. Vacations and Death Notes and attitudes and shut ups and zip its and secrecy and death. That sounds like fun. Sort of. Hehehehehehe. *thumbs up* Awesome!
KelekiahGaladrian on August 27, 2008, 8:58:59 AM
KelekiahGaladrian on (Chapter: 1)
I have done what I said I would do. I finally finished going through comments and managed to make my way over here to read this. Yay! Interesting beginning. I like it. *thumbs up* Awesome. ^^Blackwolfmoon on August 26, 2008, 9:54:38 PM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: 3)
sweet chapter! x3 i love this story so far!Blackwolfmoon on August 26, 2008, 9:41:38 PM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: 2)
awesome ^^ i love rek's additude !Blackwolfmoon on August 26, 2008, 9:41:23 PM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: 2)
awesome ^^ i love rek's additude !YoriXYamiForever on August 26, 2008, 1:48:24 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 3)
GO ZACH! lol, I like characters without the eye deal, it makes it much more challenging ^^Also I wonder how Light would react to being found . . . . he didn't take it very well with Misa until he realized she wanted to serve him and had a Shinigami on her side that would kill him if he killed her lol
Can't wait for the next chapter!
YoriXYamiForever on August 25, 2008, 12:42:35 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 2)
Heh heh! Nice ^^ I like Rek already with his "Shut up" "I said zip it" lolA vacation! He's gonna try and track Light down right? Ah! I can't wait for the next chapter ^^
YoriXYamiForever on August 25, 2008, 12:05:49 PM
YoriXYamiForever on (Chapter: 1)
YEAH! I'm so glad you decided to write this! ^^The beginning is really catching and I can't wait to read more! Update soon please ^_^
Blackwolfmoon on August 25, 2008, 7:40:32 AM
Blackwolfmoon on (Chapter: 1)
awesome! definitely caught my attention =P can't wait to read more x3
Oh dear, Zach was discovered kinda by some random maid!
Wow, Rek is pretty useless.
CLIFFIE!! NO!! *falls over* That's so mean TT_TT
I wonder what this deal is. . . .