Kerri??
Submitted April 17, 2009 Updated June 22, 2009 Status Incomplete | After getting kidnapped, girl finds herself in world where the supernatural exist and to find that she's not human, but a sorceress I don't have a title for my story yet Be harsh on the comments y'all cos i'm thinking of getting this published x
Category:
Fantasy |
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Taken
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: May 18, 2009
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Chapter 2 - Captor
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 18, 2009
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Chapter 3 - End of Her World
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 4 - Assigned
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 5 - Awaken
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 6 - Frustration and Desperation Can Do This to You
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 7 - Making Friends
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 8 - Temptation
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 9 - Knowing Your Purpose
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 10 - A Plan Backfired
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 11 - First Lesson
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 12 - Exhausted
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 13 - A Plan for Revenge
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 14 - Strong
Submitted: April 17, 2009 • Updated: April 17, 2009
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Chapter 15 - Betrayed
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: April 18, 2009
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Chapter 16 - The Point
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 17 - Knowledge
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 18 - Agony
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: April 18, 2009
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Chapter 19 - Discovery
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 20 - Persuasive
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: April 18, 2009
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Chapter 21 - Invasion
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 22 - Chased
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: April 18, 2009
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Chapter 23 - Barely Saved
Submitted: April 18, 2009 • Updated: June 11, 2009
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Chapter 24 - Living with the Guilt
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
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Chapter 25 - Finding a Babysitter
Submitted: April 21, 2009 • Updated: April 29, 2009
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Chapter 26 - Information
Submitted: April 24, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 27 - Painting Fun
Submitted: April 28, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 28 - Playing Hairdresser
Submitted: April 28, 2009 • Updated: April 28, 2009
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Chapter 29 - The Kiss
Submitted: April 29, 2009 • Updated: April 29, 2009
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Chapter 30 - The Truth About The Ex-girlfriend
Submitted: May 1, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 31 - Giving in to Temptation
Submitted: May 4, 2009 • Updated: May 4, 2009
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Chapter 32 - Seriously Cheesy Nicknames
Submitted: May 4, 2009 • Updated: May 4, 2009
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Chapter 33 - Sorry Carter
Submitted: May 5, 2009 • Updated: June 1, 2009
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Chapter 34 - Powerful
Submitted: May 5, 2009 • Updated: May 5, 2009
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Chapter 35 - Breakup and Makeup
Submitted: May 11, 2009 • Updated: June 1, 2009
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Chapter 36 - Trouble...With a Capital T
Submitted: May 11, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 37 - Oh Crap.
Submitted: May 11, 2009 • Updated: May 11, 2009
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Chapter 38 - Comforting
Submitted: May 17, 2009 • Updated: May 17, 2009
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Chapter 39 - The Kind-Of Plan
Submitted: May 17, 2009 • Updated: May 17, 2009
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Chapter 40 - The Ring With Her Name On
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
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Chapter 41 - The Dinner
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
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Chapter 42 - As The Knife Meets Its Doom...
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: May 31, 2009
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Chapter 43 - The Boss Knows?!
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: June 1, 2009
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Chapter 44 - Afterwards
Submitted: June 2, 2009 • Updated: June 2, 2009
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Chapter 45 - Registration
Submitted: June 7, 2009 • Updated: June 7, 2009
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Chapter 46 - Meeting in the Middle
Submitted: June 9, 2009 • Updated: June 11, 2009
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Chapter 47 - The Calm Before The Storm
Submitted: June 11, 2009 • Updated: June 12, 2009
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Chapter 48 - The Werewolf Cometh...
Submitted: June 15, 2009 • Updated: June 15, 2009
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Chapter 49 - What Happened
Submitted: June 16, 2009 • Updated: June 16, 2009
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Chapter 50 - He Is SO Drunk
Submitted: June 16, 2009 • Updated: June 16, 2009
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Chapter 51 - Damn Those Dreams
Submitted: June 17, 2009 • Updated: June 17, 2009
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Chapter 52 - Taken Care Of
Submitted: June 17, 2009 • Updated: June 17, 2009
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Chapter 53 - So That's The Way It's Going To Be
Submitted: June 18, 2009 • Updated: June 18, 2009
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Chapter 54 - Mick
Submitted: June 19, 2009 • Updated: June 19, 2009
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Chapter 55 - The Great Escape
Submitted: June 20, 2009 • Updated: June 20, 2009
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Chapter 56 - Not a Dream This Time
Submitted: June 21, 2009 • Updated: June 21, 2009
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Chapter 57 - She's Really Back!
