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Blue Bird

I liked this song so I decided to make a story. Yes Ayume is my naruto Oc. And yes her and naruto like each other. Um I may cotinue it if enough people read it so uh yeah enjoy and do the comment thingy.

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 1 - Ayume's Birthday
Submitted: August 15, 2008 • Updated: December 4, 2008
Word count: 542 • Size: 2k • Comments: 2 • views: 252

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nextguardian on August 15, 2008, 12:54:36 PM

nextguardian on (Chapter: 1)
nextguardianYou did a very good job, please continue :)

My only critique would be spacing. Something like this would be easier to read:

"Naruto, you do know that a girl sings that song," Sai said.

"And your point is...?" Naruto said.

Anyway, nice work!

sorakeyblader258 on August 16, 2008, 1:26:51 AM

sorakeyblader258 on (Chapter: 1)
sorakeyblader258Yeah thanks for the comment and I'll space out more.