zukosavatarofthesunandmoon

Okay, let me just work up some ideas for the next chapter then!!! :D
Cuz I only update every now and then, yeah.... XP

Jack: Really? But...If you bring him back...he'll be on the Xiaolin side...he'll destroy us...
 
 
Nayami: I miss Master Chase...

hi waz up

(Funneh!)
 
Nayami: I...don't want any...
 
Raimundo: Come on! *waves a potsticker under her nose* Doesn't it smell good?
 
 
Jack: What?

Please, I am NOT flaming or anything, but Aimi is a definate Mary-Sue.

If you would like your story to be more interesting:
1) Don't make her have a tragic past. Pity isn't going to make readers like her more
2) No one, even in the Avatar world, has eyes that change colors
3) Admiral's daughter? That interferes with the story a lot. If he had a daughter, wouldn't we have seen her by now?
4) You cannot just link the past of hers with Zuko's. He was in love with Mai back then (or it's hinted), and he's not just gonna forget it likidy split.

I'm not trying to tear your story apart, but it could be much better if you made her more down to earth.

If it helps my justification, try taking a Mary-Sue test. They're everywhere. Just wanna help make the good the best!!

<333 Venette

If you want to talk to me about it, it's perfectly fine.

(not that much anymore)

Nayami: *Stops eating*

Raimundo: Nayami, you barely touched your food. Are you alright?


Jack: Yeah. Jackbots! Make us something to eat!

Nayami: *eating really slowly*
 
Raimundo: Eat up, Nayami! *pats her back*
 
 
Jack: Don't worry, I got everything. The robots are cool.

Fung: Foods sitting on the table, monks.
 
Raimundo: Finally! *runs into the dining room and set's Nayami down* *sits at his spot and starts eating* Food!
 
Nayami: *takes a bite* It's...good....
 
 
Jack: *Smiles*

Fung: Foods sitting on the table, monks.
 
Raimundo: Finally! *runs into the dining room and set's Nayami down* *sits at his spot and starts eating* Food!
 
Nayami: *takes a bite* It's...good....
 
 
Jack: *Smiles*

Raimundo: Come on, let's eat!
 
Nayami: ....
 
 
Jack: Nothing will ever happen to you...