alone in constent silence
Submitted February 18, 2004 Updated June 11, 2004 Status Incomplete | i am depressed
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Anime/Manga » Yu Yu Hakusho » Hiei |
Chapters
Chapter 1 - alone in constant silence
Submitted: February 18, 2004 • Updated: February 18, 2004
Word count: 559 • Size: 2k • Comments: 11 • views: 434
Chapter 2 - shadows
Submitted: February 19, 2004 • Updated: February 19, 2004
Word count: 454 • Size: 2k • Comments: 3 • views: 254
Chapter 3 - I CRY OUT
Submitted: March 16, 2004 • Updated: March 16, 2004
Word count: 224 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 254
Chapter 4 - betrayed and broken
Submitted: May 5, 2004 • Updated: May 5, 2004
Word count: 245 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 244
Chapter 5 - EVERLASTING BETRAYAL
Submitted: June 6, 2004 • Updated: June 6, 2004
Word count: 273 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 238
Chapter 6 - some thing....
Submitted: June 11, 2004 • Updated: June 11, 2004
Word count: 376 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 152
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master59002 on May 27, 2004, 9:53:36 AM
didn't u do this 1 on other place?the_vampress on March 16, 2004, 8:18:28 AM
I think this is a wonderful poem. I think it's written very well, and it's something that Hiei would think (though I doubt write himself). Most people wouldn't admit the dark truth about Hiei, they only see what the show lets them, but this has a wonderful dark quality that would fit a deep scare hidden in his heart.sweetblood on March 6, 2004, 7:44:45 AM
Awesome poem!! *adds to fav's* keep writing! ~^_^~Raymei on February 26, 2004, 4:46:56 PM
Not bad n.nIt may have been better to edit out your favorite parts and make it shoter cuz sometimes it's like you're repeating with diff words (which you only use to attain certain affects of drudgery)
Consistancy would be something to look into too. Cuz if you're going to do that repeating of stanzas thing, you don't want to randomly break that and then go back. Kinda ackward.
Chotto Mearii-Suu soo ne. Hiei wa toojyoojin butsu dake o shootteiru no?
Zeke_hieis_girl on February 25, 2004, 2:01:02 PM
thankies for the advice cat ^__^ i think it will be easy for me to put my self in hiei's place because i kinda feel like he does right now....Silver_Fox_theif on February 24, 2004, 10:38:36 AM
that's a good poem, but *not wanting to sound mean, but sounding mean anyway* maybe if u didnt start so may stansas with the same thing.....BTW, it's nice to know there's a fellow youkai around here. i'm a brown-haired spirit fox (like Youko). what are u?Zeke_hieis_girl on February 23, 2004, 12:21:34 PM
okies this took me quite a while to write and i will tell you the seat i was sitting in didnt feel to comfortable after sitting in it for so long well hope you like and i hope its not to long.THIS POEM IS DETICATED TO HIEI JAGANSHIZeke_hieis_girl on February 22, 2004, 4:00:24 AM
Genkai if you look at this poem it is a bit more acurate with how hiei feels and wants to feel i do some times think of hiei as just some one who lost his way and is provoked to do what he does it wasnt his fault hina was a bad mother by disobaying the rules now was it?? Zeke_hieis_girl on February 22, 2004, 3:58:13 AM
Thankies Genkai your comments mean alot to me ^__^ and yes i know that he doesnt want to be as dark as he is it was just how the poem turned out and i didnt say it was in hiei's point of view now did i heheheh i am a trixy youkai you know Zeke_hieis_girl on February 22, 2004, 3:49:35 AM
thankies for your comment it means alot to me ^__^