Tia??

Chapter 1 - Chapter One
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Chapter 2 - Chapter Two
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Chapter 3 - Chapter Three
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Chapter 4 - Chapter Four
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Chapter 5 - Chapter Five
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Chapter 6 - Chapter Six
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Chapter 7 - Chapter Seven
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Chapter 8 - Chapter Eight
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Chapter 9 - Chapter Nine
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Chapter 10 - Chapter Ten
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Chapter 11 - Chapter Eleven
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blackcatcurse on July 13, 2009, 4:40:23 AM

blackcatcurse on July 13, 2009, 4:40:23 AM (Chapter: 10)

Funny, that's what the kids in my school do when we have a sub...XD (pull out there phones and text each other all class)

(This text has some sexual references. Not for kids under the age of 13.)

xxnataxx on July 13, 2009, 6:51:55 PM

xxnataxx on July 13, 2009, 6:51:55 PM (Chapter: 10)

lol same

blackcatcurse on July 3, 2009, 4:04:57 AM

blackcatcurse on July 3, 2009, 4:04:57 AM (Chapter: 8)

...
Not all stories turn out happily.
Tia, I wouldn't get your hopes up.

Some authors enjoy a few plot twists. :3

xxnataxx on July 3, 2009, 4:05:56 AM

xxnataxx on July 3, 2009, 4:05:56 AM (Chapter: 8)

lol are you sympathising...?

blackcatcurse on July 3, 2009, 4:09:56 AM

blackcatcurse on July 3, 2009, 4:09:56 AM (Chapter: index)

Yes.
And oversighting.

blackcatcurse on July 2, 2009, 9:01:17 PM

blackcatcurse on July 2, 2009, 9:01:17 PM (Chapter: 7)

Now they're gonna live in the same house together...
:3

blackcatcurse on June 30, 2009, 11:56:13 PM

blackcatcurse on June 30, 2009, 11:56:13 PM (Chapter: 6)

Aww...

blackcatcurse on June 29, 2009, 4:24:21 AM

blackcatcurse on June 29, 2009, 4:24:21 AM (Chapter: 5)

I noticed that all of your last names are adjectives or nouns...
Anywho, keep it up! I'm still trying to figure out the conflict.

xxnataxx on June 29, 2009, 4:46:50 AM

xxnataxx on June 29, 2009, 4:46:50 AM (Chapter: 5)

haha that's right. i never realised it before xx

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 9:32:50 AM

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 9:32:50 AM (Chapter: 3)

I think you need to maybe broaden this out and involve these two (Tia and Jet) in a more far reaching adventure. There's humour here and some interesting details, but for me there's too much emphasis on the relationship issue. I would prefer it if these characters were given more depth.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 7:38:50 PM

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 7:38:50 PM (Chapter: 3)

thx...i think depth is given in the next chapter...i think. well, at least, in the next few chapters...it reveals a bit more about Jet...i'll put a chapter up today xx

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 4:39:51 AM

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 4:39:51 AM (Chapter: 1)

I've always been fascinated in observing the different ways 'fateful encounters' are depicted in literature. I have to say this one - pulling someone out of a well - is probably the most unusual I've come across.
Quite a shocker of an opening. I had to suspend quite a lot of disbelief by how (relatively) calmly Tia seemed to take being left to drown in the well. I like the idea of girls being resilient though, so it'll be interesting to discover more about Tia's character.
Some nice touches of humour - such as that brilliant final line.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 5:03:58 AM

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 5:03:58 AM (Chapter: 1)

thanks. i was actually worried that she would be a bit too calm for a girl who's just been thrown down a well, but...yeah, i'll just see how it goes...x

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 9:00:32 PM

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 9:00:32 PM (Chapter: 3)

Actually, I was thinking He's going to ask her if she'll be his girlfriend.
=^-^=

xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 9:05:38 PM

xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 9:05:38 PM (Chapter: 3)

lol that kind of works itself into the story a bit later on...i think i'm going to upload another one soon...if i have time xx

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 2:39:46 AM

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 2:39:46 AM (Chapter: 2)

Keep going!
*cheers*

blackcatcurse on June 26, 2009, 11:53:11 PM

blackcatcurse on June 26, 2009, 11:53:11 PM (Chapter: 1)

Ooh, I wonder where this shall go?
=^-^=
Go nata!

xxnataxx on June 26, 2009, 11:58:34 PM

xxnataxx on June 26, 2009, 11:58:34 PM (Chapter: 1)

haha lol thx
xx
p.s. you can almost just tell it's my story now cant you? lol what with the weird names and the ??s afterwards...

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 12:30:50 AM

blackcatcurse on June 27, 2009, 12:30:50 AM (Chapter: index)

Yes. lol/roflmto.