Sohma, Kuroumo
Submitted September 21, 2005 Updated November 6, 2005 Status Incomplete | THIS IS MY FURBIE STORY. unfortunately, i dont own Furuba, and if anyone has any problems with this story i will delete it AGAIN, it is only back by popular demand. My character, Kuroumo, replaces Rin.
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Anime/Manga » Fruits Basket » Fan Characters (OC's) |
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Chapter 1
Submitted: September 21, 2005 • Updated: September 21, 2005
Word count: 1987 • Size: 10k • Comments: 2 • views: 438
Chapter 2 - Chapter 2
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 3 - Chapter 3
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 4 - Chapter 4
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 5 - Chapter 5
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 6 - Sidetracked 1
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 7 - Chapter 6
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 8 - Chapter 7
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 9 - Chapter 8
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 10 - Chapter 9
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 11 - Chapter 10
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 12 - Sidetracked 2
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 13 - Chapter 11
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 14 - Chapter 12
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 15 - Chapter 12
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 16 - Chapter 13
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 17 - Chapter 14
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 18 - Sidetracked 3
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 19 - Chapter 15
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 20 - Chapter 16
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 21 - Chapter 17
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 22 - Chapter 18
Submitted: September 22, 2005 • Updated: September 22, 2005
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Chapter 23 - Chapter 19
Submitted: September 23, 2005 • Updated: September 23, 2005
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Chapter 24 - Chapter 20
Submitted: September 24, 2005 • Updated: September 24, 2005
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Chapter 25 - Chapter 21
Submitted: September 27, 2005 • Updated: September 27, 2005
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Chapter 26 - Chapter 22
Submitted: September 29, 2005 • Updated: September 29, 2005
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Chapter 27 - Chapter 23
Submitted: October 7, 2005 • Updated: October 7, 2005
Word count: 935 • Size: 4k • Comments: 4 • views: 198
Chapter 28 - Chapter 24
Submitted: October 31, 2005 • Updated: October 31, 2005
Word count: 948 • Size: 5k • Comments: 6 • views: 202
Chapter 29 - Chapter 26
Submitted: November 6, 2005 • Updated: November 6, 2005
Word count: 1242 • Size: 6k • Comments: 4 • views: 205
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Lanathae on November 8, 2005, 3:47:52 AM
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angel_of_beauty_and_light on November 6, 2005, 6:49:12 AM
Nemya on November 6, 2005, 12:15:09 AM
Nemya on November 1, 2005, 3:06:21 AM
"Disgusting man" How true. Made me laugh so much xD
But it's such an amazing and wonderful chapter, and at the end it's so sad.. All beautiful, and then Akito comes and ruins it all. Typical x.X
And then Nari screaming at the end, oh dear such typical her. The peace was ruined by Akito.
Such awesome description of things, and it's great and very effective how it goes to the 3rd person at the end...
Hmmm. I don't know about her dying. Seems too sudden... But I don't think it'd do very well continuing for much longer, as this kind of seems the final death. What would appear a good idea (to me, I know it's a crummy idea) is if you had one more chapter, Kuroumo half-waking up in hospital, only she doesn't remember much at all and... I suck at decribing. But then she dies. Because you can't have something like this and not kill her off (awful choice of words) as this is kind of final. But I think you should have one more chapter as a kind of reflecting-on-things chapter, and you could be half-awake to see Gooey or whoever around your hospital bed. But that is it. And the chapter should be centered on your thoughts and yourself, as you are half-concious and not able to properly see around you. But then you should die. Sorry.
Marik: I /told/ you it was a stupid idea.
Mel: Yeah, actually, it is. But I'm not deleting it s it took me ages to write down!! Sorry for my pathetic ideas D:
But such an amazing chapter!!
angel_of_beauty_and_light on October 31, 2005, 9:50:51 PM
Anyways, I was gonna say about her getting fatally wounded, although her body would give up, my random insecure sucidal character gets stabbed, shot, caught in a bomb blast, almost eaten by lions (o.O) and many other things. Perhaps not by lions though.
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAND (you must have known this was coming) WRITE MORE PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!!! *begs* PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE, MY ENTIRE LIFE DEPENDS ON IT!!!
angel_of_beauty_and_light on October 31, 2005, 9:48:00 PM
It is *unable to controll hyperness* SO GOOD! AND SO SAD!!! WHY WOULD AKITO DO SOMETHING THAT MEAN?? HE IS SUCH A BASTARD, I HATE HIM! I HATE HIM!!!!!!!!!
*calms down* But of course she doesn't die. Because it is called Sohma, Kuroumo, and that ending wasn't stretched out enough after she died, like a funeral, and everybody crying, paying last respects. So that means she survived, again. This is like the tenth time she has been fatally wounded, surely her body would just give up.
Nemya on October 10, 2005, 5:52:16 AM
AWAAAA I'M SO SORRY I DIDN'T COMMENT ;___; WAAAAA ;__;
Anyways, Gooey is SCARY! All pinkified with PLAITS! No wonder Nari turned out all weird... o.O
I discovered something SCARY. YOUR STORY IS NOT ON MY FAVES LISTS. ARAGRAG it must have been when you deleted it!!!! RAGRAGA!!!!
*hits fave button 3568365290619562380965 times*
angel_of_beauty_and_light on October 8, 2005, 9:47:16 PM
angel_of_beauty_and_light on September 29, 2005, 8:09:31 AM
angel_of_beauty_and_light on September 29, 2005, 8:05:30 AM
angel_of_beauty_and_light on September 29, 2005, 7:54:12 AM
"I felt my hand brush against something hard. I groped for what it was, and pulled out a box, containing…cake mixture. I was nearly in the right frame of mind to kill Gure at that point in time. "
The other:
"taking a quick shower, and ridding my body of the clingy green algae I found in some annoying places."
Other than that, it iks delightful so far.
Lanathae on September 29, 2005, 6:57:30 AM
Nemya on September 29, 2005, 6:11:57 AM
ARGAR Its so good and I can finally comment yay I'm so happy!
Nyay, you meet Smeagol and Manning here in this chapter and you call him Gooey Yar hee hee, Nari who started it, although I think in real life it was actually Ani who started in nay oh well wow this is a long sentence no breathers, neh?
So, awesome chapter, yar, the Gooey is eeevil!
but you don't die in my story... you just nearly die.... hihihihi
muahahahahaaaa
anyways.... noooooooooooo... etc.