Vincent's Daughter

Chapter 1 - Proluge
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Chapter 2 - Chapter 1
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Chapter 3 - Chapter 2
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Chapter 4 - Kiro
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Chapter 5 - 5
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Chapter 6 - 6
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Chapter 7 - 7
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Chapter 8 - 8
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Chapter 9 - 9
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Chapter 10 - 10
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Chapter 11 - 11
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Vincent11 on July 27, 2006, 1:56:07 PM

Vincent11 on July 27, 2006, 1:56:07 PM (Chapter: 3)

poorly writen you were awsome i love it

Vincent11 on July 27, 2006, 1:45:55 PM

Vincent11 on July 27, 2006, 1:45:55 PM (Chapter: 2)

I love it the way you end it makes the reader want more your great!

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 3:05:35 AM

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 3:05:35 AM (Chapter: 4)

Short but bitter-sweet. Kinda non-descriptive, and I think that when a person is wracked with pain, the last thought on their mind is whether a person is hot or not....sorry, just saying it.

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 3:02:26 AM

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 3:02:26 AM (Chapter: 3)

Kinda short, but not too bad. Just a few descriptive and grammatical issues, just the normal stuff all us writers suffer from.

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 2:55:18 AM

VincentValentine13 on January 12, 2006, 2:55:18 AM (Chapter: 2)

Well, I'll ignore the Yuffietine factor, but I will say something.
At the beginning of this chapter, you wrote, "Cold, Dark, This would describe....etc." Now, the cold dark part was okay, but you probably couldv'e worded that next sentence, that was kinda....hmm, I don't know....not right?
Anyway, Vincent's portrayel is good, but maybe you could be a bit more descriptive in your writing. Hope this helps you, and come point out my mistakes on my story too, please!

Zell11 on December 17, 2005, 11:52:09 PM

Zell11 on December 17, 2005, 11:52:09 PM (Chapter: 4)

Omg. This is so good.Plz write more.

Zell11 =^-^=

Kupo on August 22, 2005, 7:03:21 AM

Kupo on August 22, 2005, 7:03:21 AM (Chapter: 4)

wtf? why haven't i commented on ths!!! i've seen it before and i'm pretty sure it's on my favs (and if it's not it should be) so i have no idea why i haven't commented on it! anyway great job! this story is super awsomeness! that leon was clouds son was almost painfully obvious but maybe it was supposed to be? i was just coming here anyway to see if you'd added any chapters but no *sniffles* PLEASE WRITE MORE!

KYOSCHIC on July 30, 2005, 7:13:46 AM

KYOSCHIC on July 30, 2005, 7:13:46 AM (Chapter: 4)

I LIKE IT!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!

Serenity89 on July 12, 2005, 8:53:23 AM

Serenity89 on July 12, 2005, 8:53:23 AM (Chapter: 3)

Ooh, Keep It Up ^_^

orangegirl on July 9, 2005, 7:24:57 AM

orangegirl on July 9, 2005, 7:24:57 AM (Chapter: 3)

excellent! i cant wait to read the next chapter!