Poem: The Crazy Egyptian
Submitted April 14, 2005 Updated April 14, 2005 Status Incomplete | Yah ummm... this here's my first poem in Fanart central... and also it's my first poem with anything to do with YGO, so please don't hate... ...and if you like Yami no Yuugi and/or Rishid, please don't read this...cuz they kinda get hurt...
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Chapter 1 - Poem: The Crazy Egyptian
Submitted: April 14, 2005 • Updated: April 14, 2005
Word count: 2008 • Size: 9k • Comments: 27 • views: 806
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_Sanctuary_ on September 9, 2005, 4:13:17 AM
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Nemya on June 28, 2005, 6:18:04 PM
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*glomps you*
Waha! Its totally awesome! I was laughing and everyone in the class thought I was insane. Yes. Im in school. Its a free period, so I get to go on the library computers..
Anyways, I loved it! Totally awesome! Hee, I liked the parts about slicing his dad real slow, and "So get away, you big ugly gay, Or I'll have to chop your head" XDDDDDD
So hilarious! You are so good at writing aswell as drawing! Grak! *faves*
Waha! Its totally awesome! I was laughing and everyone in the class thought I was insane. Yes. Im in school. Its a free period, so I get to go on the library computers..
Anyways, I loved it! Totally awesome! Hee, I liked the parts about slicing his dad real slow, and "So get away, you big ugly gay, Or I'll have to chop your head" XDDDDDD
So hilarious! You are so good at writing aswell as drawing! Grak! *faves*
DemonTheifQueen on June 18, 2005, 2:50:41 PM
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hellpoemer on May 29, 2005, 5:28:49 AM
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Black_Breeze on May 29, 2005, 1:17:52 AM
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Pretty good. Interesting story. Although I do have a few things to say about it. . . you switched names a little in the poem, like instead of saying Rishid, you said Odion. I thought that was pretty funny.
Second, you used "bish", "faves", "cuz", and others. In a story/poem you have to use actual words and not just abreviations. That seems a bit unprofessional if you do. The rhythm and rhyme of this poem was excellent however, yet I think Rishid was a bit OOC.
Great job!
Second, you used "bish", "faves", "cuz", and others. In a story/poem you have to use actual words and not just abreviations. That seems a bit unprofessional if you do. The rhythm and rhyme of this poem was excellent however, yet I think Rishid was a bit OOC.
Great job!
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