Flower of Fire: A New Shinobi Appears
Submitted March 27, 2008 Updated April 6, 2008 Status Complete | A new Chunin Exam final has arrived. Find out what happens to the young son of a merchant family after Hinata recieves an unusual fortune.
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Chapters
Chapter 1 - The Chunin Exam
Submitted: March 27, 2008 • Updated: March 27, 2008
Word count: 1617 • Size: 8k • Comments: 3 • views: 300
Chapter 2 - Kajihana Akai: A Boy with a Dream
Submitted: March 27, 2008 • Updated: March 27, 2008
Word count: 1679 • Size: 8k • Comments: 3 • views: 284
Chapter 3 - A History Unfolds: The Dream with a Chance
Submitted: March 27, 2008 • Updated: March 27, 2008
Word count: 3274 • Size: 17k • Comments: 1 • views: 234
Chapter 4 - Thoughts in Motion: A Stranger Finds Help
Submitted: March 27, 2008 • Updated: March 27, 2008
Word count: 1915 • Size: 9k • Comments: 2 • views: 242
Chapter 5 - The Impressed Leader: A Dream Achieved
Submitted: March 31, 2008 • Updated: March 31, 2008
Word count: 2065 • Size: 11k • Comments: 6 • views: 225
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Y0URIMAGINARYFRIEND on May 15, 2008, 9:37:36 PM
tinystarkitten on April 4, 2008, 12:35:19 PM
rlkitten on April 2, 2008, 7:00:29 AM
flyingeagle13 on April 2, 2008, 9:54:56 AM
rlkitten on April 2, 2008, 1:19:23 PM
Alright, just let me get a link real quick....
http://forums.fanart-central.net/viewforum.php?f=16
Here's the link to "General Roleplaying" I have yet to figure out how to be accepted into "Advanced Roleplaying"- I haven't read that thread =/ This can be found in the second to last section in the forums, labeled "Writing"
Here, it's kind of like...a great big collaboration? Sort of? Agh- I'm not so good at explaining it- nobody explained it to me, so I think I'll just let you get a good idea of it by reading recent posts and the rules.
Oh yeah! The rules! MAKE SURE YOU READ ALL THE RULES:
Character Entrances
All the rules you gotta know
If you're into Zelda or Harry Potter, I have two RPs up and running, though I don't really suggest joining the Harry Potter one- it's dying.
Hyrule for Peace
Hogwarts~ Future
I highly suggest joining this RP I'm currently in, it's going very well- and you can totally join, if you don't mind a bit of reading (understatement...but I'm sure you can easily catch up- either that or request a summary from the maker of the RP through PM)
The Sound of Marching Gear
Maybe when you get the feel of it you could make a decent Naruto RP? I really want there to be one, but have no idea how to begin it -Nor any ideas when it comes to plot. Well, I hope you’ll consider RPing though!! If you do well enough, you can get away from all the amateurs and in with the Advanced! =D I’m still work’in on that myself X3
rlkitten on April 1, 2008, 12:01:24 PM
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Both Akai and Hinata seemed a bit friendly for people who've just met. Maybe this is just me, but I would think that they should say each others names a little less. Hmm. But, then, their set to be older than me, so perhaps the older you get, the more social you become. IT's just, even among friends, I wouldn't say their name as much. Like when he says "I am sorry, Hinata." or "Don't worry about it, Hinata" It just seems a tiny bit unnecessary considering they're the only two there.
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I don't mean to sound too nit picky- finding things wrong here, in this beautiful story, is hard ^^ And even then, I'm afraid that I might be looking so hard that I might make a mistake XO
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But I hope you'll understand the advice. Spaces- totally optional, I just find it hard to read on a computer screen. Names- no need to have characters address each other so much, especially if their not in a crowd where one can get confused trying to find out who their talking to.
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Beautiful chapter though! Akai actually reminds me of Lee a little bit X3 I'd love to do a collaboration with you some time- though I'm not entirely sure how to do one with writing.
flyingeagle13 on April 2, 2008, 9:54:08 AM
The reason they both use each others names so often is because they are both trying to be polite but are not exactly sure just how polite to be.
Thanks for pointing it out though. I'll be more careful next time.