Fiercely I Love you, Suddenly I Lose You

you're hardly in any position to negotiate >:(

i will read the story later but will you read mine its called ~coming~ in the naruto series' at the VERY VERY bottom okay if ya read mine then i will read yours!

pain is beautiful but sometimes i wish it wasn't or at least that i could see it wasn't. ignorance is bliss

my gosh are you seriously a guy, dudes aren't supposed to see these things you know

oh wow i'm speechless. this is one of the best things i have ever read. reading this has made me want to draw or write something dark. it really hypnotized me into an evil trance. u've got real talent.

woah. that was so awesome. really makes you think, ya know.

That was.... So much emotion, you could feel it. ...coldly beautiful. I loved it

Woah...

dude... that was so deep... i could feel your hurt and your anger radiating through it... this is by far the best thing i've read on this site.

reading this has put me in some kind of dark mood, which only goes to show how full of life your story is...

really dude.. awesome job.. your art is amazing, you write some kickass shoot.. now if you can sing too.. you'll have the whole damn package :P


oh and btw... i kinda pictures morgan freemans voice in my head while reading it...

so weird :D

Oh my god...that was amazing!! Wootwoot!

It made me think of a love-hate relationship of some vitriol sort, much like the kind 'tween myself an' I. You had me bearing a huge stupid grin (I get emotionally/psychotically overwhelmed when I read great pieces) as I read in between every word of the first and second chapters. And the poetry? You managed the slant-rhyme technique like some kind of goddam master.

Just one question, (and seeing your response would prove to me if you actually saw this review) as you wrote the story (the second chapter in particular) did your mind just dictate the words to you as you wrote or did you go through many hours of ‘copy-editing’ and such? Got a feeling you wrote the words as soon as you thought 'em.

I’m sure you already get generous amounts of praise for this knack outside the web, but still, I want to put a review here because if the majority won’t do it, then I will. And I did.

I'll wait for the third installment of "FILY,SILY" but if you don't post the next, it's alright.

All in all

Thank you for this frackin' masterpiece.

sincerely
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A metaphorical beauty.


You just proved me wrong that there are more than four great writers (not myself included) on this website..

It's pissing me off to see that neither chapters had it's share of reviews; I don't know if it's because the people here are too immature to read it in the first place, or if those who read it were too fracking scared to talk about it.. but I will tell you about it and it was friggin' amazing..

I haven't read a poem put into paragraphs, or a story prosed into poetry the way this was done. Actually I haven't read a good story on FAC for some time {there really are people like If-I-Should-Die}, and all I've been looking at here was pure waste, but christ.. you made my day with this.. This thing was stellar every which way, many thanks to its profundity.