Submitted: June 22, 2009 • Updated: June 22, 2009
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KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:07:58 PM
LOL! luff the ending. and im deciding to keep editing. i have a few ideas... if ull accept them of course... and OMG! i cant WAIT for the next chapter! im like BURSTING with excitement! and thats so funny how they hear eachothers thoughts that are only about them! wait does that make sense? and i blame homework for all my time issues too. lol. anyway... yeah. i think thats all. i really think u should keep up the writing. youve got a LOT of potential! btw, have you ever read the night world series? im just curious. cuz its rly good! u should read it if u get the time! and uh... ya i think thats it! night!xxnataxx on May 4, 2009, 8:02:31 PM
of course I want your advice...i need all the advice i can get loli've written up a few more chapters...i'll put them up maybe after school (:
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:48:54 PM
lolz. i still find the whole dr. who and dr. brown stuff funny! nice ending to the chapter! oh and i convinced my frend to read it too! she said she rly likes it but cant comment cuz shes not a member. figured id tell u anyway. convince you to publish it. btw, thought of a name yet? how about... umm... yeah nvm. my minds blank. ill keep thinking tho!KokoroTsuki24 on May 4, 2009, 1:22:09 PM
i like the part where she says shes trying to make him explode! lolKokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 1:55:19 PM
oo em gee! i REALIZED something! if she has no idea shes a sorceress, why did she react like that to the black cars? i mean i understand two would be freaky, but seeing just one wouldntve freaked ME out! it wuz like she knew who they were or something! did she? o.O btw, im realizing this know cuz im rereading while i wait. lolz. >w<xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:11:22 PM
yea...it's because it's not the first time they've been chasing her. it's just that she's managed to escape every time.hm...do u think i should say it so that everybody's sure?
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:07:42 PM
yes. no. maybe. i dont know! instead of like flat out saying it, maybe like have think 'not again' or something like that. or maybe 'do they ever give up?!' know wut i mean? and im sry i made so many darn replies! i realize now i shouldve just put them in one big one, but too late now! sry!xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:01:24 PM
yea...i'll think about it...maybe when i rmb lol or when i have time(again, i blame the homework)KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 3:16:45 PM
when arik tells her to close her eyes and she starts repeating him, try cutting her off at 'I' instead of 'may'. it sounds a bit better.xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:10:09 PM
where is this?KokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:05:42 PM
its, like in the um... 5th chapter... theyre going down the elevator thingy and arik says to close her eyes... that. part. and i will stop making those little correction comments if u like. but i would be happy to help find them if u dont mind. lolz. sry. i like to edit.xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:00:47 PM
yup. got it. thx. nonono i like u making comments...KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 5:38:29 PM
wuz the person that took shyam away, wuz that tyler?!xxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:09:45 PM
yeah lol..and he's gonna try to take kerri away too (which is going to like majorly piss arik off lol)xx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:03:12 PM
NO! the horror! i didnt wanna no the second part but oh well! and i totally KNEW it about shyam! ooh, im good. lol. and cant he just stick with the one girl?! SHEESH! hes so greedy! and go arik! defend ur girl! lol. had to say that. >w<xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 7:00:27 PM
lol i guess in a way, it's his job to like take pplcos he's like a ...well i'm not gonna tell u lol otherwise you're gonna know everyth
KokoroTsuki24 on May 1, 2009, 3:21:31 PM
ooh. i think a good title would be like sorceress k or something! lol. idk if that would fit or not. just a crazy idea! >w<xxnataxx on May 1, 2009, 9:11:51 PM
thanks (: (that's for your first comment lol) i was like "OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG" when i was typing the kissing scene lolhm...that isnt a bad idea...oh well...i still have trouble coming up with an awesome name, cos like i'm CONSIDERING (just considering) getting this published...
xx
KokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 8:31:56 AM
ooh! good luck! i wanna get my poems published. idk if theyd be god enough tho. :/ but ur story is like reading a book! except u have to wait for more chapters before u can read the rest. lolxxnataxx on May 2, 2009, 7:12:45 PM
lol thx. i dont know whether this book is good enough either...but...y'know...it doesnt hurt to give it a tryKokoroTsuki24 on May 3, 2009, 5:00:56 PM
no it doesn't hurt to give it a try. its like... reading twilight, or harry potter or something! and thats like a major compliment cuz both of those series are widely popular!xxnataxx on May 3, 2009, 6:59:59 PM
haha thxxKokoroTsuki24 on May 2, 2009, 8:44:56 AM
ok. i wuz trying to think of other titles since u might wanna publish and i wuz thinking maybe 'the unknown sorceress'? or maybe something along those lines.KokoroTsuki24 on May 1, 2009, 3:18:58 PM
omg! i cant WAIT for more! that was awesome! luffed it... as always! >.<KokoroTsuki24 on April 25, 2009, 3:30:28 AM
lol. nice. more please?KokoroTsuki24 on April 19, 2009, 5:34:29 PM
OMG! can u make more?! i am SO loving this!xxnataxx on April 24, 2009, 5:52:03 AM
i'm definitely trying. i love writing this. it's just that i dont have time grrrr... *curses homework*xx
KokoroTsuki24 on April 25, 2009, 3:26:11 AM
lol. same here. i hate homework. i like writing too. but my fave is poems. and i NEVER get the time! grr.