Yugioh GX: The Wrath of Dartz
Submitted April 6, 2016 Updated June 4, 2017 Status Complete | Jaden and the gang are back! The third year kicks off with a long time friend transferring to Duel Academy and joins the gang for another adventure. The wrath of Pharoah and Empress' enemy resurrected and comes back for revenge on Empress' Aqua Deck duelist. Will Jaden and the Gang put an end to this Soul Nightmare once and for all?
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Chapters
Chapter 0 - First Day at Duel Academy
Submitted: April 6, 2016 • Updated: April 6, 2016
Word count: 3084 • Size: 18k • Comments: 8 • views: 379
Chapter 1 - A New Soul Villain Awakens
Submitted: April 6, 2016 • Updated: April 6, 2016
Word count: 1996 • Size: 11k • Comments: 0 • views: 469
Chapter 2 - Water vs. Fire
Submitted: April 9, 2016 • Updated: April 9, 2016
Word count: 2898 • Size: 16k • Comments: 0 • views: 249
Chapter 3 - Doppelganger on the Loose.
Submitted: April 10, 2016 • Updated: April 10, 2016
Word count: 2562 • Size: 14k • Comments: 0 • views: 384
Chapter 4 - A Tangled Chaos
Submitted: May 17, 2016 • Updated: May 17, 2016
Word count: 2997 • Size: 17k • Comments: 0 • views: 263
Chapter 5 - Sisterly Love
Submitted: May 17, 2016 • Updated: May 17, 2016
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Chapter 6 - Fight For a Friend Part 1
Submitted: May 17, 2016 • Updated: May 17, 2016
Word count: 3119 • Size: 18k • Comments: 0 • views: 277
Chapter 7 - Fight For a Friend Part 2
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
Word count: 1815 • Size: 9k • Comments: 0 • views: 354
Chapter 8 - Return of the Japanese Gods Part 1
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
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Chapter 9 - Return of the Japanese Gods Part 2
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
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Chapter 9 - Return of the Japanese Gods Part 2
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
Word count: 4104 • Size: 24k • Comments: 0 • views: 422
Chapter 10 - Return of the Japanese Gods Part 3
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
Word count: 3788 • Size: 22k • Comments: 0 • views: 422
Chapter 11 - Epilogue
Submitted: June 4, 2017 • Updated: June 4, 2017
Word count: 3329 • Size: 19k • Comments: 0 • views: 454
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Firiel on April 8, 2016, 7:08:19 PM
SnowyJeleciaHusky on April 8, 2016, 7:32:58 PM
Thank you so much for the advice I do need to work on my grammar.. I'll be more careful about my story. Sorry if the story is bright I'll try to make it more darker. Thanks *hugs*
Firiel on April 8, 2016, 7:36:10 PM
Thanks for listening. :)SnowyJeleciaHusky on April 8, 2016, 7:42:24 PM
Thank you, for the lovely advice. XD Firiel on April 8, 2016, 7:18:03 PM
(Chapter 1)Black font is a lot easier to read, that's handy.
Dragon powers, cool. :)
Wow, Jesse's laying it on kind of thick with Pattie, isn't he? ;)
How old are these kids? I'm just wondering because of the alchohol at the party.
Flirting with the statue? I bet that would be funny to watch in person!
Faline's crush has heart damage? That's... some pretty high-stakes dueling. >.< I hope duelists get good medical treatment.
And the villain appears. Evil Atlanteans - that shall be interesting.
(Psst - these damn goofball should be these damn goofballs, since there's more than one of 'em!)
SnowyJeleciaHusky on April 8, 2016, 7:29:24 PM
(chapter 1)Yeah three Japanese Gods.
Jesse has feelings for Pattie.
They're like in high school and some are 18.
Lol, I can picture Jaden doing that, haha! XD
Well, Faline is in love with Zane and understand about him and the underground dueling. She wants to break him out of that. Yup, Torrez is the son of Dartz.
(well Jaden was the only one that Blair was asking about.)
Firiel on April 8, 2016, 7:35:48 PM
It will be interesting to watch Faline/Zane over time, I think. :)(This damn goofball, then? "These"=more than one.)
SnowyJeleciaHusky on April 8, 2016, 7:41:39 PM
Lol my Faline loves him so much.. ;Zane x Faline= CyberMelody shippings.
Nice setting of the scene, with friends getting together for the start of the new school year, and a welcoming party for the new arrival. I wonder what these Top Students coming in are going to be like, personality-wise?
I think your story might be improved if you got your verb-tenses to match more - the words that say if it's happening now, or in the past. Having them shift around so much feels a little bit like time-travel! ;) And while I know customizing colors on font is fun, the color of blue you have here is so light, that it can be a little hard to read against the medium-gray background of the FAC site. Maybe you could pick a darker shade of blue next time?
That's my advice, take it or leave it - but you've got a nice start here, and it's good to have you sharing your story. :)