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the lost heart

it is a story about vincent valentine and a OC a friend of my made up...me and my friend are making this story and we have a pretty good feeling about it.

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Chapter 1 - chapter one: storm in nibelheim
Submitted: May 7, 2006 • Updated: May 7, 2006
Word count: 1659 • Size: 8k • Comments: 1 • views: 241

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VincentValentine13 on May 17, 2006, 5:24:31 AM

VincentValentine13 on (Chapter: 1)
VincentValentine13This is interesting...I can see that the idea is a nice one, but I will say that it is not original. It seems that as far as OCs are concerned, we can't seem to leave poor Vincent alone ^.^! Ah, well, that just goes to show there's nothing new under the sun, I suppose, but I digress. At any rate, if you are going to continue this story, I suggest that you drop the script format. This is a bit distracting when trying to read, and just screams of ameteurity (look at me! I made a new word!). Anyway, I suggest you give this a little face lift, and then go from there! Good luck!