Kaley??
Submitted May 19, 2009 Updated June 15, 2009 Status Incomplete | I had an urge to write something like this...so i did lol enjoy.xx it's about twins (boy and girl). they went into what they thought was their garden when they were 13. 6 years later, they were still stuck in it.
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Chapters
Chapter 0 - Prologue
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
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Chapter 1 - Chapter One
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
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Chapter 2 - Chapter Two
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
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Chapter 3 - Chapter Three
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
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Chapter 4 - Chapter Four
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
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Chapter 5 - Chapter Five
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 21, 2009
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Chapter 6 - Chapter Six
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 21, 2009
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Chapter 7 - Chapter Seven
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 22, 2009
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Chapter 8 - Chapter Eight
Submitted: May 22, 2009 • Updated: May 22, 2009
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Chapter 9 - Chapter Nine
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: May 31, 2009
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Chapter 10 - Chapter Ten
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: May 31, 2009
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Chapter 11 - Chapter Eleven
Submitted: June 2, 2009 • Updated: June 2, 2009
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Chapter 12 - Chapter Twelve
Submitted: June 15, 2009 • Updated: June 15, 2009
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liggybird on June 27, 2009, 9:58:27 PM
xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 10:08:56 PM
thanks. i havent heard from you for a while. how're you? xliggybird on June 28, 2009, 4:10:55 AM
I'm quite well (says he touching wood) thanks. I'm just doing routine stuff like walking into town to shop and have the occasional coffee or, like today, a glass of beer. Yesterday I went to the cinema to see a newly released film called 'Sunshine Cleaning'. I go most places on my own, but it's better than staying in.It was very nice of you to jog my memory today. I've really enjoyed bringing myself up to date with Kaley's and Jason's adventures. I'm a bit of a romantic, so I'm interested in the 'who's fancying who' aspects of the story as well as the rest of the drama.
I just read two chapters of 'Tia??' and love it so far btw. Keep up the good work. This is some of the best writing I've seen. It's hard to believe you're only fourteen.
Thanks for sharing these stories.
xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 5:07:17 AM
oh? how was the film? didnt you go with your son? i stayed at the house (boarding school) today and watched Casino Royale with my friends, pigging out and eating ice cream and coke lol it was the mst brilliant way to waste a day.thanks for all the compliments (: give me a little critism from time to time, so that my head doesnt get too big lol xx
liggybird on June 28, 2009, 10:16:02 AM
The film was very good. (I'd recommend it, but I imagine it's nothing like Casino Royale.) My son went with me last week to see Monsters Versus Aliens. I'd forgotten that when I said I went most places on my own. I had to talk him into going, but he said afterwards he'd enjoyed the film.Your boarding school sounds cool. Sounds like it's probably a good environment for literary creativity. Have a fabulous summer vacation soon.
xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 7:34:59 PM
ooh i've always wanted to see monsters vs aliens. lol it's the teenage rebellion phase isnt it?yea...but they work us pretty hard sometimes...it's just because it's the end of term that they cut us some slack.
thanks...hope you have a great one too (:
x
Kaley on June 5, 2009, 6:30:36 AM
ok. that was unexpected. but really cool.xxnataxx on June 5, 2009, 8:18:11 PM
ha thanks xxblackcatcurse on June 2, 2009, 7:57:35 AM
DUHN. DUHN. DUUUUUUUUHHNNNNNNNN!(And lemme guess, the BN is their father. Probly not...)
xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 6:11:15 PM
lol no...but good try xxxxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 2:47:41 AM
oh btw i changed the tigers into ligers lol i dont know, but ligers are more powerful and stuff like that so...yea lolxx
Kaley on June 1, 2009, 6:59:02 AM
question... when's the next chapter coming out?this was really good!
xxnataxx on June 1, 2009, 8:06:00 PM
haha thanks. as soon as possible, i guess...i'll try to upload a new chapter today (:
xx
Konohasdarkshadow on May 21, 2009, 2:15:23 PM
:O JJ to the rescue! you made an error! you mixed up some stories XD “But be sure to tell us if you do,” Kerri added.
you meant Kaley right? ^^. That one confuZled me lol, i was staring at it for like 3 long minutes trying to figure out what it meant, but then realized you meant Kaley
xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:05:20 PM
lol and i only typed the wrong name because i was writing both stories at the same time so that kind of confuzzled me lol xxxxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:25 PM
omgggg thanks for telling me that lol that would've been like a fatal error xxliggybird on May 21, 2009, 8:35:20 AM
It's interesting to see the various ways in which Kaley asserts herself amongst the others. Having the adversaries meet (confrontationally) in the middle of the night is an excellent way of bringing out some of their conflicts imo. Plenty of interesting things are being revealed through the dialogue. Gripping stuff!xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:47 PM
thanks liggy (: xxblackcatcurse on May 20, 2009, 6:05:46 AM
This is turning out interesting...Keep going!
xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:23 PM
thanks xxliggybird on May 20, 2009, 8:01:08 AM
This is astonishingly well written. I like the interactions between these character pairings. Touches of humour, fast paced action, mind games and some terrific description. Exceptionally good.xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:07 PM
thanks (: xxKonohasdarkshadow on May 20, 2009, 8:53:26 AM
this is how all of nata's work is!!! she is an A-class writer! you should really check out her other stories too! they are terrific!
Wolves, clandestine journeys (between various tents and elsewhere), rides on ligers, scrolls, surrogate and biological mothering and so on.
I also find it cool how you use plenty of little interpersonal dramas (like Alex accusing Jason of being lazy at the start of this chapter) to bring out your characters' natures.
My understanding of the story's far from perfect - but it's a highly enjoyable ride all the same.